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Hmm, can't think of anything bad to say,so sorry. I do love how you did the bird/cat parts at the start/end, very clever at makign a point.

awwwww, tat's it? Please update soon, good beginning so far.

Yay! I'm so glad that you wrote this! It's very hard to find this pairing anywhere. Please continue. I don't have much to say with the constructive critisism so please update soon

It's hard to give constructive criticism when there's so little wrong with it. Personally, I can't write short chapters; I can't be that concise. I can write drabbles and I can write novels, but short stories are a bitch for me. I always like finding a well-written short chapter. A huge pet peeve of mine are badly written, underdeveloped short chapters that feel like the author is trying to say too much as once. It makes the flow of the story feel unrealistic. That's not the case with your story. You've found a good scheme if you stay consistent.

There you go. It wasn't criticism, but I hope it was in some way constructive. Hope you update soon.

I think i squealed in a high pitched girly voice almost 14 times while reading this one chapter! Its so adorable!! seriously where do u get these cute ideas???I can't stand angst sumtimes cus it makes me feel all sad n what not. Your story has cuteness that makes that angst go away . =^__________________^= yeshyesh! I think you need to make the chapters longer. I kinda got confused at some parts too but i forgot which ones o.O I hope to see another chapter up soon! *hugs and hearts all over* later gator! (i act like such a dumbas.s sumtimes)

....oh...I like it sooo~ much...please post more soon.....*___*

Oh my freaking gosh. I love you! This is the first Shisui Itachi story that I have ever seen. Thank you very much for writing it! Eto... For the constructive criticism, I really don't know what to say. This was the first chapter after all, and it was relatively short... Some of the transitions were a little bit vague and I had to stop reading to clarify that the scene was different than the one that preceded it. For example, the transition between the actual story and its reflection with the animals was, in the first part of the story, anyway, confusing; I also got a little tripped up when you went over your timeskip. Clearer transitions would greatly inhance the flow of your otherwise awesome story. I really can't find anything majorly wrong, so for my review at least, you'll have to content yourself with my tiny concrit. This fic is just that wonderful so far. Kudos!

Wow... I loved this. The extended metaphor of the sparrow and the cat was really lovely.

No real constructive criticism here. I just have praise. I like your characterization of Shisui. The background you've given him... It's very plausible and your depiction of how Shisui and Itachi become friends is also realistic. Well done!

Hm... I myself dabbled a little in the ShisuiItachi pairing and I don't think anyone else has. This is really a great fic and I love that you're using that pairing.

You write very well, which is also rare for fanfic writers. I hope you update soon^.^