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for Secrets and lies

by brook13baby13

person Dragon7
schedule February 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE UPDATE SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
person dragon
schedule January 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Grate chapter I am so happy the sasuke is the one that is prego. I can't what to read the next chapter so update soon.
schedule January 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm sorry but I can't understand what you've written at all. You change tenses too often, and sometimes your sentences make no sense. I think a beta reader would really help you.
person Dragon7
schedule January 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Grate start sasuke is such a basted but you have to love him. I cant what to see ween he and Naruto get together I hope that Sasuke is the one that prego. I can't what to reead the next chapter so keep on writing and update soon.
person Nathaniel
schedule January 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hello,

it's a little bit early to say if this is a good story or not. But you really should look for a beta-reader because there are a lot of mistakes in your text and that makes it really difficult to read it fluently.

So long
Nathaniel
person xenawp532
schedule January 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hell yes i loved it, i hope theres a 2nd chapter coming soon.