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Nani?!? All that over bunny?? I don't understand! What is going on? Who is the one who is obsessing over Naruto and 'took care' of Kyuubi? How is Sasuke going to react? Why does Sasuke decide to say bunny?--What was he remembering from his family life?--or is that utterly insignificant? What's he gonna do? Is he going to run after Naruto, leading to an all-out fist fight (followedbyhotsteamyboysexrawr)? *ahem* Anywho, great chappie. Naruto is very erratic, but I can see it going somewhere so I'll wait and see what you do next. Very possibly could be my new favorite story by you (though the Guardian is still right up there)

i was about to shut my computer down for the night when i started reading your story and couldn't stop until i'd finished every chapter...in other words, GREAT start and i can't wait to read more of your clever/original story!!

omg, that's what kyuubi called him, isn't it? jesus... and please don't tell me it was his dad that killed kyuubi and is now having incestuous thoughts about his son. ew... damn this story is getting good!! i can't effin' wait for the next chapter!! update soon!!

omg. who is naruto's stalker? can't be his own dad bah?! heh heh. and naru-usagi? lol. please update soon!

Wow, that was what Kyuubi used to call him ne? Damn this is sad, but in a good way. Poor Sasuke is walking on eggshells. And what's up with creepy stalker guy? You've really got me stumped on that one, it's not Orochimaru, or Kakashi, and I 'm really hoping it's not Naruto's dad cause that would just be WAY too creepy, but other than Jiraiya (and I'm pretty sure it's not him either) you haven't mentioned any other males yet, so I'm totally stumped. And about the kiss, I totally wasn't expecting Naruto to hit him, that was definitely interesting. So far your story line seems to be excellent, I can't wait to see where the hell this is going.

Gosh--did you have to add the evil obessed murderer? I think the story would be much better without that. Oh. well, I guess a lot of people are into that. The Oro shop scene was hot. I like the dynamic between Naruto and Sasuke. I wished you'd had the financee die of an accident and left the dad out of it. Oh well, It's not my story.

Uhhh, amazingly enough I remembered my password to log in so I can provide you with a review :-)

The setting is interesting and refreshing. The momentary lack of smut good - after all Naruto said that Sasuke don't have to do things he doen't want to (though I hope he wants to do some things in the near future :D). Though a little something is missing. I cannot exactly put my finger on it but sometimes the "reading flow" seems to be interrupted. For instance the scence in the plane when Naruto "introduced" his family. Even if Naruto is loudmouthed and... just Naruto I don't think he would present Tsunade and Jiraiya this way.

On a little side note: You don't have many spelling or grammatical mistakes in you story but the following one gave me trouble:
"[...] My company is a big software company…we design games too, so all you have to do is think of fun games and leave it to the rest to design it. We’ve all ready taken you on. So know one will know the difference.”[...]"
I don't know what the sentence before the last actually means and in the last it should be "noone", or? It took me 5 minutes to decipher that (actually till I read it out loud :-)... I'm not ever the brightest crayon in the box ;-)).

Anyway, I like the story so far
Nathaniel

this is very interesting. would like to read the next chapter soon! ^^

Good story. Fairly well written and very interesting. Good flow and plot is excellent.
I am soooo glad there is no smut yet. Mostly that stuff comes way too fast int he stories - call me old fashioned.
Can't wait to see what you get up to next.

So Naruto's a near narcoleptic (at least during car rides) and has crazy mood swings. Sasuke is oblivious to some things in the world, and other things he know's more than his fair share.

The details thus far are fantastic. I feel like I'm getting bits here and there, and you're not giving everything away at once! Which is cool. I liked Sasuke catching Tsunade's punch, and that panic mode=kissing is nice...very nice XD

I think you are perfectly justified and slipping in some details before developing the story further. It's important for character development. A lot of things are still mysterious, like his dad, Otogakure, and now his fiancee and her death! *gasp*

How will Naruto react to the kiss? How will Sasuke react to the kiss? How will Tsunade react to the kiss? Will Naruto concede to sharing a bed with Sasuke? Will Sasuke feel up Naruto while he's sleeping *rawr*?

Are Jiraiya brother and sister or brother-in-law and sister-in-law?

Keep updating this one! It's the best since the Guardian!! (hmm...which also needs in update).