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February 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
jesus, you can't leave it at that!!!! oh, this chapter was so charming, and cute, and sweet (loved the plushie part... so fav), and then that cliffie!! no! i'd never thought i'd say this but damn arashi!! omg, update soon, because i reeeeeeeaaaaaly want to know what happens!!
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February 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, there are so many questions I can't wait to see answered! Why is Arashi so obsessed with Naruto? Why does Naruto hate his father? I'm guessing he was probably responsible for Kyuubi's death (his threat to Sasuke lead me to that conclusion). But most importantly..is Sasuke okay!?
I also love how you've developed Sasuke and Naruto's relationship into something believable. They have the right amount of chemistry for a new relationship and I love the subtle moments where they find themselves growing more and more attracted to each other. You've done a wonderful job keeping them in character and I can't wait to see their relationship bloom! (:
I also love how you've developed Sasuke and Naruto's relationship into something believable. They have the right amount of chemistry for a new relationship and I love the subtle moments where they find themselves growing more and more attracted to each other. You've done a wonderful job keeping them in character and I can't wait to see their relationship bloom! (:
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February 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
SasuNaru 4ever!!!!! Guys look at Naruto does he really seems seme material!!!! He's way too adorable to be seme while Sasuke is way more macho!!!!!
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February 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
their family is so screwed up! and what makes it even more screwed is arashi going after naruto. but i still love this story. you make things so interesting!! i look forward to the next chapter!
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February 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
All in all, I think it was a good chapter. I am also happy that you decided to let both Naruto and Sasuke have their turns at topping. I can't wait to see what you have stored in the future for this story. You are awesome!
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February 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
great chapter! hot sex scene and it has to be Narusasuke becasue Sasuke is more submissive in ur story than Naruto!
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February 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is good, but take this out: (Lemon has almost ended. Last line must be read.)
It disrupts the flow, and right at the end of it. Trust in your readers to get that last line, and if they miss it, then it's their own fault for being hasty.
Sorry, but Author's notes in the middle of a story are a big pet peeve for me because of the flow dispution it causes. Think of it like this; you're all comfortable in your special little place with your nice smutty little daydream and then RING, RING, the damn phone jolts you right out of it. Then, whether you answer the phone or not, it takes you a minute to really get back into your daydream, if you can at all. Author's notes in the middle of a story are just like that damn phone.
That's why I turn my ringer off :)
It disrupts the flow, and right at the end of it. Trust in your readers to get that last line, and if they miss it, then it's their own fault for being hasty.
Sorry, but Author's notes in the middle of a story are a big pet peeve for me because of the flow dispution it causes. Think of it like this; you're all comfortable in your special little place with your nice smutty little daydream and then RING, RING, the damn phone jolts you right out of it. Then, whether you answer the phone or not, it takes you a minute to really get back into your daydream, if you can at all. Author's notes in the middle of a story are just like that damn phone.
That's why I turn my ringer off :)
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February 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
this story's great.... about ur poll... i think it would be nice if naru will be the seme and let sasuke play the other.. since he's the slave... but then again... it's up to you... hehe you're in charge (^^, i really love your fics... i don't wna rush u, but can u please update sooner... ^______^ please? haha...
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February 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
meow personally thinks that it should be narusasunaru. First of becouse sasuke is a slave and he wouldn't be comfortable with the idea. It would take some love and patience from his naruto to convince him that being seme is ok.Second - naruto in the begining wouldn't be comfortable with the idea either - cos 1.It's like betraying kyuubi somehow (in his ligic anyway) and 2. he's used to being sasuke's master 3. he has this 'no touching' issue - so when they would become lovers it would be easier for naruto to touch sasuke rather than be touched by him. Meow thinks that in this situation their relationships would start off as sex being the first actual step, and not the most important one cos after sex it would be the first kiss, the first touch, the first 'I love you' and in the end the first time naruto-uke, cos that would mean he complitely let Kyuubi's gost go.
That's what meow thinks.
Thought, please don't do just SasuNaru or NaruSasu. First, they are bouth to stubborn and dominating to accept being a permanent uke in the relationships, second their whole relationships as a pair would be gone - there's actually an intresting combination. They compliment each other but not in the sence of in\yan more of a when one of them is about to break, the other is being strong. They are what they need in each other - so they are different to each other in different situations.'I'm never the one you wish me to be, but from the first time our eyes met, I'm what you need me to be'
That's what meow thinks.
Thought, please don't do just SasuNaru or NaruSasu. First, they are bouth to stubborn and dominating to accept being a permanent uke in the relationships, second their whole relationships as a pair would be gone - there's actually an intresting combination. They compliment each other but not in the sence of in\yan more of a when one of them is about to break, the other is being strong. They are what they need in each other - so they are different to each other in different situations.'I'm never the one you wish me to be, but from the first time our eyes met, I'm what you need me to be'
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February 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great story, the twist on Arashi was interesting! Wasn't upset by it at all. As to the naru/sasu sasu/naru question, I have several thoughts and none are organized. *grins*
I don't see Sasuke as starting out on top just because of his training and the fact that I don't see Naruto trusting anyone that much at this point in time. However, I do see Sasuke as topping later in the story when the relationship develops especially as a sign of trust from Naruto. After all, it would be very hard for him to picture being with a girl if he is on bottom. Also it would serve to drive Arashi even nuttier to see Naruto giving himself to someone in that way that wasn't him.
Well, those are my two cents! Can't wait to read more!!
I don't see Sasuke as starting out on top just because of his training and the fact that I don't see Naruto trusting anyone that much at this point in time. However, I do see Sasuke as topping later in the story when the relationship develops especially as a sign of trust from Naruto. After all, it would be very hard for him to picture being with a girl if he is on bottom. Also it would serve to drive Arashi even nuttier to see Naruto giving himself to someone in that way that wasn't him.
Well, those are my two cents! Can't wait to read more!!