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May 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely love this fic it is very hard to find any Shino fics period(that dont involve him and Kiba). keep up the good work
note: work on tense verbs(past present and future tense) i have seen a couple issues with that nothing too major... Finish Onegai!
note: work on tense verbs(past present and future tense) i have seen a couple issues with that nothing too major... Finish Onegai!
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April 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm lovin this story! more please!
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March 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You're going to write a lot more....and soon, right?
*incredilous blink*
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*incredilous blink*
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March 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow! I'm also a fan of Shino/Saku, and in my opinion there isn't enough. This is really well written, and there's a plot, too! If you want to read another pretty good Shino/Sakura fic on ff.net, there this one called 'Butterflies'by Kagezuchi. It's pretty good. Do you know of any Shino/Saku fics on aff.net or ff.net that are good? Please email me back! I hope you update soon!!
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March 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awesome!! You updated!! Good author *pats head* the chapter was really good, I like Shino's softer, funny side.
You rock. Have a cookie *hands over cyber cookie*
Love!
You rock. Have a cookie *hands over cyber cookie*
Love!
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February 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This story has really grabbed my attention and I enjoy it very much. Please continue to write it.
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February 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
shannaro!!! update damnit!!!!!!!
this story is so addicting. i love it (makes me wish i could write like that dangit, sorry i suffer from writers block. ...off topic....) shino is so sweet and i like the whole secret cave and aunt thing unusual but interesting.
i beg here and now for the next chapter soon
please *puppy pout*
kodama~
this story is so addicting. i love it (makes me wish i could write like that dangit, sorry i suffer from writers block. ...off topic....) shino is so sweet and i like the whole secret cave and aunt thing unusual but interesting.
i beg here and now for the next chapter soon
please *puppy pout*
kodama~
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February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I've been reading this since you first posted it (I just *really* suck at remembering to review) and I jus wanted to tell you it's awesome. People just don't write for Shino enough, I love him ^^
So good job!! Update soon!
So good job!! Update soon!
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February 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very nicely written. The impact of the resurfacing memories is a nice touch too.
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February 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I've actually been meaning to read this (the title and pairing caught my attention when I saw it in the docket) but I've been so crazy-busy with my last semester of university that I've kind of abandoned all my old internet haunts. Anyway, I do really like the story--and you're right, we do have similar styles.
Don't worry about being "too descriptive." If you like giving detailed descriptions, keep working them into your stories. Writing isn't about a "right way" v. a "wrong way," it's more about finding your own way of doing things and getting it to work. I like short, staccato sentences and lots of dialogue with few tags (because if I do it right, you should know who's talking). I write how I think, which is pretty fractured but I think that lends itself to more organic writing, making the story sound more "real."
As far as anything constructive, I'd just say that you should probably introduce the conflict earlier on in the story. For PWPs, like "Creatures" it's easier to do away with the expected story format (intro, crescendo, climax, decrescendo, resolution) because you're pretty much just reading/writing for the smut (hehehehe). A story like this one seems more epic in nature, and while epics can take a while to develop, you need to keep your reader really, intensely interested in your story. Even if it isn't the main conflict, introduce -something- that will motivate your readers to want to -keep- reading.
You'll also want to keep an eye on how many characters you introduce (canon or original) because they can become hard to keep track of. I have a story on FF.net under a different pen name that I've pretty much abandoned simply because I had too many characters to write for and it was detracting from the story I wanted to tell.
I can't wait for you to update again (get a move on, Geek Squad!) I know how frustrating it is when your laptop goes down--My old laptop, Toshi, went belly up on me last year in the middle of a long night of research paper-writing and the one I have now fried its hard drive for no apparent reason on a Monday morning about a half hour before class. Good times, good times. I'm already having problems with it AGAIN because the power cord is being an obstinate brat and seems to keep the battery charged only when it feels like it, which isn't very often.
So I'll shut up now and patiently (who am I kidding?) wait for more. :D
PS: Thanks for the review on 'Creatures.' As far as the "Sabaku no Gaara" thing is concerned; I don't think that's his real last name. I just think he'd be the kind of person who would sign his letters "Gaara of the Desert" instead of just "Gaara" or "Kazakage." Boy has a reputation to uphold, y'know? ;)
Don't worry about being "too descriptive." If you like giving detailed descriptions, keep working them into your stories. Writing isn't about a "right way" v. a "wrong way," it's more about finding your own way of doing things and getting it to work. I like short, staccato sentences and lots of dialogue with few tags (because if I do it right, you should know who's talking). I write how I think, which is pretty fractured but I think that lends itself to more organic writing, making the story sound more "real."
As far as anything constructive, I'd just say that you should probably introduce the conflict earlier on in the story. For PWPs, like "Creatures" it's easier to do away with the expected story format (intro, crescendo, climax, decrescendo, resolution) because you're pretty much just reading/writing for the smut (hehehehe). A story like this one seems more epic in nature, and while epics can take a while to develop, you need to keep your reader really, intensely interested in your story. Even if it isn't the main conflict, introduce -something- that will motivate your readers to want to -keep- reading.
You'll also want to keep an eye on how many characters you introduce (canon or original) because they can become hard to keep track of. I have a story on FF.net under a different pen name that I've pretty much abandoned simply because I had too many characters to write for and it was detracting from the story I wanted to tell.
I can't wait for you to update again (get a move on, Geek Squad!) I know how frustrating it is when your laptop goes down--My old laptop, Toshi, went belly up on me last year in the middle of a long night of research paper-writing and the one I have now fried its hard drive for no apparent reason on a Monday morning about a half hour before class. Good times, good times. I'm already having problems with it AGAIN because the power cord is being an obstinate brat and seems to keep the battery charged only when it feels like it, which isn't very often.
So I'll shut up now and patiently (who am I kidding?) wait for more. :D
PS: Thanks for the review on 'Creatures.' As far as the "Sabaku no Gaara" thing is concerned; I don't think that's his real last name. I just think he'd be the kind of person who would sign his letters "Gaara of the Desert" instead of just "Gaara" or "Kazakage." Boy has a reputation to uphold, y'know? ;)