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July 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*starts singing some song from the Lion King* 'can you feel the love tonight blah blah blaaah blah blaaahhh' ok i'm done singing and i'll be serious now. this is my favorite chapter, its cute sweet and funny, lol i woke my roomate up just to read 'peanut m&m' part and then she was like "wtf its 3 a.m." started laughing and then she went back to bed. it reminded me of Big Balls by AC/DC. the only thing that kinda weird is when sasuke doodles on neji's forehead, before waking him up to go to the shooting range. i assumed neji wiped it of but... its like he its still there. undonno.
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July 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*starts singing some song from the Lion King* 'can you feel the love tonight blah blah blaaah blah blaaahhh' ok i'm done singing and i'll be serious now. this is my favorite chapter, its cute sweet and funny, lol i woke my roomate up just to read 'peanut m&m' part and then she was like "wtf its 3 a.m." started laughing and then she went back to bed. it reminded me of Big Balls by AC/DC. the only thing that kinda weird is when sasuke doodles on neji's forehead, before waking him up to go to the shooting range. i assumed neji wiped it of but... its like he its still there. undonno.
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July 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yay, I'm wonderful. :D
But anyway, I'm glad to beta for you anytime you want! I had a fun time being able to look it over, and it's a great chapter! You already got my compliments, though. x3 Actually, I'm sorry it took me a few days because my grandfather had a heart attack, so I wasn't able to access a computer due to being quite occupied with my family. I actually the editing in an hour or two. xD
But anyway, I'm glad to beta for you anytime you want! I had a fun time being able to look it over, and it's a great chapter! You already got my compliments, though. x3 Actually, I'm sorry it took me a few days because my grandfather had a heart attack, so I wasn't able to access a computer due to being quite occupied with my family. I actually the editing in an hour or two. xD
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July 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh, this chapter was so cool! It really was. The guns and all.
Awh, poor Neji, sleeping at work! xD Sasuke was really nice to him, letting him sleep the day away ^^
And then the shooting. I loved the way you wrote about Neji and Sasuke, especially about their feeling and all.
I hope you update soon again!
Neji's beginning to trust Sasuke, eh? That's a good thing too.
Now that Sasuke's taking Neji home (to Neji's home, I mean!), is he going to.. Well, obviously he's going to find out where Neji lives, but is he going inside or does he just drop him off there? xD Or maybe he's going to just visit him some weekend? xDD
Well, we'll see, ne? I hope you update soon again! Keep writing! Loved the long chapter! -hearts- xD
Awh, poor Neji, sleeping at work! xD Sasuke was really nice to him, letting him sleep the day away ^^
And then the shooting. I loved the way you wrote about Neji and Sasuke, especially about their feeling and all.
I hope you update soon again!
Neji's beginning to trust Sasuke, eh? That's a good thing too.
Now that Sasuke's taking Neji home (to Neji's home, I mean!), is he going to.. Well, obviously he's going to find out where Neji lives, but is he going inside or does he just drop him off there? xD Or maybe he's going to just visit him some weekend? xDD
Well, we'll see, ne? I hope you update soon again! Keep writing! Loved the long chapter! -hearts- xD
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July 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was truly amazing.
It's nice to see that Neji is somehow trusting Sasuke and how Sasuke wants to protect Neji (along with Itachi, for what I can see).
I liked this chapter a lot for the great interaction and details, it was too much fun to read (and Sasuke doodling on Neji's forehead, I was all "ROFL" jiji)
I'm glad you are continuing this story, I liked it a lot, and to be honest, I just can't wait for more.
See you soon!
It's nice to see that Neji is somehow trusting Sasuke and how Sasuke wants to protect Neji (along with Itachi, for what I can see).
I liked this chapter a lot for the great interaction and details, it was too much fun to read (and Sasuke doodling on Neji's forehead, I was all "ROFL" jiji)
I'm glad you are continuing this story, I liked it a lot, and to be honest, I just can't wait for more.
See you soon!
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July 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
DOING GREAT, I LOVE YOUR STORIES HOPE YOU UPDATE SOON. IS THERE GOING TO BE ANOTHER NEJI RAPE SCENE WITH OROCHIMARU THAT WOULD BE COOL.
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July 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good story so far. I just found it and decided to check it out. I love how you have everyone acting. It's different, but nothing outlandish. Good work with this chapter too. You could have made the break-up longer and drawn out; but I like it short and sweet. I can't wait to read what happens next.
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June 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh. My. God.
I love your writing so much that it's not even funny! xD (Your fic "Inbred" had fifty chapters when I started it and I read it all in one day. >>) Anyway, I love the way your portray all of the characters, and I love that Neji and TenTen finally broke up. TenTen = cool; TenTen + Neji = LAME. Orochimaru is such a creepy SOB, which you recreate so well that it makes me believe that he's gonna rape Neji on the show or something. xD I can't wait to see what happens next. Keep up your amazing writing for it makes me so happy. Good fics can be really hard to find.
By the way, you say that you need a beta? I wouldn't call myself any sort of professional, but I'm very good with grammatics and making suggestions in writing. I can always be a back up help if you want it. Just contact me! :3
I love your writing so much that it's not even funny! xD (Your fic "Inbred" had fifty chapters when I started it and I read it all in one day. >>) Anyway, I love the way your portray all of the characters, and I love that Neji and TenTen finally broke up. TenTen = cool; TenTen + Neji = LAME. Orochimaru is such a creepy SOB, which you recreate so well that it makes me believe that he's gonna rape Neji on the show or something. xD I can't wait to see what happens next. Keep up your amazing writing for it makes me so happy. Good fics can be really hard to find.
By the way, you say that you need a beta? I wouldn't call myself any sort of professional, but I'm very good with grammatics and making suggestions in writing. I can always be a back up help if you want it. Just contact me! :3
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June 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, so stupid that I didn't realize e-mail addresses were hidden. *smacks self*
riomasu@prodigy.net
riomasu@prodigy.net
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June 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hooray!! You're back again!
I liked this chapter, was nice to see the impact of Neji's change in his life and then how Orochimaru shows up being all evil and stuff (nice, really) and his new EVIL plan, hooo, you just write him so nice, I like it!.
Well, even if the chapter was short, the point was clear, so it's okay!
Now. you are correct, English is not my mother language, It's Spanish. But I'm doing better and I founf a nice and really nice BETA, so I'll be fine.
Thanks for the update!!, keep going.
I liked this chapter, was nice to see the impact of Neji's change in his life and then how Orochimaru shows up being all evil and stuff (nice, really) and his new EVIL plan, hooo, you just write him so nice, I like it!.
Well, even if the chapter was short, the point was clear, so it's okay!
Now. you are correct, English is not my mother language, It's Spanish. But I'm doing better and I founf a nice and really nice BETA, so I'll be fine.
Thanks for the update!!, keep going.