rate_review Reviews

I have a correction for you if you'd like to fix it. When Tsunade is speaking she says : “Fine, whatever. Tell him when you see him I want him in the clinic. He’s falling behind in his workload. Tell him I can have him fired if he doesn’t start doing his job, ten-year or no.” Just so you know, ten-year should be tenure, meaning a kind of contract you have at a job site that insures you always have a spot there to work.
I'm liking the story so far. Although it's hard for me to imagine Naruto as a doctor-in-training, it's still pretty entertaining.

The idea and the story itself is very good. Very Original if you ask me! I hope you update soon... No complaints and no recomendations

sabaku..thats Garra I think :)

lovely fic~

lovely Garra~ <3

haha~ if this is like 'house', i want to watch house :3

lovely fic :D

oh ho! sasuke's cheating. bad boy~

This is awesome. Please continue it soon! I'm curious about your Garra. He cracked me up.

First chapter: I really like the imagery. You're really good at painting a clear picture of the character's surroundings. I'm seeing some mixing of tenses so you might want to work on that.
~The Flame Reviews~

Sorry, I forgot to review for chapters 2 and 3. But basically this review will cover all of them. I really like the idea of your story. And I like your story in general. There are just some things you need to work on. Grammar,tenses, spacing (it's really hard to read those huge paragraphs!), and some punctuation. Also, could you please inform us at some point in the story how old everybody is? I'm not quite clear on that. Oh, and something I thought might help you write lemon scenes (I'm not sure if you need this I just want to help you out). http://resource.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600090008 It tells you what's true and what's myth about m/m sex. Anyway, please update! I really would like to read more. And I hope this critique helps. :)
~The Flame Reviews~

woot