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for Why Orange?

by NinjaToadsAteMyBaby

person Anon
schedule April 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 13: That’s an interesting observation you made about the strength of the characters. Maybe what applies for one person doesn’t apply for another person. I don’t think it’s totally concrete. Someone may have some kind of technique that’s useful against one person, but useless against another. It depends upon who’s fighting who.

Kyuubi’s got a point, Naruto; Sasuke could’ve been God knows where if he’d been let loose. . . . . Ahahaha, LOVE Sasuke’s line: “How long did that old hag knock me out for?” XDDD . . . . (*snicker*) This little flirt scene reminds me of something I read from a book once: VISITOR: “Hey, they kick you out for doing that.” PATIENT: “Not me.” (Cuz he’s stuck there.) VISITOR: “No, me.” XD . . . . LOLLLL!! “Or something’s not up, and it should be.” XDDD It’s probably some aftereffects of the drugs. . . . Okay, I like the side-effects, but I didn’t think Tsunade would immediately come out and say the third one. I kinda pictured Sasuke or Naruto bringing the matter to her attention (awkwardly, probably). . . . Heh. Interesting how Naruto doesn’t put up a fuss about bottoming. I like how he protested being a consistent uke, though. ^_^ . . . . Wait, is Sasuke not a virgin? õ_ô (Damn. Oh well, I hope it was with just one person (two at most).)
Hah! Knew his cooking would be good. . . . Yeah, “Down, Uchiha Pride. (*shove*)” ^^ . . . . So where are the fangirls today? . . . . “You must come here a lot.” That means Naruto just keeps getting better and better at them. I like how he’s doing it, but I can see Rock Lee and/or Gai also doing it. ^^ . . . . I wasn’t expecting that kind of answer either. Wow. . . . Sasuke’s still an avenger? His brother’s still out there? Or has “avenger” just been imbedded into Sasuke? . . . . Oh, that’s so awesome! I half expected Naruto to say he wouldn’t cash them in because the workers sabotage the toys or something, but I like the story idea better! =D

Great line, Sai: “Scare no, disturb yes.” ^^ I love it, but I’m kinda with you, man. ^^ . . . . “A distinct lack of sympathy.” Yeah, one could say that. X3 . . . . Makes me wonder what your (TW’s) reaction was to seeing him in chapter 386 of the manga.
Question: Where were the fangirls at the arcade? And if they were around, how’d they react to seeing Sasuke and Naruto so, um, friendly?
person Anon
schedule April 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Nothing really offensive in the review ahead, but there is some bluntly honest criticism that’s not altogether favorable (although the greater part of the chapter is really good). Just a little heads-up; I don’t want TW getting hurt or offended by anything. T_T

Chapter 14: Hah! Knew those two were your favorites! ^^ . . . . (*snicker*) “O.O WHAT?!” XDD . . . . Yeesh, that was easy. Too easy in my opinion. . . . (*reading the Warning*) Ooh, good stuff ahead! =D`` . . . . (*reading the Disclaimer*) If that was happening, there would be a huge fight about who owns Naruto. ^^; (A fight which I will sit back and watch. XD) Also, Cartoon Network censors stuff anyways, so that’s not totally reliable. (They censored a lot of bloody parts as well as the famous Kiss Scene and Kabuto’s line of, “Bet she’s single.”)

Hi, you two! (*waves idiotically*) Nice entrance line, Kiba. :) . . . . I keep saying, “They should’ve just made Sasuke go to Suna!” I don’t understand why they didn’t! õ_õ . . . . Gay? What about Sakura-chan? (I kinda prefer the bi Naruto.) . . . . Love how Naruto responds to Sasuke’s grunt. He probably knows that if Sasuke was really against it he would’ve just said “no.” As it is, Naruto will take what he can get! ^_^ . . . . Oh, duh, Sasuke, he hasn’t been on one before. (I thought you were a genius.) 9_9 . . . . (!) They’re gonna be a~loooone up there, aren’t they? 6_6 . . . . Guess I was wrong.
Naruto likes sugary pop songs? o.O I would’ve thought some fast rock, maybe. . . . Hmm, maybe I’ll discover some new music this way (usually when I hear a song in a fic, I look for it to listen to).
I kinda figured it was a lie. (But sometimes I wonder if it was a lie to himself as well.) . . . . Lol, “You think I kiss all my friends?” ^^ (You’ve got friends, Sasuke? Wanted ones, I mean? XD) . . . . Oh my. 6_6 . . . . “Let me enjoy you.” That’s a cool line. . . . Once again, I thought it was a little too short and fast. õ_o Slow down and take your time with it; let it build up, even if it was just a blowjob. . . . Oh, goodie! Sleeping together! :heart: . . . . Aha! I knew Sasuke was taking the setting for granted! ^_^
I hate you, girls. I hate hidden cameras unless it’s a situation for blackmail (one in which the blackmailee is the one who wins (usually)). No one should see that stuff unless it’s totally by accident. No cameras. (. . . Wow, I really went to town on this rant. Sorry about that.) -_-;
Oooooh, naked already. (*drool*)
Okay, I know Naruto is the vessel for the fox, and the fox sometimes emerges, but like you and Kishimoto and a lot of other people believe (and you stated earlier): Naruto is not a fox. Hate to criticize, but I don’t get it why people call him a fox. (Unless it’s in a sexual way, of course.) . . . . I get the disturbing feeling that they’re going to be unpleasantly interrupted, thanks to two interfering busibodies (*glares at Ino and Tenten*) . . . . Has it been 24 hours yet since the sedative ran off? I know it’s the next day, but I’m not sure if they made it to 24 hours. . . . Knew it. -_- Those girls had better be in biiiiig trouble that will make them regret it. I mean it. . . . I’m pretty sure it’s correctly tagged as “An Emergency,” Sasuke. -_-;; . . . . Oh, yeah. Those girls had BETTER pay, big-time. D:< .

Yeah. Yeah, you are rather evil. But forgivably so. . . . Oh, so it was YOU who gave her the camera! You better run, TW, because I’m sooo coming after you! Grrrrr. . . ! . . . . . XD Just kidding. . . . (*calls to Sai and Itachi*) Way to go, guys, for throwing her out in time! ^_^ . . . . “Where am I supposed to get lemon inspiration from?!” Evidently you’re related to Jiraiya. ^^
person Anon
schedule April 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Same warning from previous chapter applies here. Bluntly honest. But I enjoyed the chapter. Watch out, there are dire wishes for some characters in here.

Chapter 15: Oooh, threatening Itachi, you’ve got nerve. o_o . . . . Why “Twizzler”?

“When I find out who [. . .] shove them up their ass.” I hope you do, Sasuke. And, uh, just fireball the girls without holding back; I’m sure that’d discourage some of them. As for killing an innocent bystander, well, by the sounds of it, there doesn’t seem to be many “innocent” bystanders if they’re spreading the photos or stalking you. If you get too mad, just terrorize the fangirls behind you. . . . Wait a minute. Good idea, but that also means more pictures. Don’t they want to avoid that? õ_ô . . . . Oh, good, it was short. I hope none of them had cameras ready.
Tsunade, I hate you for laughing about the pictures; I’m okay with you for laughing about the stunt Naruto and Sasuke played. . . . Personally, if I see a real-life photo of anyone having sex, I’d turn away. Those girls aren’t just fangirls in that world, they’re freakin’ voyeurs. (There’s a difference between fangirl and voyeur.) . . . . Heh, yeah right, Tsunade. More like you scared the bejeezus out of them. X3 (Of which I commend you.)
Ino’s there? I hope she gets busted, big-time. (I rarely drop grudges like that easily.) . . . . So the boycott’s still on, eh? Cool. I hope this won’t disrupt it too badly. . . . “Ino was seized with the impulse to twit Sasuke and Naruto.” Um, what? “Twit?” õ_ô . . . . I’m so going to slaughter Ino. Or maybe I can hire Itachi to do it. (Yeah, still mad.) . . . . Thank you, Shikamaru. I owe you one. ^_^ . . . . Whatever you do, Shikamaru, imbed in her mind that she should not ever EVER do that again.
Kakashi, I hate you too. . . . Oh, never mind, Kakashi, I thought you were being perverted. . . . Call me a hypocrite, guys, but drop the nicknames. >_< . . . . Nice touch: “These aren’t affected by your death glares.” Sasuke’s fangirls were affected? That surprises me. You must give a demonstration. As for the yaoi fangirls, all the more reason to take my advice, Sasuke, and Katon them.
I hope nobody installed cameras or microphones anywhere. . . . When girls do that, it’s a good excuse to be a man and SHOW THEM THEIR PLACE (by whatever means necessary). I mean, charisma is one thing, but if they won’t back off, treat them like you would an opponent you’re serious about fighting. Or take some leaves out of Itachi’s or ‘Rochi-kun’s or Sasuke’s books and learn the arts of Scaring The Living Daylights Out Of People With Just A Look. >:D

Actually, that wasn’t too much of a cliffhanger. It was a cute ending line if you ask me. . . . Good! I’d like to see that oneshot! (So long as they don’t do anything sexy in it.) x_x;
person Anon
schedule April 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I USED A RATHER OFFENSIVE WORD IN THIS REVIEW. I MEAN NO OFFENSE TO ANYONE EXCEPT FOR THE CHARACTER I’M REFERRING TO.

Chapter 10: Dude, that is frightening. Whatever you did, TW, it must’ve been really hardcore to make Uchiha Itachi sick. O.O

Love the title. ^_^ I’ve got a thing for Sasuke when he’s mad. ^_^ . . . . Either that guy whose neck is caught in Sasuke’s grip has balls of steel, or he’s retarded. . . . After hearing this guy’s story, I deduced the latter. I gotta say, though: the way he told his story was a little odd. It just didn’t sound natural to me. . . . Obviously the guy should just try raping another young-but-powerful ninja and see what happens. You don’t fuck with ninjas unless you know exactly what you’re getting into, because you might just lose something very important to you. (Depending on the ninja you’re trying to fuck with, the results may vary about what’s at stake.) . . . . I wonder how many other kids that guy raped. He obviously had a thing for them. (Sorry, I’m really pissed off right now, so that’s why I’m being kind of cynical.) . . . . Oh, now you state “The man was obviously an idiot.” I figured that out from the moment he said anything to Sasuke! õ_õ . . . . I’m really glad Sasuke thought clearly about bringing these guys to the Hokage. Hopefully Tsunade will raise all the hells. ^_^ (That’s my psycho look, by the way.)
Lollll!! “So that she could rip the council to small bleeding pieces -- verbally.” XDD . . . . “Every kunoichi but Sakura had cried?” I hope they did more than just cry. They’re ninjas, for God’s sake. . . . Uh-oh. Sakura’s going to go postal, isn’t she? . . . . Exile, eh? Cool. Maybe they’ll be less protected that way. . . . Love the details on Sasuke’s rage. :heart: =D
I really, really hope Hinata won’t take it too hard. . . . I really liked that ending! =D

I loved ‘Rochi-kun’s true form! I thought it was cool! =D . . . . Yeah, he’s an evil parasite (totally), but I’m gonna give you one take on it that you probably don’t want to hear: It goes to show that being cute won’t always save you from turning evil; anyone’s susceptible to it. Sasuke just missed it too, remember? (Actually, I kinda like it when fictional villains are cute when they’re kids; makes a cool twist.) . . . . Oh my. Neji “active?” >_> . . . . Where’d Itachi go, by the way? Is he throwing up too?
person Anon
schedule April 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 6: Raining. Not my idea of a beautiful day. Overcast . . . now that’s a beautiful day. ^_^ . . . . And I’m sure that song could be rewritten for anybody and anything. Don’t ask me to do it, cuz I don’t know how, but I’m positive that it can be done. ^^

Lemme guess: Iruka’s got Kakashi over. -_- . . . . (*snort*) “Way too overprotective.” Good call. ^^ . . . . (*sigh*) Knew it. Kakashi, please don’t do anything while I’m around, I’m kinda stuck with Naruto and/or Sasuke or someone else, so I can’t leave when I want to. -_-; . . . . “Naruto you have the support of [. . .] Iruka and me.” And yet, despite all those people, there are still enough village idiots who find ways to make Naruto’s life hell. ô_ô . . . . Heh. Nice parting line, Naruto. I’d listen to him, Kakashi. ^_^ . . . . Eugh. Iruuuukaaaa, waaaait, I haven’t gotten out the door yet. x_x (Sorry, TW, I’m not into Kakashi/Iruka. XD)

“Silent but Deadly.” Very appropriate in their line of work. I like it. ^_^ . . . . In other words, “Pot calling the kettle ‘black’,” right? . . . . Oh, Kyuubi, that’s mean. Tell him what the hell you’re talking about! We don’t want him dying of shock! õ_õ . . . . Wow. Naruto sure stated that problem well. ô_ô . . . . Oh, sheesh, Sasuke, don’t get all upset over an understandable concern. Jeez. (Can’t ask anything around here.) ¬_¬ . . . . Umm, TW? I hate to say this, but I think the action in the story is moving a little fast. It seems kind of . . . I dunno, unreal to me. õ_ô . . . . Ahahaha! Hickey! Where’d that come from? ^^ . . . . (to Kyuubi) Mean! . . . . (*snicker*) “Girlfriend.” (*looks at Sasuke*) >_> . . . . Good timing, Kakashi. And I prefer your old excuses. -_-; (Although it is pretty funny for those who have no clue what he was talking about. ^^) . . . . 4 jounin still in their regular team. Sounds a little old to me.

person Anon
schedule April 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 7: So somebody created a version of that song? Cool. I knew it could be done! ^_^ . . . O.O Love the warning! Sounds good! =D

I thought C-rank was more of protecting from wilderness and half-assed idiots trying to steal stuff, and B-rank was more like protecting from professionals. õ_ô . . . . (*snort*) “As if standing on his own would take too much energy.” Lol. X3


Boy, that was random. o_o . . . . I would’ve thought Sasuke could’ve figured that out on his own, about Naruto getting some grace from his training with Jiraiya. . . . Uh, I thought the way Naruto explained what’s real and what’s not needed a little work. Sounds kinda choppy to me. Sorry. (*sweat*) . . . . “I want to see the parts of you that you keep locked away.” >_> (Nah, I knew what he meant, but still. ^^) . . . . So this story is kinda like a romance story? . . . . Didja hear all that, Naruto? He practically proposed to you. ^_^ . . . . Wow, they got down to it pretty fast. . . . (*chuckles*) “When are we going to tell Sakura that I gave you that hickie?” ^^ . . . . I wonder how Sakura’s gonna take it.



Loved Sai’s and Itachi’s reactions to the chapter. ^^
person Anon
schedule April 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 8: I was with you on Chapter 343. I was freaked out as hell. I mean, I was glad he wasn’t going to just hand himself over on a silver platter to ‘Rochi-kun, but I was worried as hell that he was gonna get beaten or something. . . . Itachi, you sadist, leave her alone. . . . Lol about your disclaimer. XD

(*reading the Chapter Title*) Good luck, you guys. Don’t die. . . . I wonder if Naruto’s cooking skills are gonna be another surprise for Sasuke.

She’s feeling dread, eh? Oh dear. õ_o . . . . Heheh, “This is weird. Really weird.” ^^ . . . . For God’s sake, Sakura, 3 days is no big deal. Lighten up, girl. Oy. õ_õ . . . . Lol, love how all three of them said in pieces, “You’re on time for once.” XD . . . . Will you shut up about the dolphin already?! ò_ó (XD)

Kyuubi’s got a point, Naruto. If anything, Sasuke’ll just be more protective. . . . Okay, the Kyuubi calling Naruto “Naru-chan” seemed a little much to me. ^_^; . . . . Ohhhh, I see now. That’s more overprotective than I would’ve guessed. It’s enough for jealousy. Yuh-oh. But I gotta say, I can understand some worry or concern, but this range of jealousy seems a little much; he just jumped to a conclusion without checking into it. õ_ô And jealous over a friend? Goddammit, Sasuke, lighten up for crying out loud; Naruto spends more time with you than he does with Gaara anyways. õ_õ . . . . Those last two paragraphs were sweet. ^_^ If Sasuke’s got the time off, though, why can’t he go?



Wha--? You had to give away that Gaara’s involved with a Hyuuga? WHY? (*annoyed*) õ_õ . . . . I’m gonna guess Neji, because I feel weird about guessing Hinata. -_-;
person Anon
schedule April 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 9: It’s gotta be Neji, then. . . . (*to Itachi and Sai*) Guys . . . go do that somewhere else. -_-

There should be a fashion show for Naruto or something because of this fic. ^_^ . . . . “Those days must [. . .] time like that.” That’s one way of putting it. ^_^ . . . . I like the line about Gaara having trouble sleeping; makes sense. =D . . . YES! I knew it was Neji! ^_^ . . . . “Red tape?” Please explain. And once again, love the next line about Gaara and sleep: “He gets cranky when he doesn’t sleep.” Got that right. ^_^

So surprise him and show up there, Sasuke.

Hard for me to picture Gaara laughing. ô_o . . . . Again, what’s the red tape? . . . . That was a cute scene.

Uh-oh. Sasuke, don’t lose it. Or . . . well, maybe scare them a little. >_>

Jeezus H. Christ (‘scuse my vulgarity), you freaks, it’s a festival. Go find something else to do than torment someone; it’s just not worth it. Sasuke, unleash everything you’ve got on them. ^_^



You didn’t know what they were up to?? O.O;
person Anon
schedule March 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
(I review as I read.)
This is one I’ve been dying to read for a while.
Chapter 1: First line, and already it sounds cute. ^_^ . . . . Oh, that’s kinda clever: “Naruto’s mindset determined which head he sat on.” Cute. ^^ . . . . They’re being kinda open with each other, aren’t they? That’s a little unusual. . . . The answer to the title already? . . . . Wow. That’s a cool reason. I like it. . . . (*snicker*) “Well it’s not like I’m [. . .] is the next best thing.” XD . . . . Oh wonderful. (*sarcasm*) Two idiots who like each other and have no freakin’ clue the other likes them back and are both afraid to try stuff. (I’m not bashing the fic, it’s just something I see in a lot of stories, fanfiction and real books, that always makes me wanna knock some heads together.) . . . . Love how Sasuke’s going through the scenarios in his head. Heheh, “I don’t have much to lose other than my pride.” Didn’t that mean a lot to you, Sasuke? XDD I love how he’s not freaking out about it. ^^ . . . . Ah, so they’re jounins now. That would make sense with them being a little more open to each other. How old are they now, I wonder? . . . . “I have no sense of style whatsoever.” XD I dunno, Naruto, I always thought you looked pretty hot when you were 15, with the orange and black and the long ties to the hitai-ate. (Got no style, my ass.) . . . . Cool deal, Sasuke. Love the addition of “Anything legal.” Good thing you caught that. ^^ This should be fun.
Aww, so Sasuke can’t do what Naruto might think up for him? Darn. But this looks good too.

Oh boy, dialogue A/Ns. Those can be fun. Is Itachi your favorite character? Cuz he’s a good one. ^_^ (Mine’s Sasuke, though Itachi’s somewhere on my list. ^_~)

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person Anon
schedule March 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 2: (*snort*) The A/N was hilarious. XD
Tight? What, is Sasuke slimmer than him? Either way, Naruto must look gorgeous. *_* . . . . Does he still call her “Sakura-chan” out of habit then?
“An irritant?” (*giggle*) . . . . LOL, how Sasuke got rid of Lee! XD
“White Boy Rapper?” Oh please tell me it’s Rockstar. >_< . . . . Nice reasoning, Naruto. (Thank God you and I agree too. *sweat*)
Huh?? “These pants are so tight you can tell my religion?” Sounds hilarious, but I don’t know what it meeeaaaans! XD' But I love the second line, too. He’s got some great lines in this. XD . . . . Love the descriptions of how Naruto reacts to the clothing. ^^ . . . . HAHA, Sasuke liked that one! XD . . . . I like Naruto’s line about practicality vs. style with him. ^_^ . . . . Just out of curiosity, what magazine or book is Sasuke pretending to read? . . . . Heh. Trust the guy to know what a guy might like. ^_^ . . . . Whoa, that’s one hell of an outfit. Please accept it, Naruto. (I wonder how that was in the store. Kinda convenient, wasn’t it? Not complaining, just saying. ^_^) . . . . Shoes? You’re kidding, Sakura! Practicality, here! He’s not a girly shoe-freak! Oy! õ_õ
Good, Naruto, putting your foot down like that. You and I should get along well. ^_~ . . . . Oooh, cool! Kinda like superhero boots! =D

Huh. Itachi’s pretty open with you, eh? You guys seem pretty close (good thing you weren’t closest, otherwise he would’ve killed you. *sweat*)
Thanks for the religion explanation. I started thinking of that, but I wasn’t sure. (So . . . is he circumcised? >_>) And yeah, I’d like to know about that Kawaii no Jutsu, please. (I get the feeling I’ve seen it in a little comic somewhere.)