rate_review Reviews

Aaaaaaaaaaaah! I love this story. I think i know what Kyu is doing. ^^ Anyways I can't wait for the next chapter!

I do hope you know you are one of my favorite people in the whole world......Just for the records.

Naru gots an apology....I would have bitch-slapped them. I'm a vindictive bitch when I or someone I love is treated even similar to that. My brother hated that fact since we kiddies.
Anyway: Wonderful chapter and I can't wait to see the next one! Please tell me when you update: kiki_yaoi@yahoo.com

Ja ne!

Sorry I haven't been on in so long. I kinda lost my internet cause my mom took it away.

Anyways, I just read 16, and I have some things to say. It's good, but I think there are a little too many details in some parts. You have to leave some of it to the reader's imagination. I'll review the others once I read them.

17-I really don't think that Jiraiya of all people (I mean, come on! He's obsessed with spying on women at the Onsen!) would actually watch anything NaruSasu, or any other Yaoi/Shounen-Ai pairing and not pry his eyes out by hand. Although, the phrase you used when calling the Onsen Incident "Icha Icha material", it implies that all of the Icha Icha books are Yaoi (I think they are. If KakaIruka were real, which is very probable and is kind of implied in the show, then I don't think Kakashi would go around reading a straight porn book).

I forgot to mention that in 17, with the jutsu, it is implying that SasuNaru IS their worst nightmare pairing.

Your chapters are near flawless. There are only minor things here and there that need fixing, so there's really nothing to comment on.

Did you read chapter 347 of the manga yet? It's..."special"...in a yaoi fangirl kinda way. lol.

Interesting. You kept me reading when you put in that little twist. It kept me from thinking about how the fight scene wasn't that good. You should do that more often, and by the way, if you tell people that you suck at fight secnes, they're just gonna expect them to be horrible. If they complain, then you can re-read your own chapter and come up with some creative criticism.

Kashima: Could that have been better! I don't think so!
Gaara: Yeah, but you're a total Sasuke freak. *mumbles* Among other things
Kashima: Duh.
Gaara: Sure, make me feel loved.
Kashima: I try. You're in the fic too, in the hottest way possible might I add.
Gaara:*rolls eyes* Stop, you'll make me blush.
Kashima: Don't raise my hopes like that, emotional expression, from you? I'd pay to see that. Hmm...
Gaara: I swear to you, if you come up with any more hairbrained ways for me and Neji to hook up in the hopes of seeing a look on my face that cannot for once be described as 'stoic', I'll Desert Funeral your fingers.
Kashima: You wouldn't.
Gaara: *grins evilly* Watch me.
Neji: Is she fantasising again?
Gaara: What do you think?
Neji: Huh, what else is new.
Kashima: You guys are mean. Shika and Sasuke are nice to me.
Shikamaru: Since when?
Sasuke: Yeah, I think I missed that.
Kashima: Aaargh!
Sasuke: Weren't you supposed to be reviewing the fic instead of arguing with us?
Kashima: Huh?
Shikamaru: Ditz, you're supposed to tell T.W. what you think of her story.
Gaara: She's fantasising about me and Neji again.
Naji: Probably Sasuke and Naruto too.
Sasuke: Wouldn't doubt it.
Shimamaru: What about me?
Kashima: *brightens* Shika-kun! *glomps*
Shikamaru: I had to ask.
Neji: I think that's the only Het pairing that ever crosses her mind.
Shikamaru: Shut up and get her off me, I can't breathe.
Kashima: Shika-kun!
Gaara: Kashima, just get on with the rview.
Kashima Huh? Oh, right. T.W. your story rocks, and I love the pairing, snap, ne? Keep it up, update soon. You're a great writer. Ne, is anyhting actually going to happen between Tsunade and Jiraiya? And is Itachi gonna show up? Plus...what was with Sasuke's Mangekyou Sharingan, is he gonna be able to do that again? Also, is everyone gonna find out who everyone is dating at some point? Aaaanywho, your story rules, and tell Itachi to try using ice-cream, aparently it makes Gaara squirm.
Neji: Shut up!
Gaara: WHAT! You little...Prepare to be desert funeraled.
Sasuke: Uh, Gaara, if you kill her she can't write you and Neji into any more fics.
Gaara: Can I at least Desert Coffin her ass?
Neji: Go ahead, I think there's some ice cream left by the way.
Kashima: Hang on a minute!
Sasuke and Shikamaru: Leaving!
Kashima: I hate you.
Sasuke: No you don't *leaves with Shikamaru*
Neji and Gaara: Don't worry, we hate you more. Ja ne! *leave*
Kashima: Oh yeah, if you hate me so much why are you still here?
Gaara: *pokes head back in* Because you buy us ice cream. Ja! *leaves again*
Kashima: *sighs* It's a good thing I like them. Keep up the good work T.W. Ja ne!

Venny: O.O ............

Vivi: Amazing, you got him to be quiet~! I am not worthy. -pretends to bow down at your feet-

Venny: So....much.....yaoi.

Vivi: Ooooo, yaoi over load, eh? Not for me, although it was close. Your story it was....it IS...!

Venny: amazing, I love it!

Vivi & Venny: Plz update, oh great authoress!

Venny: BYE-BYE!

~Vivi & Vanny

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