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March 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
As to Naruto's clothes the original colors are fine.
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March 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Iruka avenged Naruto? He did all that gore-filled payback? Yucka-ducka but YAHOOOO! I never imagined Iruka as an ANBU...he always seemed timid. I was thinking Sakura would be the one who went after those jerks but I ain't complaining!
In regards to the clothing description, let me say this. I strongly dislike when a reader tells an author what they can and should do in thier stories. Let me give you another example...I have another work under the Original/Erotica/Sex section. One of my reviewers told me that a plot introduction happened too early and maybe that it was also unecessary. If you want his outfit to be the way you wrote, leave it be. You are the Creator...you should have complete control with what happens in YOUR story. I say leave it.
Sorry for the rant...Xenobia
In regards to the clothing description, let me say this. I strongly dislike when a reader tells an author what they can and should do in thier stories. Let me give you another example...I have another work under the Original/Erotica/Sex section. One of my reviewers told me that a plot introduction happened too early and maybe that it was also unecessary. If you want his outfit to be the way you wrote, leave it be. You are the Creator...you should have complete control with what happens in YOUR story. I say leave it.
Sorry for the rant...Xenobia
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March 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like it alot so far!
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March 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
O_O Ooooooooooo..... *makes grabby hands at Iruka* share?
Nice chapter! I really didn't see Iruka coming out of that one!
Nice chapter! I really didn't see Iruka coming out of that one!
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March 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
WOOOOAAAAH!
Iruka's gangsta! He disemboweled the dude. Damn. Well....he had it coming. Poor Sasuke lol. I don't blame him for his actions either. I woulda gone nuts if i found out that way too. Oh, and as for the clothes thing...i dont think i minded the first option so much. But why a white sun on a green shirt for the second one? I don't get it. Well either way. It doesn't bother me i guess. Update soon!
Iruka's gangsta! He disemboweled the dude. Damn. Well....he had it coming. Poor Sasuke lol. I don't blame him for his actions either. I woulda gone nuts if i found out that way too. Oh, and as for the clothes thing...i dont think i minded the first option so much. But why a white sun on a green shirt for the second one? I don't get it. Well either way. It doesn't bother me i guess. Update soon!
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March 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yay that was a great chappie, but I do kinda wish
they wouldn't have sedated sasuke. Those guys have
it coming, grrr. anyway, can't wait untill the next
chapter. ^_^
they wouldn't have sedated sasuke. Those guys have
it coming, grrr. anyway, can't wait untill the next
chapter. ^_^
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March 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Nooo!!
The chapter was too short!!
DX
Update soon please :)
The chapter was too short!!
DX
Update soon please :)
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March 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*twitch* Rape is ugly but of a child? Naruto deserved so much better. Glad Kyuubi took care of the attempted-rapist. BTW, I saw 344. Orochimaru's true form is truly gross! Sasuke's elemental sword
was pretty cool though, ne?
was pretty cool though, ne?
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March 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I don't really know what to say. This chapter is so cute yet so sad at the same time. *I* nearly punched the wall when I heard about poor little Naruto nearly getting raped. A homocidal ninja is a sexy ninja. Just look at Gaara! And that scene when Hibata says that she's helping her nii-san get permission to move countries is just so adorable. Don't you just love Hinata sometimes?
I await your update with antisipation!
Till then, toodles!
tenshixxx
I await your update with antisipation!
Till then, toodles!
tenshixxx
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March 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
To HELL with merely exile, kill the jerks! Oh please, please tell me that they wander too close to Suna...
When Gaara finds out, those jerks don't stand a chance in hell of surviving!!
Poor Naru-chan! He was only five years old, dammit!
I think I'll go think some evil thoughts and cry a little. Does Sasuke wait for Naruto to come home or does he go see him? Never mind...don't answer that; I think I can wait!
Snuggles,
-X-
When Gaara finds out, those jerks don't stand a chance in hell of surviving!!
Poor Naru-chan! He was only five years old, dammit!
I think I'll go think some evil thoughts and cry a little. Does Sasuke wait for Naruto to come home or does he go see him? Never mind...don't answer that; I think I can wait!
Snuggles,
-X-