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February 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I liked this chapter alo, probably more so than the others for some reason. It just seems like the heart to heart Naruto had was so necessary. And the image of an embarrased Iruka always tickles me :). Okay, me being me, i couldn't help but notice just a few slight grammar things that escaped you in your much-appreciated rush to post. Where you said Iruka's face was beet red by now, "I knocked something over. So what bring you here?", you meant what brings you here. Where Kakashi says "Chakra enforced ropes are childsplat for me." I know you meant childsplay, and where it says, "After a while Naruto calmed down and looed up at Sasuke," you meant looked. Anyway i've really enjoyed this story...and don't think that insinuation Kyuubi made didn't go lost on me either. Update soon!
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February 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Me likey, anymore coming soon?
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February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oohhhh, i loved this latest one. So they finally kissed! Awesome. You even managed to put in a little angst in it. Not bad at all. It gives Sasuke something to fight against, neh? Naruto does deserve love so badly. That last line was killer though. I'm gonna steal your heart and make you love me...well I think several fangirls fainted reading that!
BTW, i tend to do this sometimes simply because for some reason i always notice, but i noticed a small grammar error where it says, "Sakura hugged Naruto, "Thanks for tresting me to lunch even though you didn't get to eat." I think you probably meant "treating me to lunch" right? Well thought i outta point that out so if you're ever editting you can fix it. Update soon!
BTW, i tend to do this sometimes simply because for some reason i always notice, but i noticed a small grammar error where it says, "Sakura hugged Naruto, "Thanks for tresting me to lunch even though you didn't get to eat." I think you probably meant "treating me to lunch" right? Well thought i outta point that out so if you're ever editting you can fix it. Update soon!
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February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
He I really like this so far. And I would love to see the picture ^_^
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February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
"And the shirt has more holes in it than one of Kakashi's late excuses!"
*dies laughing*
*dies laughing*
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February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
like both chapters. so is Iruka going to be supportive big brother or freaked out mother hen?
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February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I am loving this...especially the payback the village is getting for the way they treated Naruto.
Please continue...
Please continue...
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February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awww, Sasuke took Naruto to a picnic and no more rotten food. YAY! So Sasuke's serious here. That's good. You knows some may claim Sai to be annoying but he does erve his purpose here and there ya know. Good update!
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February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
that was extremely cool and cute. the whole boycott thing and then the picnic... so very sweet. great job.
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February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
luvd both chapters Xd. a jealous uchiha is a good uchiha in my opinion. cant wait to read more XD