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well it seems a little OOC first off, I dont think sakura would go on a killing spree no matter how pissed she is, she isnt a murderer unless its to protect her life, which the only person ive seen her try and kill but didnt really (his granny did) was sasori. Secondly, Ino acts like a wuss, and Hinata acts obsessive and mean, which isnt how both of them act at all. Toward the end it started getting good, and even though the first few chapters dont make sense i would like you to continue with this story. Thanks and happy writing.

interesting story
only thing I don't like about this site is that there are no date stamps on the stories. How can I tell if this fic is dead when I cant tell when it was last updated?

wow....I have to say, I'm loving this story! :D

I really hope you keep updating it!!!

OOH, this is going in my SQUEE folder!! i wanna read moooo~ooore! ='( ANYWAY, plz email me when you update this WHICH YOU'D BETTER my email is deannathx@comcast.net

I've noticed that you haven't updated this fic in over 5 months. That being said I'm not sure if you're planning on adding more to this story or giving up on it. If you do plan to continue I would like to make some suggestions and give my opinion about a few things. First of all, your story isn't a bad one and I think that you have a good idea in general as far as Sakura leaving after being heart broken and miserable, then being offered to become a member of the Akatsuki. Yet, there are somethings I felt the story could do without. I really wasn't impressed by the scene between Naruto and Hinata. In my opinion, if felt rushed and it wasnt very moving to me, the reader. I didn't really know why their marriage was ending, why Hinata wasn't the same person anymore, or why he even married Hinata if he was in love with Sakura.

I also don't really see a point in the Sasuke/Ino abusive relationship. Not to say that it's a bad idea, but maybe it would be better as a seperate fic. Something I did notice was the first line of the story was "Sasuke Uchiha was married." Yet, a couple of paragraphs down she said "She didn’t want to end up like everyone else, and she sure as hell didn’t want to stick around for the happy couple’s wedding."




As far as I can tell Sakura/Diedara should be the main focus and it seems they aren't being focused on enough. Or when they are it also feels rushed. This could be because I'm a detail whore. Your grammer and spelling isn't a problem which is always a plus. I don't want you to think I'm flaming you. Like I said before your story has amazing potential and you have good ideas, but I think this story needs to not only have more details, but more of a background story to the characters. For example, something that tells us "how everyone left her alone and stranded." Perhaps some flashbacks? All in all, this is your story, your creation. I don't mean to nit-pick this story or try to belittle your vision. I just wanted to share my opinion.

please, please write more i've been dying to find out what happens next!!!! and ur doing a very good job of keeping deidara in character. . . . well for this kinda story anyway, but please continue and i'll be your minion for forever more!!!!!!!!!!!!

your number one fan puff

This story is wonderful i love it!!! plz plz plz update soon i cant wait anymore..lol well email me when you do update this story rocks!!!!!!!!!!! THANKS!
~Sarah

dude this fic is frigging AWESOME!!!! lol update soon!