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February 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
The grammar in the beginning was definitely a turn-off because it interrupted the flow of the story, but once you got toward the middle and down to the bottom, it made up for it! I'm always interested in those disinterested characters that are thrown off their axis by another that doesn't quite fit the mold of norm...so I am anxious to see how the story between Naruto and Sasuke unfolds; whose perspective will you use? how does Sasuke snag Naruto? Is Naruto even gay? Is Sasuke? Will Sasuke have to seduce Naruto or vice versa?...If you polish up the grammar, it will definitely draw more people into the storyline! Best of luck to you on your 1st fic! ^-^
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February 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
the descriptions and the flow of the story's really good. it's quite catchy too. not catchy funny but catchy since the flow is quite elegant. loved the part how sasuke was described.
nice ending statement too. can't wait for more. :D
nice ending statement too. can't wait for more. :D
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February 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
WOW THIS IS A PRETTY GOOD FIC! I CAINT WAIT TO SEE WAT HAPPENS IN THE NEXT CHAPTER. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON!!!!!!!!
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February 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This sounds soooo cool! Can't wait until you update!
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February 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was a total WOW experience! I was compleately enchanted by the way you write! Awsem! pleas update soon!
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February 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i liked the style
i've never read anything like that
recently i'd been getting bored of high school fics, but this i'd like to read more of, it intrigues me
good start!!
i've never read anything like that
recently i'd been getting bored of high school fics, but this i'd like to read more of, it intrigues me
good start!!
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February 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Pretty damn good so far I can't wait see what happens next update soon please.
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February 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Interesting, I do hope you decide to continue this story. It should be interesting to see where you decide to go with this story. ^^ Please update soon, I am anxious to see future chapters.
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February 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i love your intro. very well written. sucks you right in. i'm eagerly looking foward to your next update.
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February 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hmmmm....i read this a long time ago (on ff.net and on TONFA), and i had instantly warmed up to the idea of it. it's too bad i never saw an update to it. I hope this means you are finally able to continue this story. I really do think that this story has a great deal of potential, and i would like to see how it continues. I will be keeping track on this story, so i wish you the best of luck on it!
-Jenn
-Jenn