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June 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 26: (*sigh*) I kind of imagine Deidara saying/thinking that (“I wish I could blow this place up”) but maybe not so much Orochimaru. Although, since it’s Konoha we’re talking about here, I guess it can be overlooked. . . . (*snicker*) Love Orochimaru’s dry greeting to Tsunade. . . . Heh. And Sasuke’s all ornery. ^^ . . . . Man, Orochimaru’s making me sick with this little act. (*green*) . . . . (*sigh*) I guess I don’t care for Kakashi too much in this story. -_-;
Sorry for the crit, but THIS is more of what I consider a filler. Sorry.
Sorry for the crit, but THIS is more of what I consider a filler. Sorry.
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June 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 27: “Now the Uchiha was even more feared by those who were against him.” I would probably say that sucks, but if it keeps them away and quiet, then that’s good news to me. . . . One would’ve thought the people would’ve learned not to get too close to Sasuke when he’s like this. . . . Too bad, Kiba. Hey, Ino, where’ve you been? . . . . That’s sick, that joke Jiraiya made about wanting both of them. I prefer to think that he’s turned off by the idea of two guys. . . . Oh god, this is getting sick. (*throws up*)
Naruto likes it rough, doesn’t he? . . . . Man, why are the sex scenes so short as of late? The incest scenes went on longer than these! õ_õ
Naruto likes it rough, doesn’t he? . . . . Man, why are the sex scenes so short as of late? The incest scenes went on longer than these! õ_õ
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June 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 28: Lmao, Lee is so hilarious. XD . . . . Yeesh, Sasuke’s scary when he’s like this. This has got to be rough on Naruto. . . . I prefer Shikamaru/Temari, but Shikamaru/Ino’s okay too.
Oh! And there is the Sand trio! ^_^ . . . . Somebody kill Orochimaru and Kakashi for me. And Tsunade as well. Oh yeah, and throw Jiraiya in there, too. None of them know how to mind their own business. . . . (*snicker*) “So you two still act like this? Even though you’re together?” “It’s kind of hard to get over.” X3 . . . . And there are the cravings.
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Oh! And there is the Sand trio! ^_^ . . . . Somebody kill Orochimaru and Kakashi for me. And Tsunade as well. Oh yeah, and throw Jiraiya in there, too. None of them know how to mind their own business. . . . (*snicker*) “So you two still act like this? Even though you’re together?” “It’s kind of hard to get over.” X3 . . . . And there are the cravings.
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June 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 29: Wuh-oh. o.o
(*snicker*) “OF COURSE IT HURTS YOU FUCKING MORON!” XDDD Love that line.
Oh man, that’s creepy. X_X . . . . Wow. That was the easiest birth I’ve ever read about. ô_ô . . . . “Is she dead?” Lol. =)
That’s a sweet name.
(*snicker*) “OF COURSE IT HURTS YOU FUCKING MORON!” XDDD Love that line.
Oh man, that’s creepy. X_X . . . . Wow. That was the easiest birth I’ve ever read about. ô_ô . . . . “Is she dead?” Lol. =)
That’s a sweet name.
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June 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 21: It is not taking too long! ò_ó
2 months, eh? Wow. . . . I like how Kakashi said that they deserve their privacy. But, erm, (*ahem*) I’d prefer it if Kiba stayed straight and Neji had gone out with . . . someone else. >.>; . . . . Jeez, I’d rather Tsunade talk like that. (*sweat*) . . . . Love how disturbed Kakashi is.
(((Hey, this question just occurred to me: When Sasuke’s on his period, where does the blood come out? I mean, does he have a vagina or something? (God, I hate that word XP) And you keep mentioning the blood on his stomach, and that seems pretty high up. Okay, back to the story now.)))
(*snicker*) “It’s said out of love.” Strangely, I can hear Sasuke saying that in a dry voice. ^^ . . . . Lemme guess: Lube or condoms? . . . . BOTH! ^_^ . . . . Heh. Naruto’s so crude. And Kakashi’s not that big of a pervert, actually (so long as he doesn’t spy on them or make inappropriate suggestions). . . . (*snort*) This is funny: “It’s nobody’s business what we do!” “Well excuse me! You told him what we don’t do!” XDD . . . . 10 minutes seems a little too long to me. . . . You spelled “definitely” as “defiantly” again. (*sweat*) And, boys? He is not sick, he’s actually being very mature there.
Hell, no. That was NOT a filler. It had a point. (I think.)
2 months, eh? Wow. . . . I like how Kakashi said that they deserve their privacy. But, erm, (*ahem*) I’d prefer it if Kiba stayed straight and Neji had gone out with . . . someone else. >.>; . . . . Jeez, I’d rather Tsunade talk like that. (*sweat*) . . . . Love how disturbed Kakashi is.
(((Hey, this question just occurred to me: When Sasuke’s on his period, where does the blood come out? I mean, does he have a vagina or something? (God, I hate that word XP) And you keep mentioning the blood on his stomach, and that seems pretty high up. Okay, back to the story now.)))
(*snicker*) “It’s said out of love.” Strangely, I can hear Sasuke saying that in a dry voice. ^^ . . . . Lemme guess: Lube or condoms? . . . . BOTH! ^_^ . . . . Heh. Naruto’s so crude. And Kakashi’s not that big of a pervert, actually (so long as he doesn’t spy on them or make inappropriate suggestions). . . . (*snort*) This is funny: “It’s nobody’s business what we do!” “Well excuse me! You told him what we don’t do!” XDD . . . . 10 minutes seems a little too long to me. . . . You spelled “definitely” as “defiantly” again. (*sweat*) And, boys? He is not sick, he’s actually being very mature there.
Hell, no. That was NOT a filler. It had a point. (I think.)
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June 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 22: Ahaha, Orochimaru¡¯s sudden appearance. . . . Was Sasuke startled, too? ^^ . . . . Is Orochimaru cool about his son going out with Naruto? . . . . (*snicker*) ¡°Naruto it¡¯s not hard to figure out. (*sigh*)¡± ^^ ¢¾ . . . . XD And then, ¡°Shut up, I¡¯m hungry.¡± XD So real. . . . Heh, ¡®Rochi-kun finds it funny. I can totally see him laughing about it. XD . . . . I¡¯m having a hard time hearing him say ¡°Well, duh.¡± It was funny, though. . . . I like how Sasuke still calls him ¡°Orochimaru.¡± That makes sense. . . . Oh, that bastard. Trying to get Sasuke to call him ¡°dad¡±. Yeesh. What a pest.
Are they sleeping together, then? . . . . See, I told you, Sasuke! Well, okay, I didn¡¯t tell you, but you should¡¯ve told ¡®Rochi-kun to lay off the towns too! It¡¯s funny, though how ¡°Orochimaru got an earful.¡± ^^ . . . . (*snicker*) Nice suggestion, Naruto. ^^ I can picture him saying it kinda sleepily, too. ¢¾ . . . . Let¡¯s hope that Orochimaru won¡¯t walk in on anything or (heaven and hell forbid) spy on them. (*sweat*) . . . . Oh, well, what do you know? There¡¯s the answer to my question right there. Is that his birth canal? (He¡¯s gonna have it rough when he gives birth.) . . . . Jeez, Naruto¡¯s starting off pretty fast. Shouldn¡¯t he try it slow first? . . . . (*snicker*) ¡°Be quiet, dobe, and be happy that you got me.¡± ^^
That . . . was . . . uh, yeah. You said it. (*sweat*)
Are they sleeping together, then? . . . . See, I told you, Sasuke! Well, okay, I didn¡¯t tell you, but you should¡¯ve told ¡®Rochi-kun to lay off the towns too! It¡¯s funny, though how ¡°Orochimaru got an earful.¡± ^^ . . . . (*snicker*) Nice suggestion, Naruto. ^^ I can picture him saying it kinda sleepily, too. ¢¾ . . . . Let¡¯s hope that Orochimaru won¡¯t walk in on anything or (heaven and hell forbid) spy on them. (*sweat*) . . . . Oh, well, what do you know? There¡¯s the answer to my question right there. Is that his birth canal? (He¡¯s gonna have it rough when he gives birth.) . . . . Jeez, Naruto¡¯s starting off pretty fast. Shouldn¡¯t he try it slow first? . . . . (*snicker*) ¡°Be quiet, dobe, and be happy that you got me.¡± ^^
That . . . was . . . uh, yeah. You said it. (*sweat*)
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June 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 23: LOLLLL! “Orochimaru didn’t seem to mind; at least he knew his son was having fun.” (*laughs uncontrollably*) . . . . (*sweat*) Seeing Kakashi and Iruka . . . I get this feeling of dread upon me. . . . Nooooo! Not that couple! ;_; (Sorry, but that couple scares me for some reason.) . . . . I would’ve thought Iruka would’ve approved. They’re more of “protection” than “sexual gifts.” When I hear “sexual gifts” I would imagine toys or videos or something like that. But the most Kakashi gave them was stuff like protection.
Heh. I get the feeling that Sasuke’s only grumbling halfheartedly. =) . . . . “Is Kyuubi getting frisky?” That’s a good way of putting it. ^_^ . . . . (!) Is it . . . could it be. . . ?! . . . . (*blush*)
Oh noooo, she’s gonna see! ;_; . . . . Man, that was mean. (*shakes head*) -_-
Heh. I get the feeling that Sasuke’s only grumbling halfheartedly. =) . . . . “Is Kyuubi getting frisky?” That’s a good way of putting it. ^_^ . . . . (!) Is it . . . could it be. . . ?! . . . . (*blush*)
Oh noooo, she’s gonna see! ;_; . . . . Man, that was mean. (*shakes head*) -_-
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June 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 24: Awww, cute first sentence. ¢¾ It¡¯s all WAFFy. ¢¾ . . . . Uh-oh, he¡¯s preggers. . . . Man, I don¡¯t know how anyone can make it to the bathroom in time to throw up when they¡¯re already feeling it. (*green*) -_-; . . . . (*snicker*) ¡°Sasuke¡¯s been very scary lately.¡± ^^ . . . . Ahahaha, Sasuke totally got Naruto off-guard! XDD ¢¾ . . . . (*snort*) ¡°Some dick head?¡± XDD
Hey, if Naruto and Sasuke know that the cycle hadn¡¯t happened for about 2 months, don¡¯t you think they would¡¯ve, you know, suspected? . . . . Oh boy, Sasuke¡¯s not going to like being dragged in without warning and away from his mission. (*sweat*) . . . . Yup. I was right.
Tsunade¡¯s making me . . . feel a little sick when she acts like that. (*sweat*) . . . . I¡¯m totally with you, Sasuke.
Hey, if Naruto and Sasuke know that the cycle hadn¡¯t happened for about 2 months, don¡¯t you think they would¡¯ve, you know, suspected? . . . . Oh boy, Sasuke¡¯s not going to like being dragged in without warning and away from his mission. (*sweat*) . . . . Yup. I was right.
Tsunade¡¯s making me . . . feel a little sick when she acts like that. (*sweat*) . . . . I¡¯m totally with you, Sasuke.
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June 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 25: Oh boy, Sasuke is not pleased. . . . Doesn’t surprise me that he can’t go on missions. Figured he’d be pissed as hell about it. . . . Heh. Sasuke’s all “RAWR!!” ^^;;;
I don’t hear about many fics where Sasuke’s the one who gets pregnant. Interesting. . . . Naruto, if I were you, I’d save the jokes for a safer time. For the moment, try to imagine walking on eggshells without using chakra or weapons for help. . . . (*snicker*) Kakashi’s being absolutely no help. Sasuke, why don’t you just throw up on him? ^^ . . . . Now I disapprove of Kakashi. This is what merits the label of “pervert.” . . . . Oh boy. Dad knows. (*sweat*)
‘Rochi-kun is invited to Konoha? Now I’ve heard everything. o_o
I don’t hear about many fics where Sasuke’s the one who gets pregnant. Interesting. . . . Naruto, if I were you, I’d save the jokes for a safer time. For the moment, try to imagine walking on eggshells without using chakra or weapons for help. . . . (*snicker*) Kakashi’s being absolutely no help. Sasuke, why don’t you just throw up on him? ^^ . . . . Now I disapprove of Kakashi. This is what merits the label of “pervert.” . . . . Oh boy. Dad knows. (*sweat*)
‘Rochi-kun is invited to Konoha? Now I’ve heard everything. o_o
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June 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 16: Interesting chaos. The village is going crazy. . . . And Itachi¡¯s at large once again.
I like how protective Naruto is. And how the Kyuubi¡¯s pointing it out to him.
(*sigh*) Really, Tsunade. If you¡¯re going to blame yourself, do it for picking such weak-assed ANBU. They should¡¯ve known better than that. (MEAN CRITICISM HERE, YOU DON¡¯T HAVE TO READ ¡æI mean, I¡¯ve seen movies where innocent 10-year-olds have played tricks like that and got away with them. And Itachi¡¯s, like, 19? 20? And a prodigy? He could¡¯ve done way better, and the ANBU could¡¯ve been waaay sharper.) . . . . Question: Where are all the girls in this?
I like Itachi¡¯s line: ¡°Don¡¯t be like that.¡± (*shiver*) . . . . You do a really good job when you make Itachi creepy in these scenes. . . . Come on, Sasuke, you can do this, come onnnn. . . . HELL YEAH, that was cool! =D The snake genes have also kicked in, eh? I like that part with the spitting venom. =D ¢¾
That was a cool image, of Sasuke going all snakey like that. I liked it. ¢¾ . . . . So Naruto and Sakura left, too? That surprises me. Oh yeah, and I wonder what it means that Sasuke went directly to Orochimaru like that. Sounds ominous to me.
I like how protective Naruto is. And how the Kyuubi¡¯s pointing it out to him.
(*sigh*) Really, Tsunade. If you¡¯re going to blame yourself, do it for picking such weak-assed ANBU. They should¡¯ve known better than that. (MEAN CRITICISM HERE, YOU DON¡¯T HAVE TO READ ¡æ
I like Itachi¡¯s line: ¡°Don¡¯t be like that.¡± (*shiver*) . . . . You do a really good job when you make Itachi creepy in these scenes. . . . Come on, Sasuke, you can do this, come onnnn. . . . HELL YEAH, that was cool! =D The snake genes have also kicked in, eh? I like that part with the spitting venom. =D ¢¾
That was a cool image, of Sasuke going all snakey like that. I liked it. ¢¾ . . . . So Naruto and Sakura left, too? That surprises me. Oh yeah, and I wonder what it means that Sasuke went directly to Orochimaru like that. Sounds ominous to me.