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Chapter 17: Four months? Wow. . . . Boy, jounin too. A lot has happened. ô_o . . . . Yeah, I knew Naruto had no business telling anyone about Sasuke’s hermaphroditism. . . . What the hell. What is with Orochimaru and attacking villages? And what is it with Sasuke and not including small towns as well? ò.ó . . . . (*snicker*) I like the way Shikamaru describes cloud-watching as “therapeutic”. ^^ . . . . Hah! And Shikamaru has no shame about being lazy! I love it! ^^ . . . . Okaaaay, that was way over-the-top, Naruto. Punching him like that.
I always love it when Kiba shows startling perception. ^^ . . . . Interesting, Neji likes Sasuke too. ô_o I love how Naruto didn’t flare up immediately; he was just like, “Whoa, that’s crazy.” ♥ . . . . I would’ve thought that Shikamaru would’ve figured out what the blood meant . . . or maybe not. I dunno. (*shrug*) No biggie. . . . It’s funny how Kiba figured it out, though. (Then again, he could probably smell it. XD) . . . . Um, you spelled “pregnant” as “pregnate”. . . . Oh jeez, men are such wimps when it comes to female problems (beg pardon, Sasuke). . . . Okay, I can see Kiba smelling period-blood early, but I’m a little surprised that he’s not grossed out by it. . . . (*snicker*) “Don’t finish your question, because it’s rather obvious.” And (XD) Naruto’s sneaking hand! (*giggles*) . . . . Heh. Kiba deserved that one. ^^ I feel bad for Sasuke. I mean, “is nothing sacred?!” as my parents would joke. ^^

It was funny. ^^

Chapter 18: I really like this dialogue between them. . . . ¡°[. . .] That should lighten up your mood.¡± Sasuke¡¯s being cynical there, right? . . . . This is probably one of my favorite scenes. =D . . . . Kyuubi¡¯s very perceptive. . . . ¡°Shit. I did fall the bastard, didn¡¯t I?¡± I think you mean ¡°fall for the bastard¡±. . . . 15 minutes seems like a little too much to me. . . . Hah! Sasuke knew! ^^ ¢¾ . . . . Heheh, I like this line: ¡°I hate to admit it, but he is cute.¡± Yup. ^^ . . . . Love Naruto¡¯s innocent questions and how touchy Sasuke gets when they¡¯re asked. ^^ . . . . This is funny. I mean, talk about the awkward position of ¡°go-between,¡± you know? ^^ . . . . It¡¯s funny how a touchy situation turned into a funny one. I wondered how Sasuke figured that Naruto was bi.

I liked this chapter! This was probably one of my favorites! ^_^ . . . . I like how it¡¯s taking a while.

Chapter 19: I like Sasuke¡¯s confusion.
(*snicker*) Love Sasuke¡¯s first words after waking up. ^^ He¡¯s not a morning person, is he? ¢¾ . . . . Love the touchiness. =) . . . . The clothing: does that mean that his usual clothes are a little tight on him around that time? (Cuz that happens to me.) . . . . By the way, which day is it for Sasuke? . . . . Awww, hands brushing. Sweet. ¢¾ . . . . This is so cute! (*squees*)

(And what the hell. I¡¯m in the middle of posting some reviews, and the formatting is going all wacky with the hearts and arrows.)

Chapter 20: (It wouldn’t surprise me too much if there was a coffee shop there.) . . . . (*giggle*) Cute about Sasuke suggesting no caffeine and why. X3 . . . . It’s almost likely they’re tentatively flirting. It’s cute. . . . Okaaaay, that was kind of embarrassing (how loudly Naruto squealed that). So the people in Konoha are pretty accepting when it comes to gays and stuff? . . . . Ahaha, Kiba’s entrance! XD . . . . I love how they just accepted the fact that they’re going out. And I love the line: “I’m not jumping in bed with you just because we’re going out, it takes time.” ^_^
Uh-oh, jealousy. . . . I’ve often wondered about the genetics mixing. It could produce strong offspring, but then again, it could endanger both. . . . Does this mean that Kiba’s not interested in Hinata? Darn. ó.ò . . . . Oh my god, that line “There’s always your uncle.” That was so wrong and so hilarious! (*dies laughing*) XDDD . . . . Oh mannn. (*groan*) I think I’d prefer it if Kiba was kidding about trying it out with a guy. . . . Oh man, that’s . . . O.O You’re kidding me. O.O
“Jumped into the bushes so they wouldn’t be seen.” Yeah, unless Neji starts scanning the surroundings. . . . Lol, “Yes now shut up.” XD . . . . Whoa, that was unexpected (and a total turn-on)! O.O But (*ahem*) as hot as Naruto’s horniness is, morally he shouldn’t just do that to Sasuke without asking and receiving permission first (considering what Itachi did). I mean, for all we know, Sasuke could freak out or something. . . . Short, but hot. *_* . . . . Love how embarrassed Sasuke is. . . . (*snicker*) I freakin’ love this line: “Sasuke, we’ve known each other for basically all of our lives, and nearly killed each other, so I think we both deserved that.” So well-stated. ^_^ . . . . Scram, Kakashi. And mind your own business. 9_9

Ah well, “the best-laid plans sometimes go awry,” you know. ^_^

Chapter 14: Ahaha, the bars are booby-trapped. ^^ . . . . “And you can’t, especially after having that fresh seal put on your arms.” Huh? Did that shock do something to him? õ.õ . . . . I always like that bit about Sasuke’s Curse Seal alerting him to Orochimaru’s presence. I like the “paternal tracking device” label for it. ^^
“My wife.” That sounds . . . wrong. >.< . . . . Love the difference in Tsunade’s and Orochimaru’s facial expressions to Kakashi when he suggests allowing Orochimaru to see his son. . . . I also like how Orochimaru classified the suggestion as “an interesting distracting gesture”; he’s sharp, isn’t he. ♥
So this is how Sasuke’s reacting to the Curse Seal alerting him, eh? Cool. . . . How is the Seal “pale?” . . . . Interesting how Sasuke feels a little sick. Is it the Curse Seal’s “Wake up! Your dad’s here!” adrenaline warring with the “No, go back to sleep” sedative? Cuz, that’d be kinda interesting (though probably extremely nauseating). . . . (*snicker*) Love your (un)original label for Orochimaru, Shika. It’s understated really funnily here. I like it. ^^ . . . . It was kinda funny how Sasuke said, “He’s coming through the door,” and sorta-faints. There’s a lot of humor to the situation. ^^ . . . . Um, I hate to say it, but the ending seemed a little silly to me. Kind of . . . overdone, I guess. Sorry.

Actually, it makes sense for Orochimaru to be kind of a funny parent. I hadn’t thought of it that way before, but it’s an interesting idea. ^^

Chapter 15: I love how drained Sasuke seems in this situation. I like how he says “let me be, I can handle this.” . . . . “Hmmm, I see this village still likes to drug people.” Like you’re one to talk, ‘Rochi-kun. You do/give out drugs all the time. 9_9 . . . . I wouldn’t imagine Neji being the one to protest at this point. Kiba maybe. . . . I guess Sasuke inherited his jerky attitude from his dad, huh. . . . LOL, Naruto heard me! XDD
Oh please. I thought both Itachi and the ANBU were cleverer than that. . . . Too bad, so sad, ANBU. (How you got that rank, I have no idea. That’s just embarrassing, falling for something like that. -_-) . . . . Pssh. Call me a coldhearted bitch of a bastard, but this rape scene seems cheap to me. I can’t imagine he’d really rape this girl just because she’s like Sasuke, especially when Sasuke’s somewhere in town. I mean, if I were Itachi, I’d consider the girl to be a total waste, and possibly even get angry at the fact that she looks so much like Sasuke. In short, I think this rape scene was pretty unnecessary. . . . Wow, that is pretty sick. But like I said, there wasn’t much drama behind it; not enough suspense to make it really vivid. It seems more like Itachi’s just wasting his time.

The story seems to be going somewhere to me.

Chapter 11: Ah, ‘Rochi-kun has a part in this too. Cool. I wonder what wound that is or where he got it from. . . . “Those Konoha idiots had no right taking my son from me.” I like his attitude. Strangely in this fic he’s got a point. . . . So he’s got some parental feelings for Sasuke, then? . . . . I love ‘Rochi-kun’s aggression. I wonder where Kabuto is, though. Was he one of the ones killed?
“The sky was darkening and the moon was starting to show itself.” Reminds me of that view of Itachi on the telephone pole with the moon behind him. ^_^ . . . .Yay! Nice save, guys! =D . . . . I’m surprised the Chidori didn’t just rip right through him. . . . Okay, I like the point Naruto makes to Sasuke about “being just like him,” but it’s been used a lot. I think if the point was brought in a little differently or phrased differently, it would’ve been better. . . . Love how furious Sasuke is, and how the Kyuubi “helps.”

What’s this about losing your temper? I didn’t see anything wrong. õ.ô

Chapter 12: Love how Tsunade mocks him. He’s gotta admit: that is pretty embarrassing. ^^ The grammar of “She smirked and seen the death jolts he was giving off” is a little mixed up, though. . . . “It would seen Sasuke is even stronger . . .” You mean “seem” not “seen”. . . . Interesting, seeing Itachi growl those insults to her.
I wonder how many times Sasuke’s tried to make a break for it. . . . Love how tense Sasuke is. . . . (*sigh*) Naruto knows better than to say things like that. That’s more of the kind of mistake Sasuke would make, not Naruto. . . . “Oh just let Sasuke kill the bastard [. . .] will be calmer and more relaxed.” You know, he does have a point, Naruto. . . . Nice apology, Naruto. . . . Hmm, interesting ending.

Chapter 13: Wow. I’ll bet Itachi would just love to hear how hard Sasuke’s trying to get to him and is mad at everyone getting in the way. At least, that’s probably how Itachi’s warped mind would interpret it. . . . Naruto had no place to tell the others about the rape, even if it was out of caring and if the others feel the same way he does about it.
Orochimaru’s such a sadist. . . . (*snicker* Kakashi’s words to the ANBU forces. ^^ . . . . Hmm, that is a good question: why didn’t anyone attack him immediately? õ_ô . . . . Interesting line: “Well, that’s for him to decide, but that’s not why I came here.” For Sasuke to decide, eh?
(*snicker*) Love ‘Rochi-kun’s greeting to Tsunade. ^^ . . . . Okaaaay, the way Orochimaru put that – “I’m here to take care of . . .” – eugh. That phrase just sounds wrong with him. (*shudders violently*) XP . . . . Heheh, nicely played, ‘Rochi-kun. Go get ‘im. ^^
So Itachi knew that Fugaku wasn’t Sasuke’s dad, but he didn’t know who was. Whoops. ^^

Chapter 6: So what’s the problem with Hyuuga, not giving back Sasuke’s house? And does Neji not agree or something? . . . . That question I just asked came from Neji speaking in Sasuke’s defense earlier. How do the rest of the group feel about Sasuke, I wonder. . . . Yeesh, talking about playing with fire, Neji. õ.õ . . . . For once, Sakura’s taking Naruto’s side versus Sasuke’s side. . . . Well-said, Kiba. ^_^ (I guess that answers my question up there. 9_9) . . . . I take it back. Kiba, you should NEVER ask anyone that kind of question. ò_ó . . . . See? Hinata agrees with me. (Thank you, Hinata, dear. ♥) . . . . And Gaara. Thank you, too, man. ♥ (And Miklusca? You wrote their lines really well. I could totally hear them saying it. ^_^) . . . . Heh. Trust Lee to try optimism. ^^ . . . . (*snort*) And Naruto joins in. . . . Poor guy. Too much for him to deal with right now. He probably needs some quiet time. . . . Wait. “Been born a freak?” What does that mean? õ.õ . . . . Sasuke didn’t close his door? Weird. Interesting last line to leave off with.