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Hi. I like your story A LOT. PLEASE update this.

Sorry if I came off as a bit of a jerk in my last review, guess I wasn't in the best of moods when I wrote it- normally I'm a pretty nice guy. As for sounding like an English teacher I'm actually worse, I would constantly correct my English teachers in class. Anyway, I hope to read the next chapter(s) soon. Later.

This is a great story. please update soon.

Lates.

Now this is one of the most interesting uses of futa in a story that I have ever seen. Well, it's actually the first...but its still a good story even without the smut and that makes all the difference! keep writing yah!
'A rose by any other name would likely be "deadly thorn-bearing assault vegatation."'-Robert Bullock

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This story line is truly amazing i can not believe how much i was just drawn into this story. i hope you keep this up even though its been two months since you updated i would really like you to return so that i can find out what happens next this is just to great of a story to just let die this way, and dispite what you say those fighting parts are great. well i really hope you continue to update even though it has been awhile, but before i go i must say that this is the greatest naruto and haku story i have ever read and i have read nearly all of them on this site.

okay... it has officially been a month... with all the crap on this site, as the author of two of the best damn fics on here you really really really need to update! It wouldn't be a big deal if your stories were just ok, or if you just had one of them, but two of my top 5 are by you and I am sure I am not alone in that sentiment. now please, for the love of whatever god you hold dear..... please update. :-(

hey zendora, just commenting because I sat back and realized there hasn't been an update on here in almost a month! Both of your stories are on my top five favorites so I am really really missing them...If you could update soon or at least give a status update so we know you aren't dead or anything that would be great:-).

Long time reader first time reviewer stuff aside I'm very happy to see this story on a regular up-date schedual. It's still very unique, very well written and with enough twists and turns as to prevent it from getting stale. My only real complaint about chapter 19 was that Tayuya and Shika's sex scene seemed a bit pre-mature for my taste. Don't get me wrong I enjoyed it (Boy did I enjoy it) but I thought that maybe you could have held off on having them do anything for maybe another chapter or two, you know give her a few days to process what's going on first before having her join Shika and Kin in bed. Other then that I've got to say I'm definatly enjoying the story so far and am looking forward to seeing how this all turns out.

Though if I may I'd like to offer a couple suggestions:

1) Maybe give Sakura a chance to redeem herself so she can go on to train under Tsunade as a Medic-nin. Sorry but I like how she turned out in the series even if I didn't like how she started out. While you did a great job with her in the begining I think it's getting near time to let her start growing up. (Sasuke's a lost cause so bash him all you want, hell I'll get you that steel bat if you need.)

2) After what happened with Lee finding out about Haku I think it might be a good idea if they come out and tell their friends the truth. I'm not suggesting they initiate anyone but just level with them. (By friends I mean Lee's and Hinata's teams, including Senseis, as well as Choji and Kakashi, if they don't already know.)

3) Have Tsunade put together a group of "Special Genin", ie the Konoha 11, and ask that the Kitsune train them to act as her "Personal Guard" as a way of strengthening their alliance. The training should consist of the chakra wieghts and time compression and maybe a new fighting technique or two that humans can learn.


Other then that great job and update soon...

(Suggestions can be taken or ignored as you wish but request for up-dates is mandatory and must be obyed.... LOL)

wow... just wow. Sat down and read all 18 chapters last night.... Have you say you have gained a new loyal fan :-) While I do have to say I was thrown off a little, especially in the beginning, I found the story to be incredibly original, funny, and unique. The only things I didn't particularly like about reading in in one go was the repetition, rather than a skip you explained the kyubi-uchiha contract multiple times for instance, I realize thats necessary for a story with time between chapters, but it kind of messes with those of us reading it in one go. The only other complaint I had was my homophobic side popping up every once in a while, but I have to say that the weird situations and pairings are one of the endearing qualities of this piece, and if you don't delve outside your comfort zone every once in a while you never grow, right? :-) Since I read this all at once I don't know your update schedule but will definately keep my eye out for an update... now to "once more into the breach"