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Chapter 7: Oh, I SO called it when I said in like chapter 2 or 3 that Sasuke was like a cat! ^_^ . . . Ahaha, “Kakashi-sensei gives me dirty looks if I say stuff like that too.” XD That could be taken two different ways: (1) The way you intended, as suggestive, or (2) angry looks. . . . Nice little paragraph about why Naruto’s a “prude.” . . . (*snicker*) “You’re like my boyfriend.” I wonder, was Sasuke expecting that? XD . . . Ooh, hawtness! *_* . . . (*snort*) Nice one, Naruto. Now Sasuke has to take another “shower.” ^^ . . . Not even noon? Well, that’s good, because Sasuke would’ve had a medical problem otherwise (see previous review). On the other hand, their hours could get all screwed up; believe me, I’d know. -_-
(*giggle*) “(Thankfully)” XD . . . (*uncontrollable giggles*) “Leaned against the doorway and waited for him to realize he was there.” XD . . . Ooh, fancy word. 6_6 . . . Okay, so at least Sasuke is still picky enough to be neat. He’s not a total freeloader. . . . AHAHAHA, Naruto just got Sasuke in the face! XDDD . . . And where the hell do you find all these words?! “Crapshoot,” I mean. Along with all those other ones I hinted at earlier! O.O . . . Okay, I’m getting the feeling of a yaoi manga here. I mean, I’m getting the typical picture of who’s seme and who’s uke, judging from their actions. Not sure if I like it or not. õ_o Still cute, though. . . . Uh, duh, Naruto. What else would he be thinking about? Although I suppose it is kind of a weird feeling when stated so bluntly to your face, so, yeah. . . . I like how you brought Sasuke’s entrance back in while Naruto’s experiencing the oven. . . . Er, I think the way Naruto stated his desire to bake stuff for his family seemed a little too cutesy. (*sweat*). . . . (*giggle*) “‘Exactly,’ Sasuke deadpanned.” XD . . . “Sasuke was slightly bewildered by Naruto’s behavior [. . .]” Yeah, you’re not the only one, dude. Only I am just slightly bothered by it. (*sweat*). . . . Mm, Naruto just said, “I promised I wouldn’t tell.” If you ask me (which you probably don’t, but here it is anyway ^_^), I think it would’ve sounded better if he said, “I promised myself I wouldn’t tell.” . . . You know, I might just be able to learn from this scene: asking someone bluntly what they want for your birthday, and then seeing what I can do with the response. . . . Whoa, one hell of a cliffhanger! O.O

Um, something I’m really curious about is how the hell does Sasuke stay hidden? What does he do when Naruto does go out? I think you should elaborate on how much they have to keep Sasuke’s presence a secret; it’d be interesting and add suspense.

Chapter 8: Love the dilemma Naruto’s having over using chakra. . . . Love how Naruto wants to “ease into it.” And yet, Sasuke’s not exactly that type of guy, is he? ^_^ . . . Hmm, maybe I spoke too soon. At least he’s willing to wait a month. I love how determined he is. The words just sent a nice shiver down my back. . . . Nicely stated, Naruto. ^_^ . . . Heh, and then there was Sasuke’s sudden straight-to-it reaction. . . . Err, okay, that was . . . short. ._. . . . . Mmmm, the lulling heartbeat. :heart:
Aw, that’s sweet, Sasuke’s making ramen for Naruto. :heart: . . . Whoa, kinky! O.O (I wants a picture! :D) . . . Hmm, I thought you weren’t going for Naruto being too uke. I know the idea here is that he is the uke, but if you ask me, he’s a little too uke. Sorry about that. -_- . . . Uh-oh, I know what’s coming. O.O . . . Or not. . . . That’s funny, what Naruto’s doing with his hair. ^^ . . . Is it just the ADD in him that makes him wonder at the slipperiness of the shampoo, or is he accidentally using Sasuke’s shampoo instead of his own? . . . Heh, knew Sasuke was going to catch him in the act. . . . You know, it’s actually too bad that you’re not as slow as Naruto, Sasuke. Take the time and enjoy it a little more! ^_^

To the A/N: Your class notes are filled with notes about this smutty chapter! O.O Hope nobody wants to borrow them! XDD

(I review as I read.)
Chapter 1: First of all, I loved you’re A/N at the beginning. That must’ve been rather awkward to write. ^^
So far, interesting beginning. . . . Yeah, “politics…” (*sigh*) . . . Ah, but we know from the summary that he’s NOT dead. But still, that was a good little paragraph. . . . (*snort*) “. . . Or she’d finally cracked.” XD And I love Naruto’s blunt question. “What gives?” XDD . . . He is crafty. . . . And I just learned a new word: “abnegation.” ^_^ . . . I wonder, did Naruto ever see Sasuke with Itachi? I guess he must have. . . . Oh my. Naruto has those thoughts about him? *_* . . . Boy, that came fast. Not sure if I like it or not. It can’t be dragged out? ô_o

Chapter 2: Yay, he’s alive! That’s a great way to begin the chapter, too. If it weren’t for the summary, it would’ve thrown the reader completely off. Which is a really good touch. ^_^ . . . Interesting. Sasuke’s just thinking, “I could use this to my advantage.” Nice. . . . Yeah, I wouldn’t expect Kabuto to be easy to kill. Good thing he did, too, otherwise look what would’ve happened. (*points to manga*). . . . This is great, Sasuke’s just using Naruto’s house and stuff without a care in the world. XD . . . Ahahaha! Naruto just walked in! XDD . . . Naruto’s odd reactions are a riot! Totally unexpected! ^^ . . . Nice touch, Sasuke agreeing to let Naruto help. And it makes sense too, he’d look less like an idiot than if he’d tried to do it himself. . . . Pssh. Hel-lo, Naruto. Ninja weren’t very honorable to begin with. And anyway, if you’re fighting a cheater, you might as well cheat first. (I don’t know if Orochimaru was a cheater, but you get the idea.) . . . XDDD Sasuke sure changed his mind fast about the massage! And so smoothly too! XDDD . . . Sasuke’s so blunt in everything he does, it’s great. ^_^ . . . Um, I don’t think he’s an S-class criminal. He went AWOL, but I don’t think that’s bad enough to fall under S-class. Now if he’d done something Akatsuki-worthy . . . . (*giggle*) Sasuke’s all smug. ^_^ . . . ALRIGHT! RE-JEC-TED! XDDDDD . . . or not. :\ Love Naruto’s question: “Did Orochimaru really baby you or something?” ^^ . . . Great label: “Stupid Teenage Stuff.” That’s so true! XD . . . Sasuke’s like a cat. “This is mine. Don’t like it? Tough.” . . . Hey, is Sasuke still naked? o_o . . . Come on, Naruto! Throw something back in his face! He’s totally asking for it! . . . O.O W~o~w. That . . . ending . . . was . . . was . . . (*blinks*) . . . unexpected.
I REALLY like this story! :D

Chapter 3: Love the fact-by-fact first paragraph. ^^ . . . Well, if you don’t like it Sasuke, buy them yourself! õ_o . . . (*giggle*) Great line: “Use’ta be I had to beat a conversation out of you and now you won’t be quiet.” ^^ . . . Clever about the choice of words. I wonder if Naruto’s going to regret his decision. . . . Is that the truth, Sasuke? Or are you just covering up? ô_o . . . (*snicker*) I never heard of it that way either, Naruto, but it shouldn’t be too hard to figure out. . . . Ahahaha! “You’ll have enough access then.” XD . . . Hmm, I wonder if Sasuke’s going to think again on his not-needing a family. . . . Interesting set-up for the story. . . . Love Sasuke’s chain of reasoning and denial. . . . What is uni? . . . (*snicker*) The Heimlich. XD

To the A/N: I’m okay with cliffies, just so long as it doesn’t take the author forever to update.

Chapter 4: Alright, vampires! :D Was the film Interview with the Vampire? . . . Love the Who’s-fault debate. . . . Is that the old-fashioned way to make popcorn? Interesting. . . . Guess it’s not Interview. What movie is it? . . . Man, I can’t find enough of this stuff on TV. -_- I mean, there’s a lot of straight-makeout scenes, but hardly any gay males. Soooo not fair. T_T . . . Naruto’s got a serious point. Sakura scares the hell out of me when she’s mad. T_T . . . Okay, I’m noticing that Naruto seems to have a lot of visitors in his apartment frequently. What gives? ô_o . . . And what is Sasuke’s problem? Why can’t he use his own? õ_o . . . (*snicker*) Toothpaste on the nose. ^^ . . . XD That’s great: “Even if you make me sleep on the couch, I’ll just sneak in here when you’re asleep.” XD Lock the door, Naruto! . . . How the hell does his eyes adjust so quickly? I mean, sure he’s got the Sharingan, but I doubt that would affect normal eyesight when he doesn’t have it on. Oh well. (*shrugs*) That’d be a cool picture, their eyes glowing in the dark. . . . Cute ending. :heart:

Chapter 5: Ooooh! (*squeal!*) I love the opening paragraph! ^^ Wonderful description. . . . Love Sasuke’s observations in the second paragraph. (*gasp*) And then the third-! This story just keeps getting better and better! :D . . . Hmm, that’s a tough question, Sasuke, but I’d opt for the second. ^_^ . . . Mmm, Sasuke has no shame. ^_^ . . . (*giggle*) “Nerves of steel, man.” ^^
That’s cool, Naruto’s enjoying Sasuke’s stay. . . . Love this whole scenario with Naruto trying to escort Gaara and Sasuke being a jerk about it. . . . I’m with you, Naruto. Kakashi and Iruka? õ_õ . . . Nice comparison about Gaara and Neji. I’m ever-so-slowly warming up to that couple. Slowly, though, v~e~r~y s~l~o~w~l~y. . . . Okay, I think maybe there should’ve been a long sequence of how they got Neji and Gaara together, something more than just a little paragraph saying, “So they did this and this happened.” Just a thought. . . . At least Sasuke’s helping out somewhat. . . . “Way back?” I thought it was just a month ago! ô_o . . . (*snicker*) That’s funny, it’s a regular drill with Sasuke. XD . . . Oooh, great blend for the next scene! :D
Sasuke, do you know that your behavior would make one curious as to how you compare to Shikamaru? And do you even care? . . . WHOA, how the hell does Naruto’s face end up there?! O.O . . . Deny it all you want, Sasuke. You want the guy! . . . Love the honesty paragraph. . . . Also love the paragraph about recognition. . . . Interesting. Sasuke’s just waiting for Naruto to come to him. Lazy-ass bastard. ^_^

To the A/N: Uh, yeah, I think the chapters are a little short, but the story’s really good to read.

Very cool story. How is Sasuke hiding when someone comes over like Iruka? That might make an intersting chapter.
Anyway its well written cant wait for an update.

I really enjoyed your story. Please keep writing as soon as you can.

Is this what you come up with when you have a writter's block? Then you can keep on writing whatever your mood cause it's cute, hot, and it put me in a very good mood for the rest of the day. I love this fic.