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for A Family of their Own

by emp78

person eve4mem
schedule April 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
No pleae don't delete it. I like it it's very good and I want to see more. Please update as soon as you can.
person Chibi
schedule April 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Short words. Good, keep going. Besides Naruto's a cutie when he's little. Good job with Kakashi telling him a story.
person jewel
schedule April 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
great beginning to far. this looks like it will have a slow pace to do it justice. really like what I see so far.
person mary
schedule April 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OH SO CUTE!!!!! MORE PLEASE!!!!! love it!!!
person Damp
schedule April 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Besides, that chuunin is kind of cute... Especially when he blushes like that. I wonder if he's interested in guys,' he mused.
He went back to reading his book, only now he pictured himself and a brown-haired chuunin as the lead characters.

Oh that was just priceless. *still laughing* Okay...I'm almost doen...*stops laughing* I really think you should continue writing this! I just thought it was absolutely adorable how Naruto kept pronouncing his name, or hw he just talked in general! ^^ I can't wait to see what Iruka does with Naruto ^^ Please update!
person llyoung
schedule April 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like this. Please continue.
person Sama
schedule April 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
WOW...Interesting way to start the story. Sad but sweet too how iruka found eachother its so sweet! I love it! And I have to say I'd be more then happy if you made a second chapter? Heck! Continue the whole story! Just don't delete it! PLEASE! Please update when you can! Great work! Keep it up!! ^^
person oraday
schedule April 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Continue, continue, continue!!! This reminds me of fighting dreamers... With a little less angst. I love the premise well enough, but combined with your wonderful writing, I really love the story. Great job on Naruto's childish pronounciations and Iruka's character. People tend to butcher Iruka's character and type-cast him as purely a mother-hen, but you managed to incorporate the 'lonely-orphan' aspect of Iruka. Really, you've got a great fic on your hands here. Update when you can^.^
person AoiKitsune
schedule April 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Interesting...i wouldnt mind 2 read more. i really like how Kakashi
was nice enough 2 read him a story out of his porn book. heh neways
i really hope u update soon best of luck. AoiKitsune =^-^=
person satchan
schedule April 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
more please. I neeeed it, yaoi keeps me sane-er than normal so if you dont mind please update as soon as you can thank you.