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I think this is wonderful!!!
It's an awsome take on the Naruto story line!! Thank you so much for sharing.
I do have a suggestion, I hope you aren't offended. I write fantasy, so I know how hard it can be to get all the information in. The way you wrote the first two chapters, though interesting, dragged a bit. It wasn't because I didn't want to know their backstory, but because it was dumped in before the action. If you put the action first, and then information, in smaller doses it will keep the reader plowing through the story instead of skimming some parts. This is known as info dumping and it's hard as hell to avoid. But I can't wait for more!
Slave

Aww! Poor Naru! :( Still i can't wait to read more! ^^ Keep up the good work! :D

I hadnt' read this one before. I'm looking forward to more! I like Naruto's attitude. Beaten down Naruto's are too sad.

I'll be looking for the rest of the story. I think it has and interesting hook to it.

I DIDNT NOTICE THIS UNTIL I REREAD SOME PARTS THAT ID ACTUALLY READ THIS ONCE ALREADY BUT IT WENT FURTHER THEN THEN IT DID THIS TIME.GLAD YOU DECIDED TO REDO IT AND POST IT HOPE YOU CAN FIND TIME TO UPDATE IT AS FREQUENTLY AS POSSIBLE

haha nice.continue, yes
hope you do soon im curious

The second sentence makes no sense...."In fact it was so quite that it unnerving Sasuke lover of all things silent."

Doesn't ever want to have sex with him, eh? Hahah...I'm sure that'll change.

This story really has potential.I like the idea of it and can't wait to see how things will develop.Keep up the good work and update as soon as you can.

Cool chapter. Hurry with the next one!!