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Hestia,

I'm enjoying your story; I particularly enjoyed the scene where Sasuke "breaks" and begins falling in love/thinking like a sub/lets go/whatever. The emotional impact of it was well-rendered, palpable. I'm loving all of your Naruto-and-Sasuke interaction, smexy and not. I very much enjoy the KisaIta as well.

I just have one issue with the story. The excrement stuff. I think I'm fairly representative of most of your readers when I say that I think that particular kink is very squicky. You handle the incest squick well, but making it a plot point and handling it well and mentioning that Itachi's never done more than think about it, which fits his characterization well. But the shit/pee scenes are just gross (to me, at least). Also, they are nonessential -- they don't help the plotline or character development in any way. They're a gratuitous squick that I think we can do without.

Obviously this is your story; in the end, you decide what, if anything, to change. I will probably keep reading regardless, but those points of the story do diminish my enjoyment and detract from the re-read value.

Thank you for your time,
TLG

Your Gaara is so funny and so clueless. Thanks for the update.

Woo-hoo! I read the epilogue right before I went to work, and I came back to review when I got off, and was very, *very* pleased to see that you would be continuing. Yes! Definitely more KisaIta (I love your Kisame, btw...sexxxy), the shopping trip sounds fun, and I don't know if it's in your plans, but - For the love of god, please more IruKaka! Hottest. Thing. Ever. I even have a metal-phobia, as strange as that sounds (can't stand to have it touching my skin, can't stand piercings for that reason), and thinking of slave!Kakashi with nipple rings and a Prince Albert makes me warm all over. Mmmm.

The revisions were very well done - the little extras made it much more interesting. I'm curious (hoping) whether you're going to explore Itachi's desire for Sasuke a little more.

This is an erotic, delicious fic and it deserves every single one of the 100 reviews it's gotten in - what? 2 days? Congratulations! Good job! Great work! I'll be looking forward to more!

Hi there :)

Really glad to see that you decided to continue this story, I really like it and felt kinda sad when you stopped it like that, I feel that this has the potential to be a really great on going story if you feel like going on with it till you as the author feel it's really done, which hopefully for us readers won't be anytime soon.

You write a very good story, and you really know your stuff, for the D/S scene. NOt many people know that stuff but you do and I like the realzism you bring to the story . Looking foward to more. For an idea about Itachi how about him getting anoyed that someone made his brother submit. Or what Naurto will have to pay for Sasuke to be his sub. Itachi would not let him go cheap. Also maybe some of Orochi, trying to take down Itachi's club or some such thing. Keep up the good work.

yes more chapters! i was sad there was an ending already... i think itachi and kisame should stay together. hmmm personaly i love garra/naru but that doesnt really work in this story, maybe? oh yes bring kiba in, the more the better!
KEEP WRITTING!

Thanks for sharing your story with us. I've been reading and enjoying it over the past few days. As for Shika and Neji if you can not leave them together would you consider putting Shika with Kiba instead of Choji? Also, I would really prefer to not have Itachi try to interfer in Naruto and Sasuke's relationship but this is your story and should go where you want it to. Basically, I would just prefer more hot chapters without the addition of angst.

woof! i'm in love with this story! I try to write a decent bsdm and always fail miserably! i envvy your ability to do so. oh and i wanted o know is it posib;le that we will see itachi dominate sasuke or iruka naruto? i'm really curious about wat else you have in store. and i love the fact iruka's dom every one always makes him such a pansy! Good job and pleasee keep it up.

Very interesting, hope you keep updating at the same rate.

~Sandra

When I saw that was the epilogue I freaked out, although I thought it was hot how Naruto finally collared Sasuke....BUT, you must write about how Sasuke is the dom and Naruto the sub! It would be hot and definitely worth the wait. Maybe even a sequel cause I want to know about that 2.5 million dollar blue diamond....and what about those piercings?? The shopping day is a must!