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WOW I really liked it....-blushes- I'm a sub myself so I really enjoyed every detail that you managed t ofit into this story. I would really like to know more about Neji if that would be possable? As well as hearing something about Shino or Kiba but Uhm...really really loved it ^_^

Dayakara~

You just got to add a chappie about sasu being dom. When I saw a new chapter up I was so hoping to get to se sasu dom but the chapter you wrote was good for an ending. If you can write the chapter for sasu being dom I will give you a cookie. PPPPPPPPPPPPLLLLLLLLLLLLLLEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSSEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

WHAT?!!!!!!!!!!?????????!!!!!! it's OVER?!?!?!?!?!?!? *bursts into hysterical tears* Wah!!!

But really... I LOVED IT!! And yeah, it could stand as is.... That was one hell of a twisty plot in the Epilogue though. I would love to see more of the shared D/s of Sasuke and Naruto. *drool* *Not so subtle hint to KEEP WRITING D/s DAMMIT!!*

Oh, this is a very nice fic :)
The sasunaru action was very intense because you paid a lot of attention to the inner workings of the characters. But there were times when the fic got a bit weaker, usually when there were more than two characters interacting outside a sexual situation. Sasuke suddenly losing his cool in a public place still seems a bit incredible, even with all the prompting on Naruto's part. Maybe it relies too heavily on the dialogue without stopping to introspect to make it more believable? The sex scenes were very well done for that matter.
I agree with you that this is a good place to end the fic, it is a whole. But I'm still very curious to see Naruto subbing for Sasuke. So, um, a sidefic or a sequel maybe? *doe eyes*

I was kinda hoping that we'd get to see how their pairing developed. I was a little suprised to find that it was already finished. After all that talk about piercing's and new clothing. I kinda thought that we would find out what happened with them shopping and piercing in the next chapter not find the ending. It was a good story but the ending seemed a little fast. I mean they meet, do the whole D/s thing, then the end their together and have been for a while...

Ah, thanks so much for this wonderful story! you deserve a break. I hope that you do write more dom stories though, cuz they're f***ing hottt!

Wow! I love ffpanda's Depravity story.... omg!!! That is really hardcore. No updates in like forever though... *cries*

I like what you're thinking for future chapters; shopping, piercings, judo... all great! As far as couples go... Neji/Gaara..... that would be damn hot! Shika/Chouji... i can't imagine a D/s relationship there, but who cares? Keep Itachi with Kisame though... especially since you talked about how risky it was for them. Why else would Itachi stick around if he didn't love the guy? Maybe a glimpse into IruKaka D/s play.... or a chappie from Kakashi's point of view... that would be awesome!

Ok i'm done. :) I look forward to more!

LOL! :smirks: Where was I?? Anyway I'm really Really glad that continuing, this is by far my favourite story of yours, not only because of the pairing either, but because of the scope of it, everyone's in there and because of the world and the tone of it. This is the kind of story that could go on forever with little 'oneshots' of different couples or twists in existing ones and I don't want to see it end yet. XD and I'm glad you goof off even though bills are important (especially internet ones XD). I like the idea of the confrontation between Neji and Naruto and Neji leaving to be with Gaara, while Shika gets some action from Chouji. I'd also Really like to see one of those parties you/Sasuke was referring to. I know ass all about Judo, but my brother is really good at it, he's also a certified tournament referee, so I can find out for you. What would you like to know? It would be interesting to see you write a fight scene, not to mention that what I do know about Judo is that it involves a lot of grabbing, controlling, and rolling around on the ground XD. LOL, and actually Kakashi makes a lot of sense as a judo master sub - Ju - Do = gentle -way. The good practitioners are usually quite passive, it's a reactionary sport, you use others force against them, instead of your own to dominate. I guess it can be considered the martial arts equivalent to topping from the bottom. Hmmn, I guess I know more than I thought O.o LOL my brother would be so proud of me I actually listen to him occasionally. As to what to do about Itachi... I'm not sure, I've been reading Matriculate This [ http://naruto.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600091803 ] which is an awesome (but twisted) story about control. It's all the ways D/s can go wrong, it's scary like that. So that's twisted my view of Itachi recently, but there's also a really awesome story called "The Jutsu of Surrender" [ http://naruto.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=544195899 ] that you can check out in reference to unscary? Uchihacest. SapphirexKat2 [ http://naruto.adultfanfiction.net/authors.php?no=1296765028 ] is also awesome with that genre, if you haven't read her stuff you should check her out. I adore your Kisame though, and there's always Orochimaru to someone to complicate matters if you don't want to use Itachi. I see you have Zabuza lined up to create some complications of his own. I'm not sure if any of that was helpful, maybe the judo stuff, but meh... As for personality wise you sound like a lot of fun. As for me I'm a Sasuke type character - I would love to find someone to Dom for me, but I'm a scary sub, you gotta work for that position, topping from the bottom is my favourite pass time - passive aggressive much O.o. Oh well, Huggles to my guy who's been around for 9 years now and still has no idea what to do with me, I know I scare him sometimes, but I'm fucking hooked and can be a possessive little bitch. Oh that would make for a good story line run - People proposition him all the time and it annoys the hell out of me - he's a lot like Naruto, he fucking leaks charisma. It causes people to do stupid shit like strip in the middle of january at 3 in the a.m. outside a night club, so you can also complicate matters with people trying to get a piece of Naruto - I mean fresh meat Dom who likes to sub, who's tamed Sasuke. It's been my long standing experience that no matter the rules set for them, most people have no kinda fucking behaviour. When did this turn into a rant? Anyway - would love to see you continue - cause you know I adore you - Hell where are Ibiki and Sai? As a couple or seperate they could also make things extremely interesting around the club. Okay I'm done, luv, huggles and luffles, Allys.

oh, that is so sexy.

Holy Crap, OMG, I could cry I'm so happy and I've only read the prologue!! Is this your first AU?? It's the first I've read from you, I adore the premise and I'm gonna do a short write up after each chapter, because I adore you. So onward...

Lady you made my heart beat. Itachi, delectable and the meeting between Naruto and Sasuke purr-fection. I love that they argued and the accidental kiss XD - Oh how I love the little homages to the canon. Oh and I haven't mentioned it yet but I Adore Iruka seme - After Erisabesu and Everyone's Got Secrets that was it for me in terms of the IruKaka relationship. Oh and I know you will do this nothing but justice. Alright now having said that I'm going to stop and review at the end of each chapter, I'm taking it back - I don't wanna stop XD. I'll come back at the end - Sasuke sinking to the perfect position and the end comments by Itachi - Excellence. okay brb.

I love that you highlight the responsibilities of a master and make sure to point out that it's about hurting people, it's about freeing people from themselves, their lives and circumstances. God I adore this, Oh My IruKaka goodness.

I'm sorry I had to pause again - ROFLMAO!!!!!!!!!!!!! Naruto has completely and officially Lost It!! I Love you, I love this story LOL, OMG... He just did everything he could possibly do wrong - Wrong XD LOL, and I've never been happier. The fucking snoring though capped it, XD.

Holy Shit... chapter 5 was like a religious experience, wasn't I starting a cult devoted to you? I should be - Oh wait, there already is one - it's called hedonism. OMG... I think that you have out done yourself - there is nothing I can say to express how I feel right now. Except that that was perfect and beautiful and Ho-Lee Shit.

Oh. My. God. :sob: I don't even want to try (to express) I'm finding it hard to breathe. But that would be unfair to you. I loved the rage, the fiery-ness that is Sasuke, that snuck out for a second there at the beginning and then at the end when Naruto called his name. Om my gosh... the intensity, the blood play - The Knife! I was scared for a second, a second only cause I know you would never do that, but oh my... And the oath - Oh God the little canon bits that keep sneaking in - masterful. The colour play, the sounds... The focus on Sasuke and how and what he was feeling, that ultimate surrender. The desire to be good XD, oh the possibilities - He needs to be taken in hand, Sasuke, canon Sasuke. God this is like food for the soul - It's soothing, for everything that ever happened between them for all those unresolved issues and the love, that is so up in the air. You crystallized it and made it fall down, to the realm of the possible. Oh my how I adore you, oh God. I know that they say a picture is worth a thousand words - but you make me doubt that, you've always made me afraid to even try to draw, to express the things that you do in words, on paper. The perfection the forgiveness, the trust, the need, I'm not that talented, but oh God, I could try. I love that they don't have a strictly traditional master/slave relationship. The emotions in there, established in one night, amazing, and eternity in a couple of hours. The claim. The desperation, and all of that coupled with Naruto's dobeness :D Creampie XD, Creamcake XD the orange fucking socks XD LOL :teary smile: Oh and the soothing. that is so the best part. That after all the pain comes the soothing, and the loving, and the cherishing. Oh God and I see you've beat me to the punch so I'll post this long ass review and start another one, cause you deserve many.