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November 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh! Z! That was over the top good! This is to dated one of your best chapter! The intensity of Naruto feeling I could feel it. That was a mind game from Hell! Not forgetting Sasukes little jealous momet:) You know I lol at Kakashi and his ~finger~:) Z! I'm still breathing hard after reading that chapter. Plus the cliffhanger you left us with OMG! You have proved once again why I say Zrina #1! I can't hardly wait to read what will happen next in this Detective Novel:) My Zrinaday has been wonderful! Thanks:)
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November 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
O.O Yikes. I mean...yikes!! Update again soon! ~ Jelp
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November 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg
>.< this is getting better and better i mean wow i just - you just ended it in a plce that practically killed to end it at!!! Orochimaru is such a perv but my favourite scene in this one was definitely the asuma sasuke scene XD heh Asuma poor man *pats* he was fearing for his balls there and with good reason.
Another thing that reminded me of why i'm obsessed with this fic is the complexity of emotions that you're portraying in such an extreme situation. The way Sasuke reacted when he realised that Naruto migth actually get along with some of the people that he was made to service hadn't even occurred to him and maybe i'm biased because i'm on the oustide but i can see how naruto would do that. he's alone and even though he's being forced into that situation he's trying to make the best of it - and if there are people who are actually decent to him despite what he has to do for them then he'd most likely learn how to make the best of something like that that's his character.
Then of course there was Naruto and his guilt over having agreed to orochimaru's request even if he didn't mean ti i can see how it would hurt him to do it, even if it's just verbally, to betray the one person other than probably his cousin, who had told him he wasn't a whore or who hadn't thought of him as just someone with no worth. The fact that sasuke truly cared for him is what's tearing into him and it makes me feel guilty with him and hurt for them both.
ON another note I'm glad Ino's alive. I'm sad that Kabuto is alive, i have a profoud hate for him *shrugs* always been that way (although i like it when he's getting pummeled by orochimaru XD) *clears throat* anyway. orochimaru's a sick bastard, you have his character down perfectly and Karin *snicker* well, maybe Orochimaru should let Kabuto indulge when it comes to her too ^_^. Is it wrong that I found the way and the reason for Orochimaru getting turned on just made him a hotter baddie? >.< Gah, i really do think he's hot >.<
Anyway. I cna't wait to see if that fist will hit his face. I hope for Naruto that it will. I'm also wondering if the one who fired that shot is Sasuke... just in case it's not i want to have an element of doubt in my mind so i'm not sad when i realise that it wasn't sasuke to the rescue XD but lol, thank you Zrina for leaving me on a high point of tension just a small bit before I have to go to bed.
Another awesome chapter and I can't wait for the next one.
Hina xXxx
>.< this is getting better and better i mean wow i just - you just ended it in a plce that practically killed to end it at!!! Orochimaru is such a perv but my favourite scene in this one was definitely the asuma sasuke scene XD heh Asuma poor man *pats* he was fearing for his balls there and with good reason.
Another thing that reminded me of why i'm obsessed with this fic is the complexity of emotions that you're portraying in such an extreme situation. The way Sasuke reacted when he realised that Naruto migth actually get along with some of the people that he was made to service hadn't even occurred to him and maybe i'm biased because i'm on the oustide but i can see how naruto would do that. he's alone and even though he's being forced into that situation he's trying to make the best of it - and if there are people who are actually decent to him despite what he has to do for them then he'd most likely learn how to make the best of something like that that's his character.
Then of course there was Naruto and his guilt over having agreed to orochimaru's request even if he didn't mean ti i can see how it would hurt him to do it, even if it's just verbally, to betray the one person other than probably his cousin, who had told him he wasn't a whore or who hadn't thought of him as just someone with no worth. The fact that sasuke truly cared for him is what's tearing into him and it makes me feel guilty with him and hurt for them both.
ON another note I'm glad Ino's alive. I'm sad that Kabuto is alive, i have a profoud hate for him *shrugs* always been that way (although i like it when he's getting pummeled by orochimaru XD) *clears throat* anyway. orochimaru's a sick bastard, you have his character down perfectly and Karin *snicker* well, maybe Orochimaru should let Kabuto indulge when it comes to her too ^_^. Is it wrong that I found the way and the reason for Orochimaru getting turned on just made him a hotter baddie? >.< Gah, i really do think he's hot >.<
Anyway. I cna't wait to see if that fist will hit his face. I hope for Naruto that it will. I'm also wondering if the one who fired that shot is Sasuke... just in case it's not i want to have an element of doubt in my mind so i'm not sad when i realise that it wasn't sasuke to the rescue XD but lol, thank you Zrina for leaving me on a high point of tension just a small bit before I have to go to bed.
Another awesome chapter and I can't wait for the next one.
Hina xXxx
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November 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ohhh, that is a horrible place to leave it!!! Okay, I'm impressed (reluctantly) with your ability to leave the reader hanging and pleading for more. More please.
Slave
Slave
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November 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
God I love this fic! It's so rividing!!!
Plot: one of the best I've every read!
Grammar: great.
flow of script: flawless.
Character personalities: nailed perfectly.
I love SoD too, and Going down. Keep it up!! PLEASE.... >.<
Plot: one of the best I've every read!
Grammar: great.
flow of script: flawless.
Character personalities: nailed perfectly.
I love SoD too, and Going down. Keep it up!! PLEASE.... >.<
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November 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
aaaaaaaaaarrrrrrrrgggggggggggghhhhhhhh sooooooo cruel. WHAT HAPPENS NEXT, WHAT HAPPENS NEXXT!!?!?!?!??!?!?!?!
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November 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Sasuke to the rescue!(?)
lolerskatez(this chapeter was so not funny, but I can't help but smile thinking its him).
until next time!
lolerskatez(this chapeter was so not funny, but I can't help but smile thinking its him).
until next time!
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November 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMG this is a really good story, even if it is almost over (from what you said in one of your A/N's)
Sorry I don't have like anything to say but I want to see what happens next even though I can't stand this type of story XDDDD
It's just too good not to past up!!! (Did I say that right?!!!)
You write great stories with hot-steamy-smex -drools-
Sorry I don't have like anything to say but I want to see what happens next even though I can't stand this type of story XDDDD
It's just too good not to past up!!! (Did I say that right?!!!)
You write great stories with hot-steamy-smex -drools-
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November 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
he needs a kill list,rochimaru,kabuto,sakon,karin,suigetsu...and maybe everyone else.he should bring him a chared bodie with sasukes id,bastard,i hope naruto,ino and sasuke can get throught this.though ino is useless and has only make narutos life harder,see caring is a bad thing unless you have connections that work fast.hope you update soon and this all leaves hell soon too
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November 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm VERY happy Naruto is still alive....but,but,but Sasuke :( *sobs* he's gonna have to screw Asuma to find Naruto isnt he. Damnit! I hope i'm wrong. Theres NO TIME for that old pervert to make Sasuke have sex with him....Naruto is being TORTURED for crying out loud. Grrrr damn Asuma.
Ya know what? Sasuke should get pissed and say heres MY deal for YOU....either you tell me where Naruto is or i kick ur ass and break ur legs. Hows that lol :D *bites fingernails*
Sorry i had trouble reviewing for some reason. And i hope none of my previous comments came across as bitchy :( i just hate it that Sasuke is in a hurry and some old perv wants a lay so hes blackmailing him. Blah, cant he get a piece of ass somewhere else.
Anyways....wonderful story you have here. I cant wait to see how it ends.
Ya know what? Sasuke should get pissed and say heres MY deal for YOU....either you tell me where Naruto is or i kick ur ass and break ur legs. Hows that lol :D *bites fingernails*
Sorry i had trouble reviewing for some reason. And i hope none of my previous comments came across as bitchy :( i just hate it that Sasuke is in a hurry and some old perv wants a lay so hes blackmailing him. Blah, cant he get a piece of ass somewhere else.
Anyways....wonderful story you have here. I cant wait to see how it ends.