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July 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
God...this was so much better than watching my Netflix on my PC! Shit...I was holding my breath the entire time. Kudos...Brava!
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July 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ok so I've had a lot of time to stew about this chapter. *glares at you*
I can't decide between loving the smex in the other chapters and how this one makes my heart twist painfully :( The beginning was sexy as hell, it had me drooling just from a description of how they looked, and when I say they, I meant how Naruto looked XD:D Yeah, that part definately needs a reread, because they weren't even doing anything and it made me all hot under my proverbial collar. Hard cock and undulating body *mouth hangs open*
Now to the reason why my heart is jumping all over the place screaming "WAAAAH" in a very childish, sulky voice. The entire scene with Naruto, I read with my hands over my eyes, not just the first time, every single time I read it XD and even though it hurts I still couldn't look away, something about the scene draws me back with some sort of sick need to make it hurt all over again. The cutting the first cheek part, as those three lines were spoken got me, but when the other side was done and he had to repeat them, and he was broken, it just ah, was so frustrating to read and not be able to pretend everything was ok. When Naruto was asking him to put the condom on -______- I knew it was gonna be bad from that point, if I had any idea how bad, well I would have read on anyway, but still. :( The chapter is a little clearer with the POVs but Sasuke's thoughts were good too as he watched. I want to kick Kabuto in the nuts, then chop them off, and make him eat them (heh, still on that sugar high XD) He's such an ass. But he what he said was pretty him, he does everything clinically, which only makes me want to hurt him even more.
Sasuke's anger, Naruto's temper withdrawn, his blankness, I don't know what I would have done if Sasuke had been unaffected, probably accuse you of kicking puppies for fun XD It ties him closer to Naruto though, you can't know something like that about a person without wanting to be there for them even if Naruto seems to be over it, it's Super Sasuke to the rescue! XD
uh, anywho, sugar high still kicking around and the cookies are talking to me again.
*HUG* <3<3<3
I can't decide between loving the smex in the other chapters and how this one makes my heart twist painfully :( The beginning was sexy as hell, it had me drooling just from a description of how they looked, and when I say they, I meant how Naruto looked XD:D Yeah, that part definately needs a reread, because they weren't even doing anything and it made me all hot under my proverbial collar. Hard cock and undulating body *mouth hangs open*
Now to the reason why my heart is jumping all over the place screaming "WAAAAH" in a very childish, sulky voice. The entire scene with Naruto, I read with my hands over my eyes, not just the first time, every single time I read it XD and even though it hurts I still couldn't look away, something about the scene draws me back with some sort of sick need to make it hurt all over again. The cutting the first cheek part, as those three lines were spoken got me, but when the other side was done and he had to repeat them, and he was broken, it just ah, was so frustrating to read and not be able to pretend everything was ok. When Naruto was asking him to put the condom on -______- I knew it was gonna be bad from that point, if I had any idea how bad, well I would have read on anyway, but still. :( The chapter is a little clearer with the POVs but Sasuke's thoughts were good too as he watched. I want to kick Kabuto in the nuts, then chop them off, and make him eat them (heh, still on that sugar high XD) He's such an ass. But he what he said was pretty him, he does everything clinically, which only makes me want to hurt him even more.
Sasuke's anger, Naruto's temper withdrawn, his blankness, I don't know what I would have done if Sasuke had been unaffected, probably accuse you of kicking puppies for fun XD It ties him closer to Naruto though, you can't know something like that about a person without wanting to be there for them even if Naruto seems to be over it, it's Super Sasuke to the rescue! XD
uh, anywho, sugar high still kicking around and the cookies are talking to me again.
*HUG* <3<3<3
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July 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wah!!! thas so horrible!!! the judge bastard must pay!!! sick sasuke on that mo-fo's ass, the bastard. poor naruto. urgh. it's really well written. i'll definitely read more.
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July 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I hope Sasuke makes all those bad people who hurt Naruto pay. Excellent chapter, and amazing as usual. ~ Jelp
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July 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
If i got my hands on that bastard i'd tear him limb from limb - and the only thing that worked halfway to soothing me was that sasuke had similar thoughts at the end of that chapter - i hope they all die very painful and slow deaths *takes deep breath* poor naruto :( but everything will be okay, everything will be okay - ne? *nods* yep - i trust you to make everything okay - so okay lol. On a brighter note - thanks for the update ^_6 well written as always, you make me see things very clearly with the way you describe things - which in this one happened to hurt because bad things happened to naruto *sigh* anyway thanks and can't wait for the next oen
Hina xXxx
Hina xXxx
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July 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow... Well he certainly hit close to home in more ways than one. That was sort of horrible, especially the last bit, but it would definitely be worth something to Sasuke. Holy crap but who's he going to go to. I guess Internal Affairs is it. That is so psycho. You should never be afraid to post huge chapters. I don't think anyone would mind XD. I'm sitting here in complete shock, but wow Thanks for the update, Love :huggles you:
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July 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this is a great story - good plot, good smut, good character development and backstory. Can't wait to read more!
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July 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I can't belive you are five chapters in, and I'm just getting to see this story. Everytime I spot it (here or at Live journal), I'm about to click, something happens and I don't get to read.
But am I glad I got to read five chapters in one sitting. Your writing skills are damn near genius in my estimation. I love the way you make your characters real and believable, even in an alien and provocative setting such as this one. I am so buying into the whole thing. This last chapter had me wanting to kidnap Naruto, get him therapy, and huggle him forever. Your incorporation of the different canon characters isn't far-fetched, but instead adds an entirely new dimension to them which makes your stories that much more realistic and enjoyable.
Even more personally, I am in awe of your lemon-writing abilities. Your lemons make me realize how far I still have to go in my own descriptiveness and creativity. I am defintely repressed and extremely shy when it comes to writing yaoi lemons. There are words and phrases I have yet to be able to bring myself to use. On the side of creatvity...well, what can I say...I'm just making stuff up, lol.
You are fast becoming a legend in my book. I look forward to your posts and updates! Hmm, was I gushing too much?! Puhlease, like I care! You rocketh hard!!
But am I glad I got to read five chapters in one sitting. Your writing skills are damn near genius in my estimation. I love the way you make your characters real and believable, even in an alien and provocative setting such as this one. I am so buying into the whole thing. This last chapter had me wanting to kidnap Naruto, get him therapy, and huggle him forever. Your incorporation of the different canon characters isn't far-fetched, but instead adds an entirely new dimension to them which makes your stories that much more realistic and enjoyable.
Even more personally, I am in awe of your lemon-writing abilities. Your lemons make me realize how far I still have to go in my own descriptiveness and creativity. I am defintely repressed and extremely shy when it comes to writing yaoi lemons. There are words and phrases I have yet to be able to bring myself to use. On the side of creatvity...well, what can I say...I'm just making stuff up, lol.
You are fast becoming a legend in my book. I look forward to your posts and updates! Hmm, was I gushing too much?! Puhlease, like I care! You rocketh hard!!
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July 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awesome chapter! I can't wait to read more!
Keep it up! ^^
Keep it up! ^^
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July 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
was sasuke even talking about mizuki?
continue!!!
continue!!!