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July 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this story is just getting better and better. I wonder how Kyuubi could have missed one of the sperm she was trying soo hard too.
Also I can't wait till Kisame and Itachi have their little talk, cause I want to know what the opposite of a demon is.
ja ne till next time and keep up the good work
p.s. can't wait for your other stories either, but take your time I'll be there when they're updated
Also I can't wait till Kisame and Itachi have their little talk, cause I want to know what the opposite of a demon is.
ja ne till next time and keep up the good work
p.s. can't wait for your other stories either, but take your time I'll be there when they're updated
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July 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
To much and a bit to vague.
It took me a couple of read threw to actually understand what had happened. When I first went threw it I thought Itachi was waking up in the tunnels of Naruto’s mind. Then the room with the doctors and the flash back of the ANBU and the Hokaga had me thinking either they are in naruto’s mind and this is what he’s seeing, or itachi is picking up images from nartuos mind as to what HE thinks is going on around him?
Then this ‘thing’ pops up and another random character drags them off and .. attacked by ANBU?? Hun? Where they come from?
And how come Tsunade doesn’t seem to know about that later on? And why is there a dog demon thing?
And why are they on some stereotypical island in the middle of nowhere with some monk guy who knows the secret of the universe? Let me guess, he’s some kind of demon thing too right?(please tell me I’m wrong)
And what happened to the nurse back at the hospital?
And how did itachi end up out in the hallway in the first place? And ANOTHER Sauke/Naruto dream?
They are getting redundant after the first one and the sex part.
And why is itachi standing naked on the beach following a hallucination of the Fourth Hokage?
And what happened to the other characters in the waiting room at the hospital? You seemed to put a lot into their development just to toss them out after a few chapters.
You’ll probably have more of the special skill that Naruto was talking to Sasuke about come in to play later on down the road, I can’t wait to se how that turns out!
And I’ll just be honest, I hate Pallas and her brother. I hate fics that add more demons or beats or creatures to things that don’t need it. It just takes away form the ‘specialty’ the original 9 beast have.. It’s like having a child jump up and down screaming ‘I’m special to!”
I don’t mind Itachi’s and Kisame’s …’new looks’ though not my favorite, I’ve read worse. (kisame will always be blue in my eyes). I can’t see how your gonna make Naruto and itachi hook up now though… unless you turn this Yuri… or give him back a dick later on… (and NOT a strap on!)
I cant believe you actually knocked Naruto up though. I’ll have to wait and reserve my judgment on that after I see how you play this out.
I never intended for this review to be a flame, but this chapter has so many holes to me it’s like Swiss cheese. Not just ‘plot’ holes but like… detail, and explanation on scenes and acting events. And a change of background that basically says, ‘ok disregard everything in the last 7 chapters except emo Naruto and off we go again!’
I do blame most of my reaction on my own expectation of this story. I wasn’t the most patient fan of yours waiting for an update and finding myself literally checking every day to see if you updated. My expectation were put way to high by my own imagination of what the next chapter might be about, basing it off the first 7 chapters. I was expecting more character and plot development, rather then a couplet overhaul of the story direction.
I felt this chapter really took it out of the ‘naurto’ world completely and its now more of an AU fic.
I know its not right to voice such an opinion on something your working so hard on which is suppose to be ‘your’ entertainment more then mine.
And I have no right to put pressure on you to create something that will please everything single person who reads this fic. (its not possible I know!).
And I hope my big mouth won’t stop you from continuing to write and develop this story which I know many do love so much.
It took me a couple of read threw to actually understand what had happened. When I first went threw it I thought Itachi was waking up in the tunnels of Naruto’s mind. Then the room with the doctors and the flash back of the ANBU and the Hokaga had me thinking either they are in naruto’s mind and this is what he’s seeing, or itachi is picking up images from nartuos mind as to what HE thinks is going on around him?
Then this ‘thing’ pops up and another random character drags them off and .. attacked by ANBU?? Hun? Where they come from?
And how come Tsunade doesn’t seem to know about that later on? And why is there a dog demon thing?
And why are they on some stereotypical island in the middle of nowhere with some monk guy who knows the secret of the universe? Let me guess, he’s some kind of demon thing too right?(please tell me I’m wrong)
And what happened to the nurse back at the hospital?
And how did itachi end up out in the hallway in the first place? And ANOTHER Sauke/Naruto dream?
They are getting redundant after the first one and the sex part.
And why is itachi standing naked on the beach following a hallucination of the Fourth Hokage?
And what happened to the other characters in the waiting room at the hospital? You seemed to put a lot into their development just to toss them out after a few chapters.
You’ll probably have more of the special skill that Naruto was talking to Sasuke about come in to play later on down the road, I can’t wait to se how that turns out!
And I’ll just be honest, I hate Pallas and her brother. I hate fics that add more demons or beats or creatures to things that don’t need it. It just takes away form the ‘specialty’ the original 9 beast have.. It’s like having a child jump up and down screaming ‘I’m special to!”
I don’t mind Itachi’s and Kisame’s …’new looks’ though not my favorite, I’ve read worse. (kisame will always be blue in my eyes). I can’t see how your gonna make Naruto and itachi hook up now though… unless you turn this Yuri… or give him back a dick later on… (and NOT a strap on!)
I cant believe you actually knocked Naruto up though. I’ll have to wait and reserve my judgment on that after I see how you play this out.
I never intended for this review to be a flame, but this chapter has so many holes to me it’s like Swiss cheese. Not just ‘plot’ holes but like… detail, and explanation on scenes and acting events. And a change of background that basically says, ‘ok disregard everything in the last 7 chapters except emo Naruto and off we go again!’
I do blame most of my reaction on my own expectation of this story. I wasn’t the most patient fan of yours waiting for an update and finding myself literally checking every day to see if you updated. My expectation were put way to high by my own imagination of what the next chapter might be about, basing it off the first 7 chapters. I was expecting more character and plot development, rather then a couplet overhaul of the story direction.
I felt this chapter really took it out of the ‘naurto’ world completely and its now more of an AU fic.
I know its not right to voice such an opinion on something your working so hard on which is suppose to be ‘your’ entertainment more then mine.
And I have no right to put pressure on you to create something that will please everything single person who reads this fic. (its not possible I know!).
And I hope my big mouth won’t stop you from continuing to write and develop this story which I know many do love so much.
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July 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Dude! Naruto's pregnant?! How could I not see this coming! Argh! Kyuubi! You didn't do a very good job of protecting Naruto! ARGH! I can't wait for the next installment! I don't want to! Nor do I think I can! *cries* Life's not fair! Not only that, but I'm seriously questioning who the father is! *gasp* Could it be Sasuke? Or, dare I say it, Kana????? (...) Holy crap! The suspense will be the death of me!!!!!!!
Although it angered it me, I'm really happy that you put in a small snippet of what Jirayia did to Naruto. And I'm so happy that Itachi is planning his demise, 'cause if he isn't, then I am! And I just want to hit Tsunade, she's just... ARGH!!! She's just so useless sometimes! But hopefully, not anymore, with whatever it is she's planning to use Sasuke for... hmmmmm...
Did you mean to make the sentence structure of this chapter so... Chaotic? I mean, one minute I'm reading about Itachi wondering what's going on, then all of a sudden, you're putting Naruto being strapped down by some doctors. Itachi going on a rampage, the ANBU suddenly making an appearance, not only that, but was the creature that ran alongside Itachi and Kisame Kyuubi? It was just so chaotic, not at all like all the other chapters were structured! Maybe that was why it took you so long to update, because of just how chaotic this chapter is. Not saying anything bad about this chapter, merely asking if you purposely made the beginning of this chapter structured in such a chaotic form to show just how much shit was blowing up? Wow, five other forms of this same chapter? That's a looot of thinking, and a huge sign of the depth this fic really is.
I don't know if I should've laughed at Sasuke, or cried for Naruto. I was like "Haha! Sasuke! Eat this! Should'a thought that before you left for the pedophile and left Naruto all alone!" and then at the same time, "No! Don't die Naruto! Everything's going to be alright! (not really but...)" Although, I hope Sasuke finds out that Naturo's okay... *sweatdrop* Okay, maybe not okay, okay but well enough. Although, you did bring some sort of comedy relief, when Sasuke fell on his ass. That made me smile.
I want Kisame! He's just so... He's such a parental figure! I never would've pictured Kisame to be this way, but you made it so that, it just seems natural for Kisame to be such a parental figure! Eeeek! So cute!!! I wanted to hug him (but then thought better of it) so badly! And *gasp* Itachi a girl?????????! And Kisame having a 'normal' skin tone and 'normal' face figure?????????????! What the F happened!!!?????????????
-Damp *bows down to your awesomeness*
Although it angered it me, I'm really happy that you put in a small snippet of what Jirayia did to Naruto. And I'm so happy that Itachi is planning his demise, 'cause if he isn't, then I am! And I just want to hit Tsunade, she's just... ARGH!!! She's just so useless sometimes! But hopefully, not anymore, with whatever it is she's planning to use Sasuke for... hmmmmm...
Did you mean to make the sentence structure of this chapter so... Chaotic? I mean, one minute I'm reading about Itachi wondering what's going on, then all of a sudden, you're putting Naruto being strapped down by some doctors. Itachi going on a rampage, the ANBU suddenly making an appearance, not only that, but was the creature that ran alongside Itachi and Kisame Kyuubi? It was just so chaotic, not at all like all the other chapters were structured! Maybe that was why it took you so long to update, because of just how chaotic this chapter is. Not saying anything bad about this chapter, merely asking if you purposely made the beginning of this chapter structured in such a chaotic form to show just how much shit was blowing up? Wow, five other forms of this same chapter? That's a looot of thinking, and a huge sign of the depth this fic really is.
I don't know if I should've laughed at Sasuke, or cried for Naruto. I was like "Haha! Sasuke! Eat this! Should'a thought that before you left for the pedophile and left Naruto all alone!" and then at the same time, "No! Don't die Naruto! Everything's going to be alright! (not really but...)" Although, I hope Sasuke finds out that Naturo's okay... *sweatdrop* Okay, maybe not okay, okay but well enough. Although, you did bring some sort of comedy relief, when Sasuke fell on his ass. That made me smile.
I want Kisame! He's just so... He's such a parental figure! I never would've pictured Kisame to be this way, but you made it so that, it just seems natural for Kisame to be such a parental figure! Eeeek! So cute!!! I wanted to hug him (but then thought better of it) so badly! And *gasp* Itachi a girl?????????! And Kisame having a 'normal' skin tone and 'normal' face figure?????????????! What the F happened!!!?????????????
-Damp *bows down to your awesomeness*
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July 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awesome chapter. I really like that Kisame is becoming closer to Naruto as well as Itachi. The whole Itachi is female thing is just confusing me though. There seems to be a lot of gender switching going on. I am liking the more human looking Kisame though. So I'm guessing that Naruto is prego with Sasuke's baby? Anyway very cool chapter. I can't wait for more.
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July 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
YOU ARE CONFUSING THE FUCK OUT OF ME... HAVEN'T YOU EVER HEARD OF KEEPING SHIT SIMPLE. JESUS. MY HEAD FUCKING HURTS AND I STILL DON'T KNOW WHAT THE FUCK IS GOING ON. try shorter chapters and less information, hell try keeping to one point and working through it before you plow on with others PLEASE!!!
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July 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
well, this was a weird read ... COOL!!!!!! i'm kinda getting used to the kisame/naruto interaction. still a little confused but am getting the hang of it bit by bit.
see ya! oh, and sasuke's nightmare was an awesome piece of writing. ;-)
see ya! oh, and sasuke's nightmare was an awesome piece of writing. ;-)
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July 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OH WOW!! An update! Thank you so much! I teared up so badly here on this one. You did such a beautiful job. It filled my heart with so much angst and sadness. Poor Naruto! I really hope Sasuke can bring him back to himself. Those dreams between those two were so heartwrenching. *shows soaked tissues as proof* Dear lords.....I can't wait to read more! I can def see your hard work in this, and hearing that you have 5 different versions of this...I'm not surprised. it must've been difficult to decide what is best. But once again, wonderful job! And thank you so much for updating! This has GOT to be one of my favorite fics of all time! <3
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July 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ok, first up, congrats to Trulywicked for second place. I like her updated colored version. ^^
Secondly, what the hell? I won the contest and you didn't tell me? I'm all like, "who won?" Then saw it was me in your profile. Thanks for the update. >:P lol When its all said and done, you need to send me a pic of you wearing your shirt. You've got my email. (You can thank me by updating Bared Naked. hehehe)
Third: Yay! Updates!!! I had to read the whole Sanctuary story through in one sitting since its been a while and enjoyed every minute of it. So Naruto and Kyuubi merged? Or something similar? This is an incredibly awesome turn of events. Kana turning out to be a guardian spirt was a bit of a surprise but an interesting one, none the less. The more Naruto comes out of his/her shell, the better this story will get. He seriously needs to have a one to one with the fox to discuss whats going one once he gets his head straightened out. Oh yeah, and Female Itachi and non-sharked out Kisame?? Its truly hilarious. The chapter got a bit confusing there for a minute or two, but I'm sure it will clear up as the story goes on; your stories usually do. What was up with that bit about Minato though? I kind of love the fact that Itachi is remembering his encounters with Naruto back when he was still a leaf-nin, but I'm still a bit confused here and there as to where all the pieces fit.
Either way, excellent update. Keep up the (as always) fantastic work. =^^=
Secondly, what the hell? I won the contest and you didn't tell me? I'm all like, "who won?" Then saw it was me in your profile. Thanks for the update. >:P lol When its all said and done, you need to send me a pic of you wearing your shirt. You've got my email. (You can thank me by updating Bared Naked. hehehe)
Third: Yay! Updates!!! I had to read the whole Sanctuary story through in one sitting since its been a while and enjoyed every minute of it. So Naruto and Kyuubi merged? Or something similar? This is an incredibly awesome turn of events. Kana turning out to be a guardian spirt was a bit of a surprise but an interesting one, none the less. The more Naruto comes out of his/her shell, the better this story will get. He seriously needs to have a one to one with the fox to discuss whats going one once he gets his head straightened out. Oh yeah, and Female Itachi and non-sharked out Kisame?? Its truly hilarious. The chapter got a bit confusing there for a minute or two, but I'm sure it will clear up as the story goes on; your stories usually do. What was up with that bit about Minato though? I kind of love the fact that Itachi is remembering his encounters with Naruto back when he was still a leaf-nin, but I'm still a bit confused here and there as to where all the pieces fit.
Either way, excellent update. Keep up the (as always) fantastic work. =^^=
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July 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awww! Kisame cares!
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June 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
PLease update this story. It is absolutely the saddest thing I have ver read and I dont want it to end like this, so please update soon.