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August 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I cannot figure out your timeline. Mainly because 'Naruto'/'Kyuubi' suddenly appeared infront of Sasuke. Is this a flashback or is it happening in real time? It was mentioned that Naruto was pregnant before, so did it reach full conception? If so what happened to the kids? I'm confuuused! Just the timeline. Please clear up the timeline for me? Pretty please?
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August 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
well I'm enjoying the story, it made me cry a lot. poor naruto. I wanted him to have a happy life.
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August 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ok, never mind about that pregnant part, I just read your response. Still, the timeline is still confusing. Or it could just be me being impatient to read the rest of the story... =p
... Have a nice day!
... Have a nice day!
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August 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh...that was a metaphor. *looks at my captured and tortured Jiraiya...then kicks him* Well--HE MADE NARUTO CRY!
Anyway this chapter is really confusing me. How did Naruto get all the way back to Konoha in one night (Twenty miles is a long run for one night)? The restaurant scene was unnecessary...AND QUITE FRANKLY I DON'T GIVE A DAMN ABOUT AKIRA!! Kyuubi's revenge for Naruto makes no sense either. How does having sex with Sasuke and bearing a child got to do with revenge? AND WHERE THE HELL ARE ITACHI AND KISAME?
I DON'T UNDERSTAND! I think you should re-do the entire chapter. Make Sasuke come to Naruto, not Naruto come to Sasuke!! Screw the restaurant/alley scene and send Naruto straight to the hotel for a "we were worried don't ever do that again" moment with Itachi and Kisame. That would be much better.
UPDATE SOON!
Anyway this chapter is really confusing me. How did Naruto get all the way back to Konoha in one night (Twenty miles is a long run for one night)? The restaurant scene was unnecessary...AND QUITE FRANKLY I DON'T GIVE A DAMN ABOUT AKIRA!! Kyuubi's revenge for Naruto makes no sense either. How does having sex with Sasuke and bearing a child got to do with revenge? AND WHERE THE HELL ARE ITACHI AND KISAME?
I DON'T UNDERSTAND! I think you should re-do the entire chapter. Make Sasuke come to Naruto, not Naruto come to Sasuke!! Screw the restaurant/alley scene and send Naruto straight to the hotel for a "we were worried don't ever do that again" moment with Itachi and Kisame. That would be much better.
UPDATE SOON!
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August 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMG! Cliffhanger!?!? GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!
Can't wait for you to continue. And if you don't *shakes fist in an angry manner*
Can't wait for you to continue. And if you don't *shakes fist in an angry manner*
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August 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is a really good story., update soon!! =) Btw i offically HATE Sakura.. XD
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August 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yeah, you're doing fine. I'm still liking it. :)
And Sasuke with Naruto was pretty hot.
Sakura, though... what a bitch.
Write the next chapter soon.
And Sasuke with Naruto was pretty hot.
Sakura, though... what a bitch.
Write the next chapter soon.
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August 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow!! You weren't kidding when you said this story would take some twists! I wasn't excpecting that last part of the chap. It was hot. Sakura shoulda fallen from her perch lol. I hope she gets what she deserves. If she only knew who her new rival was. Girl doesn't know what she's messing with. I wonder what Sasuke's reaction is gonna be in the next chap. He can't be stupid enough to let our Naruto go again. Pls pls update soon!
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August 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow!! You weren't kidding when you said this story would take some twists! I wasn't excpecting that last part of the chap. It was hot. Sakura shoulda fallen from her perch lol. I hope she gets what she deserves. If she only knew who her new rival was. Girl doesn't know what she's messing with. I wonder what Sasuke's reaction is gonna be in the next chap. He can't be stupid enough to let our Naruto go again. Pls pls update soon!
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August 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I hope it an ita/naru fic
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