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July 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
waaaaaaah! Whats in store for our distraught lovers now!? Who was spying on them!? When will they bget to have more HOTT sex!?! A million and one questions! But no answers until further installations!! *bounces around merrily* I have told you i love and adore this fic something strong right? because i do amd i cant wait for the next update xD!!! Aishiteiru Hyper-chan!! Keep up the fabulous work! =D
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July 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
AW! you can't leave it like this. Please continue! : D
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July 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Poor boys, they're hurting so much!
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July 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hooray for you updating! I was stalking this site waiting for it...^^ This was a delicious mix of sexy and angsty...
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July 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like your story, I like how you explain the main characters motivations. Both Sasuke and Naruto act in ways that I cannot completely relate to, but you give enough reasoning in their actions that I understand why they do what they do.
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July 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I normally one of those people that hate AU stories, but I adore this one! In fact there are a bunch of well written interesting stories around these days. This one is my favorite though. I try to check once a day to see if it's been updated. Keep on writing!
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July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
NOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!
I've been reading the story since 12:00am to 2:00am and just when I think finally they got their chace is the last update (crying :( ) please update soon!!
I love the story you are now one of my favorite writers...
I don’t look this site two often because some stories are full of naughty stuff you know is to graphic and even do the site obviously imply heavy content I don't like to read senseless smut, I like to read story’s like this one where the relation ship of the characters develop slowly making the naughty stuff been portrayed with cuteness for example GaaraSai lovely.
Except the parts with Itashi bastard! I wanted to kick his behind poor Sasuke You make me hate him in this sotory :) but even then it make and important part of the plot (I really think you did a great job)so I didnt mind reeding them.
I forgot to tell you I laugh so hard when Neji told Naruto not to you know in the shower all the part since he woke up to Shika picking up Neji I loved. (actually I like the whole story but that part funny)
An a question:
Is Deidara Jane Doe???
Well hope to read more soon!!
I've been reading the story since 12:00am to 2:00am and just when I think finally they got their chace is the last update (crying :( ) please update soon!!
I love the story you are now one of my favorite writers...
I don’t look this site two often because some stories are full of naughty stuff you know is to graphic and even do the site obviously imply heavy content I don't like to read senseless smut, I like to read story’s like this one where the relation ship of the characters develop slowly making the naughty stuff been portrayed with cuteness for example GaaraSai lovely.
Except the parts with Itashi bastard! I wanted to kick his behind poor Sasuke You make me hate him in this sotory :) but even then it make and important part of the plot (I really think you did a great job)so I didnt mind reeding them.
I forgot to tell you I laugh so hard when Neji told Naruto not to you know in the shower all the part since he woke up to Shika picking up Neji I loved. (actually I like the whole story but that part funny)
An a question:
Is Deidara Jane Doe???
Well hope to read more soon!!
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July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Finally, an author has been chastened. Thank you, MiuMiuRAz. I'm glad that reader had the balls to point out how obnoxious and rude to the AFF community bumping stories is. Most readers ignore when writers 're-edit,' but yeah--it's annoying.
That said, don't dwell and depress on it too much... you're not the first and you won't be the last whose done this.
Take as much time as you need off as there is no point of writing when you feel crappy and you're under no obligation to update. You can also use your away time to revise what you're not satisfied with and do a single re-edit/chapter update when you're ready to post again. AFF will be around when you get back. Good luck, and thanks for your understanding and honesty. Much respect for your admission and decision.
About your story, it started off great although the ItaSasu stuff is a bit silly. To be honest, it's becoming rather incongruous and your earlier character/story development is being replaced by stock and cliche. You had a particularly well developed/developing moment when Sasuke accuses Naruto of sleeping his way to success, when that is in fact Sasuke's situation. That could have been one of the key threads to weave a complex and mature story around, but you just left it to fray and opted for the Naruto and Sasuke face all odds (or just eeeeeevil Itachi) to be together because for the sake of *cues music* true love... yadda yadda. It's too bad really, but it's still a fun read.
I didn't want to review because I didn't want to criticize your efforts. While--unlike Ras22's beyond exceptional 'Talk to Me' or the under appreciated Tsuki no Kitsune's 'Bounce Me Back'--I'm not holding my breath waiting for updates, when you do update I *do* read your story--meaning that I still find it enjoyable and worth the read. The last thing I wanted to do is discourage you and have you stop updating because of negative feedback.
I don't know which is more unfair, silently following a work all the while knowing authors thrive on feedback, or criticizing and discouraging them for the sake of... what?!
Thanks for sharing your story, and I hope you can forgive my prior silence and my present frankness... I sincerely wish you the best for your story, and I hope that after the bumping fiasco you're still able to have fun with it... because in the grand scheme of things that's all that matters.
cheers.
That said, don't dwell and depress on it too much... you're not the first and you won't be the last whose done this.
Take as much time as you need off as there is no point of writing when you feel crappy and you're under no obligation to update. You can also use your away time to revise what you're not satisfied with and do a single re-edit/chapter update when you're ready to post again. AFF will be around when you get back. Good luck, and thanks for your understanding and honesty. Much respect for your admission and decision.
About your story, it started off great although the ItaSasu stuff is a bit silly. To be honest, it's becoming rather incongruous and your earlier character/story development is being replaced by stock and cliche. You had a particularly well developed/developing moment when Sasuke accuses Naruto of sleeping his way to success, when that is in fact Sasuke's situation. That could have been one of the key threads to weave a complex and mature story around, but you just left it to fray and opted for the Naruto and Sasuke face all odds (or just eeeeeevil Itachi) to be together because for the sake of *cues music* true love... yadda yadda. It's too bad really, but it's still a fun read.
I didn't want to review because I didn't want to criticize your efforts. While--unlike Ras22's beyond exceptional 'Talk to Me' or the under appreciated Tsuki no Kitsune's 'Bounce Me Back'--I'm not holding my breath waiting for updates, when you do update I *do* read your story--meaning that I still find it enjoyable and worth the read. The last thing I wanted to do is discourage you and have you stop updating because of negative feedback.
I don't know which is more unfair, silently following a work all the while knowing authors thrive on feedback, or criticizing and discouraging them for the sake of... what?!
Thanks for sharing your story, and I hope you can forgive my prior silence and my present frankness... I sincerely wish you the best for your story, and I hope that after the bumping fiasco you're still able to have fun with it... because in the grand scheme of things that's all that matters.
cheers.
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July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I came to check and yes... I failed to review your story.. So here I am making up for it!
Since I already gushed at lenght today with you, let me show the point of view of my older sister, who faces the risks of R rated adds on aff and reads Colors at work. And her point of view is divided in three: 1 - she wants more. 2 - she agrees with me. 3 - she is obsseded with your deidara.
^_^
Finally, just want to add that the bathroom stall scene went up to the top three of my favorites on this fic. Not many people can make Sasuke break down in a believable way, and you aced it!
Since I already gushed at lenght today with you, let me show the point of view of my older sister, who faces the risks of R rated adds on aff and reads Colors at work. And her point of view is divided in three: 1 - she wants more. 2 - she agrees with me. 3 - she is obsseded with your deidara.
^_^
Finally, just want to add that the bathroom stall scene went up to the top three of my favorites on this fic. Not many people can make Sasuke break down in a believable way, and you aced it!
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July 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
STOP PIMPING YOUR OWN STORY IT GETS ANNOYING! If it's worth reading people will read it even if it isn't on the top of the list all the time.