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October 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
What about HINATA in the harem?
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October 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great story overall. Just need to work on the grammer and phrasing the sentences a little. Please Update Soon!
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October 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
read all the chapters and this is quiet a clever twist on the hole naruto univers
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August 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good update. Yeah, councils usually suck balls. Hairy, sweaty monkey balls. And I wonder who Hinata will end up with, as Hanabi now been slated for Naruto's caring arms? Keep it coming.
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July 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
this is amazing better than the censored on by 100 times you should upload this one on the site and just have it rated m for sexual content swearing and gore
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June 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very nice. It seems that you really like Kin, giving her huge tits and all. Keep up the good work. Hope to see more soon.
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June 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This has a lot of potential, but needs serious revision. You DO remember that Naruto is 12 at the times of him being genin, right? At that time he should have no idea what to do with a female, seeing as no one explained the basics to him. And with the amount of sex he and Anko have been having, she should be very pregnant by now. Fanfiction is written primarily by females and there seems to be a sort of compulsion in male writers who put sex into their stories that they have to tell the reader the woman's breast size. Why is that?
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June 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Now this is what I would call a good fic.
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June 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
me like more
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June 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
haku too