rate_review Reviews

I'll be honest with you: I love the words you use, and your beautiful poetic sentences.. but I don't understand a thing of what's happening the story xD Sorry :P
~Love,
Yentl

This is the crappiest crap I've ever read. What, am I supposed to ascertain from those last two paragraphs that Naruto is with Sasuke, and he's touching his wet-with-sweat pubes? And if someone likes running their hand through slick pubes almost as much as they like sex, they must not be having very good sex. Your writing style is fragmented at best, and conveys a very poor sense of the setting, for all that you apparently tried to sound poetic. Excuse me while I go hurl.

At least you can spell... that's something good. And I kind of like the title (that's why I clicked on this gem in the first place). Although grammatically, your title should be "Softly Comes the Night."

Oh my fucking god. This is one of the most amazing vignettes I've ever read. Your imagery was so rich, the words so apropos, the emotions so tangible. I am still swooning. I am going to read this at least a dozen time just to absorb its greatness. The closing line was like the finish of a fine wine.

The language you use in this piece is beautiful, poetic. I love the way the mountains are almost a character in their own right.

This has a different tone than I'm used to from you - or maybe I'm just not used to you writing Naruto. But it's gorgeous. I'm still trying to figure out the pairing, though. ^_^