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for Children of Darkness

by Luma

person Saki
schedule July 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really love the story so far, but there are a few confusing words in the story itself."Otokasan" is one of them since in japanese, it either means "tail and family property," "Cord and Department," and "It doesn't melt" in my language. ^^; I just wonder if you mean "Okaasan" which means mother. I really would love to read more of this as soon as it's updated but there are a few errors in it. I hope it helps out.^_^
person noezel7
schedule July 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Sasuke, Sasuke, Sasuke... You better had make up for what you done now that Taro trusts you, somewhat. You're doing a good job!! I can't wait till Naruto finally talks and what's up with Yukiko and Itachi? Anway, keep up the good work and I'll keep on reading and reveiewing!!!
person anonymous
schedule July 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ah, poor naru (and taro, i suppose). bastard's getting what he deserves for being an asshole. he's gonna have to walk over burning coals and broken glass. well, let's see what he tries next.
person Anaheyla
schedule July 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hmm.....I like your story. Not crazy about this Yukiko chick though.

Also my Japanese is terrible so I'm probly wrong, but Taiyogakure is Hidden Sun Village or whatever....right?
person Rosebud
schedule July 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
good chapter! ^^
Update soon!
person Damp
schedule July 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Aww!! Taro´s reaction made me cry a little!! I didn´t think he´d retalite, nor did I think that he even knew who his dad was!! But still, I hope Naruto and Sasuke recover enough to keep on living and get hitched with each other XDD.

-Damp *What was that Itachi was that made him react like that, I wonder??*
person Damp
schedule June 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey! I just loved the little butterfly idea ^^ So cute! PLEASE UPDATE!!!

-Damp *And it got me all confused about love and such o.o*
person Rosebud
schedule June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good chapter. I can't wait to see what happens when Sasuke tries to talk with Naruto and his son. Please update soon.^^
schedule June 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm really interested in seeing how this story goes. Great first chapter! The kid sounds cute too! :)
person Tall Tree
schedule June 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oooh, it's so sad, but I still love it though. Can't wait to see what happens next, update as soon as you can!