rate_review Reviews

I meant no offense whatsoever, like I said, you did a pretty good job at writing the story out. And I'm no spelling goddess, so I really can't blame you for spelling errors(like you said, no beta). If I wasn't so....well, chickenshit for sad stories I would have probably read it more thoroughly, but....ugh whatever. I just can't read these sad type of stories.....but if you managed to remind me of the doujin with your writing, then that most certainly means that your writing skills far exceed mine. So I'm just gunna say that you did a splendid job. You definitely put a lot of feeling into it. I was almost moved to tears....

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It got translated. :D

Sorry for the bother....and I'll just shut-up now.

I noticed in the description that you might be thinking of making this a two-shot..... All I have to say about that is...... IF YOU DON'T I THINK I JUST MIGHT DIE!!!!!!!!!!!! The story is SO SAD and you kinda left a cliffe with Naruto's heart fluttering and Sasuke looking up and thinking "Dobe....". So ya that is complete torture. Other than that your fic a very good one. Though now I am going to go through the whole day rather depressed.

That was cruel the way you ended it I was all hanging on to you every word then you stopped laughing very sadisticly. Wright more prewty Plewes. Smiles KA

make a second chapter, or a sequel, he needs to wake up!

I'm pretty darn sure this is from a doujin I've read, you did a pretty good job of writing it out, but you should still give credit where it's due. I'm pretty sure I have the doujin saved in my pc, and I could give you the name of the site were it could be found, I don't mean to be rude, but there, I have proof. O_o

Oh, and you have a few spelling mistakes.....I must seem like a b**** to you now. =_=

Noooooooooo! Don't do this to me! Make it a two-shot, please! It was so good! T.T Seriously! It should be some years later, and Naruto wakes up, and...and...YEAH! PLEASE! T.T

Oh this ended so sadly! I wanted Naruto to wake up. *pouts*

It was beautiful though. I can see Naruto doing something like that for Sasuke too but I wish he'd wake up so he could see what it did to him.

oh dear
that was amazing
so much depth wow
i was shedding tears near the end
truly unique in many ways
nice work
i hope to see some more
oneshots from you =]
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