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for Together We Make A Lollipop

by NotedForEloquence

schedule July 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ok now i am confused - exactly where is this going? - this is not meant to be a flame, just polite evaluation. i understand a little of what is going on and a possible direction - but you've jumped around so much its hard to tell - helpful hint - announce in your third chapter the sakura is having a flashback, it would help greatly.
person SasUke28
schedule July 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
lol i like the title reminds me of the symbology pairings picture of the combined symbolz!lol also it a good start i lykey!