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I EFFFIN LOVE IT I LOVE ALL THE SEX IN IT ITS SOOOO GOOD CANT WAIT TILL YOU UPDATE

Don't feel bad I damn near passed out the last lemon I wrote not to mention my mind was on over drive. You might consider yourself a horny loser BUT DON'T STOP UPDATING. Hey by any chance are Mikoto and Akane related too

I have to tell you about this foursome position I dreamt of a few days ago.

Naruto and Sasuke get in the 69 position (Sasuke on the bottom) while Itachi fucks Naruto doggy-style, and Kyuubi does Sasuke missionary.

You have the kinkiest, horniest, most perverted imagination believable. I would totally love to brainstorm sex scenes with you! Can I be you muse/bouncing board? You can get me via AIM: tnvr600. I don't have an MSN but If i get one. I'll let you know. But I get so many sexy ideas, but I don't have the writing talent to pull them off! like the vaseline thing...or the- eh you want to know but I won't say. ~w^

LOL! The mums were planning them getting together! Do they know about the incest though?

very very hot. That was a great chapter. I glad Naruto prefers to be uke, maybe sasuke will be able to seme for once.

Damn, I LOVE this story. And YAY for nosebleeds LOL!
This chapter was very HOT! I love Sasuke and Naruto together and then throwing Kyuubi in there was just like...WOW!!!

Please update soon, I need to read more!!!!XD

That is so FUCKING FUNNY you got a nosebleed!!!!!!!LOL:D Great chapter I can’t wait to read the next chapter so keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.

I LOVE LOVE LOVE IT!!! I can't wait for Kyuubi&Itachi's lemon! update soon please!!^-^

That was great! Write me if you update!

Please get a beta. You really need one. Preferably one with knowledge of correct grammar and punctuation. To demonstrate how much you need a beta here is my edit of your first sentence.

What you wrote: Both Uchiha brothers jogged brusquely through the constantly, congested, high school hallway, through crowds of fan girls, attempting to make refuge of their limo, waiting, just yards on the other side of the glass double-doors.

What it should be: Both Uchiha brothers jogged through crowds of fan girls in the congested high school hallway, attempting to take refuge in the limo that was waiting just yards away on the other side of the glass double doors.

Also as a side note the word brusque is usually used to describe behavior directed towards other people. A person may say something brusquely, or share a brusque handshake, but it isn't a word that I would use to describe a manner or jogging.

oh my god i love u so much that was so freakin awsome i love u so much god