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July 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ack. I feel like you are teasing me. Thank you for updating even though it took you away from HP.
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July 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I hate cliffies!!!! Gahhh!! you beter update soon!!! 'cuss I'm realy curious!
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July 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
erm... there is no kanji for ramen. It's in katakana. ra-me-n. ラメン。
I'm assuming you've never taken any Japanese coursework, so I'll be nice, but. You shouldn't pepper your story with a language you don't understand in the slightest. Japanese has three syllabaries: hiragana, katakana, and kanji. Many words do not have kanji.
It's a small step from assuming that everything has a kanji character to assuming that Naruto characters other than Lee speak to each other in desu-masu form, or assuming that people actually use the noun "koi" to reference anything but carp, or committing any Fangirl Japanese atrocity. Please nip this in the bud. If you don't know Japanese, don't use it in your fic. If you want to use it in fic, take a few years of Japanese classes first. Most colleges offer them these days, especially if you attend a larger university.
Just a warning; I, and just about everyone on the fanficrants LJ community, close windows at the first sighting of an unnecessary Japanese word. In our minds, any author who doesn't care enough about her fic to write it in one language doesn't deserve to have her fic read. If you want to write in Japanese, you'd best write the whole damn thing in Japanese, and I do not mean in romaji (roman characters used to transliterate Japanese).
Sorry for the ranting, but misused "Japanese" bothers me.
I'm assuming you've never taken any Japanese coursework, so I'll be nice, but. You shouldn't pepper your story with a language you don't understand in the slightest. Japanese has three syllabaries: hiragana, katakana, and kanji. Many words do not have kanji.
It's a small step from assuming that everything has a kanji character to assuming that Naruto characters other than Lee speak to each other in desu-masu form, or assuming that people actually use the noun "koi" to reference anything but carp, or committing any Fangirl Japanese atrocity. Please nip this in the bud. If you don't know Japanese, don't use it in your fic. If you want to use it in fic, take a few years of Japanese classes first. Most colleges offer them these days, especially if you attend a larger university.
Just a warning; I, and just about everyone on the fanficrants LJ community, close windows at the first sighting of an unnecessary Japanese word. In our minds, any author who doesn't care enough about her fic to write it in one language doesn't deserve to have her fic read. If you want to write in Japanese, you'd best write the whole damn thing in Japanese, and I do not mean in romaji (roman characters used to transliterate Japanese).
Sorry for the ranting, but misused "Japanese" bothers me.
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July 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
haha, i started laughing when Naruto said he would "Woo his own lover..." I dunno, it just made me laugh a little! Please have a new chapter soon! I like how your approaching the whole Naruto/Sasuke relationship. Hmm..but if Sasuke and Naruto fall in love, then find out that Naruto is pregnant, then the baby dies, will that make Sasuke reject Naruto?..Surely not. I'm positive you've got a trick up your sleeve!
oh, and I added you as an author I liked on my homepage!
Ja!
oh, and I added you as an author I liked on my homepage!
Ja!
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July 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Eh, my last review got messed up but I'll try again now.
Basically... I LOVE this story. My favorite part must be how you've kept everyone acting in such a believable manner. I mean, I love Slash, but normally it's not exactly something that you can really believe. Most characters are just straight. The way you're playing Naruto and Sasuke though, it's actually making me think 'Hmm... maybe?' and that's not something a lot of stories are able to do. I actually registered here just so that I could review you (though maybe I'll post something of mine eventually) since I think you deserve a lot more ^^
Basically... I LOVE this story. My favorite part must be how you've kept everyone acting in such a believable manner. I mean, I love Slash, but normally it's not exactly something that you can really believe. Most characters are just straight. The way you're playing Naruto and Sasuke though, it's actually making me think 'Hmm... maybe?' and that's not something a lot of stories are able to do. I actually registered here just so that I could review you (though maybe I'll post something of mine eventually) since I think you deserve a lot more ^^
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July 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ha.. i love it!!! Naruto does not even consider for a moment that the suprise party on his birthday could possibly be for him. =^^= hehehe.
great job. keep up the good work!
great job. keep up the good work!
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July 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh man, that was sooo funny. Please keep going and thank you for the quick updates.
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July 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
greta chapter. the ending was really sweet and the thing about old hags, bastards , and dobies was funny. thanks and can't wait for the next update.
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July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This story is really good. I love how you are setting everything up. I took a parenting course for a need credit (Had the worst teacher ever), and the first trimester is always the most concern one. That is why most pregnant women (or guy in naruto case) have to be check up to make sure everything is going right and if some medication are needed.
You are doing a great job, and I do hope you keep going with this fic. I'll be waiting for your next update -big smiles-
You are doing a great job, and I do hope you keep going with this fic. I'll be waiting for your next update -big smiles-
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July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That Naruto is just an adorable ditz. Reminds me of Usagi of sailor moon. She can be a ditz, but she always comes through when you need her. Naruto is the same way. What about Gaara? How will Naruto take his advances and when will they find out Naruto is pregnant and that Sasuke is the father? Hurry with the next chapter!!!