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January 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
That was chapter 18 not 8, sorry.
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October 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
WOW!! This story is really getting exciting!! Very well done. I can hardly wait for the next chapter....they dun went and pissed the old girl off!
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June 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I loved how you developed the story especailly the characters and their relationships! I like your writing style and hope to read more of this story. I was a little worried when I read that this story is about a year old. I hope you finish it and update soon.
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June 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 18: (*whistles*) ¡°Sasuke was still lying next to him in bed in all of his alabaster, muscled nakedness.¡± ¢¾__¢¾ . . . . Ahaha, hickeys! XD . . . . Heh. The Kyuubi¡¯s feeling sorry for himself. ^^ . . . . (*snort*) ¡°Pay rent.¡± I love that idea. XD . . . . Wow, ¡°not anymore.¡± . . . . This is getting interesting, the Kyuubi feeding chakra into the YY child. . . . Love how Naruto is suddenly aware of all the accidents he gets into. . . . (Grrr.) Beat it, Jiraiya. . . . Heh. ¡°Sasuke could feel himself pale. ¡®He wouldn¡¯t.¡¯¡± >D . . . . I hope they can beat Jiraiya out of releasing the book (considering that Naruto has to be careful now). . . . (*snicker*) Nice threat, Naruto. I¡¯d listen to it, Jiraiya. ^^ . . . . Hah, that got his attention. >D
¡°Well, brat, the only thing I can say is that we¡¯re in some deep shit.¡± Love how mild he said that. . . . ¡°Then you can kiss your gonads goodbye.¡± XDDD
I hope Jiraiya doesn¡¯t publish that book. Or if he does, then Naruto goes through with his threat. Also, if Jiraiya¡¯s not welcome at that guy¡¯s place anymore, what¡¯s to stop him from refusing to look at Naruto¡¯s seal?
¡°Well, brat, the only thing I can say is that we¡¯re in some deep shit.¡± Love how mild he said that. . . . ¡°Then you can kiss your gonads goodbye.¡± XDDD
I hope Jiraiya doesn¡¯t publish that book. Or if he does, then Naruto goes through with his threat. Also, if Jiraiya¡¯s not welcome at that guy¡¯s place anymore, what¡¯s to stop him from refusing to look at Naruto¡¯s seal?
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June 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 19: Love how worried Sasuke is. . . . “Naruto’s fuse seemed to be shorter these days [. . .]” Yeah, that is saying something.
Boy, that must be hell. No ramen. . . . So you like his hair long. Just cut it and let it grow back later! . . . . Love how Sasuke’s trying to calmly reason with him. . . . Love the last line of that paragraph: “Naruto was so confused.” . . . . Uh-oh, the heat is rising. . . . What the – ?! What are they doing here?! o_O . . . . God, I hope this doesn’t embarrass Naruto too badly. (Then again, maybe it will convince him to wear the disguise.) . . . . Heheh, Tenten’s embarrassed. . . . Oh. I thought Naruto wouldn’t wear the costume. . . . Nice job, Tenten. ^^ And I like her interpretation. . . . Aww, I love her support. ♥ . . . . “Fate favors you.” I love that line. And I love Sasuke’s response. . . . HAH! Love Naruto’s elaboration on how he feels “girly”. XDD
Heh. “Of course, why should he take orders from a book.” ^^ . . . . “Hey, it had happened before.” Lol. . . . Awww, massage time! ♥ . . . . Oh boy. *__* . . . . Love the sweet words Sasuke’s saying to Naruto. They’re making a hot scene. . . . Aww, so sweet. ♥ . . . . “He didn’t know how to respond.” I’m halfway between “Awww” and “Uh-oh” to that line.
Boy, that must be hell. No ramen. . . . So you like his hair long. Just cut it and let it grow back later! . . . . Love how Sasuke’s trying to calmly reason with him. . . . Love the last line of that paragraph: “Naruto was so confused.” . . . . Uh-oh, the heat is rising. . . . What the – ?! What are they doing here?! o_O . . . . God, I hope this doesn’t embarrass Naruto too badly. (Then again, maybe it will convince him to wear the disguise.) . . . . Heheh, Tenten’s embarrassed. . . . Oh. I thought Naruto wouldn’t wear the costume. . . . Nice job, Tenten. ^^ And I like her interpretation. . . . Aww, I love her support. ♥ . . . . “Fate favors you.” I love that line. And I love Sasuke’s response. . . . HAH! Love Naruto’s elaboration on how he feels “girly”. XDD
Heh. “Of course, why should he take orders from a book.” ^^ . . . . “Hey, it had happened before.” Lol. . . . Awww, massage time! ♥ . . . . Oh boy. *__* . . . . Love the sweet words Sasuke’s saying to Naruto. They’re making a hot scene. . . . Aww, so sweet. ♥ . . . . “He didn’t know how to respond.” I’m halfway between “Awww” and “Uh-oh” to that line.
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June 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 20: The chapter title is . . . odd.
Oh no. His daughter died? ó_ò . . . . Jeez. This is putting Jiraiya in a bad light. . . . O.O Uh-oh. Serious uh-oh. It’s the Akatsuki. (I like how you led me on for a moment there.) . . . . Eh? I thought Jiraiya taught the Fourth. . . . Yeesh. (*shiver*) I’d hate to cross Itachi on a bad day. Actually, I’d hate to cross him on any day. I’d hate to cross him at all. He’s scary. ;_; (I like him, though.)
Boy, Sasuke’s going to be pissed as hell (understatement) when/if he finds the burned Morio.
“Council meetings were usually planned several days in advance.” Yeah, but they’re the council. I’ve been getting the feeling that they do what they want, and if anyone doesn’t like it, fuck them. The council cheats. D< . . . . Old fucks. (‘Scuse me.) . . . . Danzou. A total hypocrite if he’s a snake. . . . “Do you attempt to explain your actions to this council, then?” Man, these guys are pathetic. I swear, Tsunade should get a rebellion going. . . . (*sigh*) I feel bad for Tsunade. She’s got a temper and she’s forced to reign it in when around these freaks. . . . “As the leader of the shinobi of Konoha, only you have the power to order the Uchiha to rebuild his clan.” That’s bullshit. If the council can do as much as they can, they can do that themselves. . . . “This meeting is adjourned.” Hehehe, suckers. She may have suggested it, but she didn’t say she’d do it. They said “It’s your duty.” They didn’t tell her to actually do it, though. . . . Like I said: What if everyone just ignored the council and Danzou? What then? They’d probably be fine. . . . (*snicker*) Ah, HERE’S the mud cannon. Time to play dirty. ^_^
I can’t wait to see what she’s planned out.
Oh no. His daughter died? ó_ò . . . . Jeez. This is putting Jiraiya in a bad light. . . . O.O Uh-oh. Serious uh-oh. It’s the Akatsuki. (I like how you led me on for a moment there.) . . . . Eh? I thought Jiraiya taught the Fourth. . . . Yeesh. (*shiver*) I’d hate to cross Itachi on a bad day. Actually, I’d hate to cross him on any day. I’d hate to cross him at all. He’s scary. ;_; (I like him, though.)
Boy, Sasuke’s going to be pissed as hell (understatement) when/if he finds the burned Morio.
“Council meetings were usually planned several days in advance.” Yeah, but they’re the council. I’ve been getting the feeling that they do what they want, and if anyone doesn’t like it, fuck them. The council cheats. D< . . . . Old fucks. (‘Scuse me.) . . . . Danzou. A total hypocrite if he’s a snake. . . . “Do you attempt to explain your actions to this council, then?” Man, these guys are pathetic. I swear, Tsunade should get a rebellion going. . . . (*sigh*) I feel bad for Tsunade. She’s got a temper and she’s forced to reign it in when around these freaks. . . . “As the leader of the shinobi of Konoha, only you have the power to order the Uchiha to rebuild his clan.” That’s bullshit. If the council can do as much as they can, they can do that themselves. . . . “This meeting is adjourned.” Hehehe, suckers. She may have suggested it, but she didn’t say she’d do it. They said “It’s your duty.” They didn’t tell her to actually do it, though. . . . Like I said: What if everyone just ignored the council and Danzou? What then? They’d probably be fine. . . . (*snicker*) Ah, HERE’S the mud cannon. Time to play dirty. ^_^
I can’t wait to see what she’s planned out.
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June 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
the counsal really sucks to take someone elses life into their own hands to do with as they please, and even dirtyer to take someones childrens lives and promise them to someone else.im guessing the counsil needs a small army of its own to overthrow the hokage or something ne.too bad for sasuke and naruto their trip is waisted sinse that morio(sounds like mario) guy is dead already thanks to itachis anger, nothings going good for their team right now .well hope you can update soon
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June 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 16: (*in reaction to the A/N and chapter title*): Oh no.
Love how fast Sasuke picked up what Naruto was up to. . . . OOPS: “Riki and Takashi . . . did next?” Got the “t” and the “k” mixed up. . . . Love picturing Sasuke as a wolf. (Personally, I see Kakashi as that, but it’s fun to picture Sasuke as one too from time to time.) . . . . Love the emphasis on how this is the point of no return.
Love how fast Sasuke picked up what Naruto was up to. . . . OOPS: “Riki and Takashi . . . did next?” Got the “t” and the “k” mixed up. . . . Love picturing Sasuke as a wolf. (Personally, I see Kakashi as that, but it’s fun to picture Sasuke as one too from time to time.) . . . . Love the emphasis on how this is the point of no return.
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June 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 17: (*snicker*) “You could have knocked me up!” A little redundant now, wouldn’t you say? . . . . Hehehe, no more hickeys. . . . Hah! Too bad, Sasuke! Nyeh =P . . . . Embarrassment, okay. But why fear? õ_ô
Aww, that was sweet: “Well, I’m the manliest pregnant dude you’ve ever met, right?” *nod* I hope Sasuke was honestly trying to make Naruto feel better, and not just being honest (because, how many pregnant dudes do you meet, manly or not?). . . . “It was all just another friendly argument the dobe and the teme enjoyed so much.” (*blinks*) Old married couple.
HAH! Sasuke’s jealous of the ramen! XD . . . . You’re going to owe him big for this, Sasuke (carrying him off while he’s in the middle of eating). . . . Ooh, love the last bit of this scene and what it portends. (*drool*)
Oh, shit. Not now. . . . He better not spy or eavesdrop on them. . . . Not cool, not cool, goddammit. . . . No, it is NOT hot, Jiraiya, cuz you’re watching them! (Grrr) . . . . (Sorry, I’ve got this big denial thing about Jiraiya being interested in anything that involves two guys getting intimate with each other. I’m more amused by him being homophobic. Sorry for the complaints.) . . . . Hey, um, you melded this scene from Jiraiya’s perspective to the boys’ perspectives. It was kind of confusing. . . . Heh. Even if he changes the names, those two are still going to know when they find the books. And boy, will they be mad at Jiraiya! ^^
Aww, that was sweet: “Well, I’m the manliest pregnant dude you’ve ever met, right?” *nod* I hope Sasuke was honestly trying to make Naruto feel better, and not just being honest (because, how many pregnant dudes do you meet, manly or not?). . . . “It was all just another friendly argument the dobe and the teme enjoyed so much.” (*blinks*) Old married couple.
HAH! Sasuke’s jealous of the ramen! XD . . . . You’re going to owe him big for this, Sasuke (carrying him off while he’s in the middle of eating). . . . Ooh, love the last bit of this scene and what it portends. (*drool*)
Oh, shit. Not now. . . . He better not spy or eavesdrop on them. . . . Not cool, not cool, goddammit. . . . No, it is NOT hot, Jiraiya, cuz you’re watching them! (Grrr) . . . . (Sorry, I’ve got this big denial thing about Jiraiya being interested in anything that involves two guys getting intimate with each other. I’m more amused by him being homophobic. Sorry for the complaints.) . . . . Hey, um, you melded this scene from Jiraiya’s perspective to the boys’ perspectives. It was kind of confusing. . . . Heh. Even if he changes the names, those two are still going to know when they find the books. And boy, will they be mad at Jiraiya! ^^
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June 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The counsel of konoha are truly evil! They need to be punished!! Severely!!! Glad to see you back on this story. Welcome back!!!