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July 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
okay, you definitely know how i feel about this story. you know how it tore at my heart and made me want to weep in sorrow because of it's horrendous angst, but i must say, that aside from all of that, this was an incredibly beautiful fic, and you should be incredibly proud of yourself. this story not only had all of the important elements that an angsty death-fic needs, but it had a lot more.
the way iruka and naruto interacted was heartbreaking. and it was devastating to see naruto telling his beloved sensei that he would no longer be around, that he had to leave behind everything he loved, that he'd continued to deceive everyone he loved because he didn't want to make them worry. and the way you wrote iruka during that was incredible. he was hurt and he was determined to make everything better, to make naruto forget the pain he'd suffered through. iruka is ever the mother hen, but also the mother who knows how to let go, when he has to, and it's beautifully done in this story.
sakura's goodbye with naruto is especially depressing. i have to say that it was particularly hard to read about sakura telling naruto that she should have gone out with him. when she broke down and told him that he needed to take care of himself, that he needed to care and fend for himself without worrying about how others would see him was very heartbreaking. it made me sad to read how your sakura had grown into the beautiful and mature woman that you portray her to be. and when she realized just who naruto was in love with... i wanted to weep with her.
kakashi's goodbye was sad, and hard to read. kakashi, the stoic ninja who would rather not show his emotions because of the readiness to be destroyed by those very emotions. and when he was leaning over naruto, giving the boy his final love and respect, when he allowed naruto to see what was finally behind the mask, i cried. because kakashi's greatest secret is himself. and to allow the dying ninja to finally see his face, it was moving. not to mention the fact that kakashi realized the other's dreams would never come true, no matter how hard he wished it to.
and the hardest one, the most heart-wrenching one was sasuke's. maybe it was the love he felt for naruto that made the confession so very hard. maybe it was what made him not want to believe the very facts that were placed before him. you don't know, but sasuke's reaction to his dying partner was absolutely heart-breaking. it was as though they had been lovers and were being forced to say good-bye, even though they didn't want to. it was so hard to read sasuke trying desperately to keep his composure in the face of the truth, to see that naruto really was dying and that nothing he did would bring the other back. and perhaps the hardest to read was naruto's actual dying. it was so simple, so understated that it made it hurt that much more.
and sasuke's final reaction to naruto's death, his complete breakdown in the room was poignant and moving and touching. because when you love somebody, you find it incredibly hard to let them go. and when they die, when they move on without you, it makes you want to deny it, it makes you want to scream and shout and destroy something. and sasuke's reaction was brilliant. it was realistic and it was hard to let him go. as the reader.
but the funeral, i think, stole the show. i know you didn't like it, and that's okay. but you have to realize, the funeral was beautiful. it took my breath away when sasuke gave naruto the scratched protector before they interned him in his tomb. and the way it was done, the part sasuke had to play, the way his words meant so very much. i cried. i cried a lot, as you know (because BG had to tell, huh?)
this was a beautiful, moving, depressing, wonderful fic. you did amazingly and you deserve to be praised for this piece. it's incredibly touching, it brings the reader into the story so that they aren't watching naruto say goodbye to the few people who made a huge difference in his life, we're actually part of that crowd. you're story reads as though we have touched naruto's life in some profound and monumental way and it's rare the authors who can do that. great job with this story!
*loves*
~hanyou-elf
the way iruka and naruto interacted was heartbreaking. and it was devastating to see naruto telling his beloved sensei that he would no longer be around, that he had to leave behind everything he loved, that he'd continued to deceive everyone he loved because he didn't want to make them worry. and the way you wrote iruka during that was incredible. he was hurt and he was determined to make everything better, to make naruto forget the pain he'd suffered through. iruka is ever the mother hen, but also the mother who knows how to let go, when he has to, and it's beautifully done in this story.
sakura's goodbye with naruto is especially depressing. i have to say that it was particularly hard to read about sakura telling naruto that she should have gone out with him. when she broke down and told him that he needed to take care of himself, that he needed to care and fend for himself without worrying about how others would see him was very heartbreaking. it made me sad to read how your sakura had grown into the beautiful and mature woman that you portray her to be. and when she realized just who naruto was in love with... i wanted to weep with her.
kakashi's goodbye was sad, and hard to read. kakashi, the stoic ninja who would rather not show his emotions because of the readiness to be destroyed by those very emotions. and when he was leaning over naruto, giving the boy his final love and respect, when he allowed naruto to see what was finally behind the mask, i cried. because kakashi's greatest secret is himself. and to allow the dying ninja to finally see his face, it was moving. not to mention the fact that kakashi realized the other's dreams would never come true, no matter how hard he wished it to.
and the hardest one, the most heart-wrenching one was sasuke's. maybe it was the love he felt for naruto that made the confession so very hard. maybe it was what made him not want to believe the very facts that were placed before him. you don't know, but sasuke's reaction to his dying partner was absolutely heart-breaking. it was as though they had been lovers and were being forced to say good-bye, even though they didn't want to. it was so hard to read sasuke trying desperately to keep his composure in the face of the truth, to see that naruto really was dying and that nothing he did would bring the other back. and perhaps the hardest to read was naruto's actual dying. it was so simple, so understated that it made it hurt that much more.
and sasuke's final reaction to naruto's death, his complete breakdown in the room was poignant and moving and touching. because when you love somebody, you find it incredibly hard to let them go. and when they die, when they move on without you, it makes you want to deny it, it makes you want to scream and shout and destroy something. and sasuke's reaction was brilliant. it was realistic and it was hard to let him go. as the reader.
but the funeral, i think, stole the show. i know you didn't like it, and that's okay. but you have to realize, the funeral was beautiful. it took my breath away when sasuke gave naruto the scratched protector before they interned him in his tomb. and the way it was done, the part sasuke had to play, the way his words meant so very much. i cried. i cried a lot, as you know (because BG had to tell, huh?)
this was a beautiful, moving, depressing, wonderful fic. you did amazingly and you deserve to be praised for this piece. it's incredibly touching, it brings the reader into the story so that they aren't watching naruto say goodbye to the few people who made a huge difference in his life, we're actually part of that crowd. you're story reads as though we have touched naruto's life in some profound and monumental way and it's rare the authors who can do that. great job with this story!
*loves*
~hanyou-elf
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July 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Gah! You made me cry! So not cool.
However, the story was beautifully sad. It would be just like Naruto, to comfort everyone he cares about when he's the one dying.
However, the story was beautifully sad. It would be just like Naruto, to comfort everyone he cares about when he's the one dying.
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July 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
that was extremely sad!!!! i hadn't cried for reading a story in a long time and you expressed the feelings of the characters extremely well hell i wished you put some of the rookie nine in there im sure it only make the story all the more tragic......god!!! you are an amazing writer! keep up the good work!....no more sad ones ok...i wont be able to stop crying if you continue lol
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July 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Damn it that was truly depressing. Thanks anyway.
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July 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
D8
IT was so SAD. I mean i am a big softy, but now i have tears pooling out of my eyes and i'm sitting here and just... damn, good story. Very GOOD story and dont let anyone tell you different! I love it, this is definetly one of my favs, i love angsty death stories like this. This was... wow, most death fic result in poor Naru-chan commiting suicide [which aren't back fics] but veiwing Naruto's death like this was just perfect.
I hope to god you continue to write more fanfics and keep up the great work that you're doing.
Good luck.
IT was so SAD. I mean i am a big softy, but now i have tears pooling out of my eyes and i'm sitting here and just... damn, good story. Very GOOD story and dont let anyone tell you different! I love it, this is definetly one of my favs, i love angsty death stories like this. This was... wow, most death fic result in poor Naru-chan commiting suicide [which aren't back fics] but veiwing Naruto's death like this was just perfect.
I hope to god you continue to write more fanfics and keep up the great work that you're doing.
Good luck.