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July 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ok, first off my opinion on this story is that it’s good! I like the set up, and the fact that Sasuke’s taking Naruto against his will. It’ll be interesting to see how Naruto reacts when he realizes what’s happened and I'm also curious as to how Sasuke is going to keep the blonde from dragging them both back to Konoha.
Now, concerning the layout, I do have a suggestion. You might want to go through and separate the content into smaller paragraphs and do the same in regards to the text. It'll make the story easier on the eyes.
Other then that, I think this fic has a lot of potential and I hope that you’ll update soon.
~Crimson2006
Now, concerning the layout, I do have a suggestion. You might want to go through and separate the content into smaller paragraphs and do the same in regards to the text. It'll make the story easier on the eyes.
Other then that, I think this fic has a lot of potential and I hope that you’ll update soon.
~Crimson2006
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July 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Naruto is going to be pissed!!! You have to continue this. Please!
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July 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very good beginning! I like this so far! :)
Two things though, you should try to separate the chapter into at least two paragraphs so that it is easier to read and also, you should check your spelling because there were several misspelled words. Other than that, it was a great first chapter. :)
Two things though, you should try to separate the chapter into at least two paragraphs so that it is easier to read and also, you should check your spelling because there were several misspelled words. Other than that, it was a great first chapter. :)
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July 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i love this chapter when i got to the end i was so upset cause i was all involved in the story i cant wait till you update i am really looking forward to the next chapter