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person Spaz666
schedule January 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
You evil writer.. You just keep teasing us readers without really giving us anything real to go on! That's just tooo EVIL!!!!!!
Seriously though, it is good. entertaining, mysterious, creepy, but the chapters are too short for my tastes. That goes back to the evil comment...
schedule June 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh...possesive...-giggles- Get on with it! I want to see more of this...-brings out video camera- Cupcakes for you!
person Hen
schedule August 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That's good stuff. I personally thought it was Ita/Naru (which I prefer to Sasu/Naru).
person Chria
schedule August 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Please continue this. I love the sound of madness this expresses. I suggest reading it out loud like I did because it sounds 10x more seductive and sensual. Much love~
person despairs
schedule August 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh this is really good..i cant wait to read more! :D
Dont know why but the possessiveness is a turn on lol.
person Anon
schedule August 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
u should write moore it sounds good
person ShagTag
schedule August 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well, first off-great first chap-albeit short but I can deal.
So anyways, normally I don't like first person P.O.V's but I thought that you really stayed in character (which I'm assuming is Itachi-because Sasuke isn't that...odd-if I'm wrong then I'll smack myself for being a hopeless case.) and I liked the obsession, not many people write really creppy and obsessive fics anymore. Anyways, I'll try and keep up with your story, can't wait for more.

the Crimson Eagle
--better known as Orgy-of-Death.
d[-.-]b
person kati
schedule August 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMFG YOU SOOOOOOOOOO HAVE TO UPDATE!!!! This is awesome and I love Itanaru esp when itachi is like this physco-dude and treats naruto like a wee pet and its all 'this is too weird!' and 'awww.,..so cute!!' *stops to take take breath*okayokayokay i'll calm down but only if you update!!
person Anon
schedule August 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Great first chapter! Please continue!!!
schedule August 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
nice begining to your story. will it be a mpreg since sasuke (you know it's him) is talking about starting their clan. how is sasuke following naruto around everywhere anyway. how is it that no has seen him (unless he has not been doing it long). shouldn't naruto be able to sense or even smell (since he is merging with kuubyi) that sasuke was in his house. anyway i can't wait to see wher your story leads.