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September 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
XD that's intersting. Hope you post the nest chappie soon.
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September 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Actually no it didn't suck, hell it was one of the most original plot ideas I've seen in a Naurto story in a while, do you think you could continue writing this story??
Really I loved it, it was so funny seeing Sasuke working in a burger joint, and Naruto being one of those annoying customers we jsut wish we could tell to hurry it up and pick the meal damnit! Untterly original and funny as all hell.
Really I loved it, it was so funny seeing Sasuke working in a burger joint, and Naruto being one of those annoying customers we jsut wish we could tell to hurry it up and pick the meal damnit! Untterly original and funny as all hell.
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August 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Heh. That's so Naruto-esq. Totally without tact, just walk right in and dive headfirst... I can't really tell where you are going with this just yet, but I look foward to seeing what you do. Here are some suggestions/questions you might want to consider:
1) Look into Sasuke's family life? I mean, how did he end up working at a Burger barn!
2) Maybe Naruto and Sasuke met as children and Sasuke has since forgotten but Naruto has not.
3) Have Sasuke get fired and get hired under Naruto's employ - Naruto being the owner/vice president/CEO of some company!
Hope that helps! Ja ne!
DA
1) Look into Sasuke's family life? I mean, how did he end up working at a Burger barn!
2) Maybe Naruto and Sasuke met as children and Sasuke has since forgotten but Naruto has not.
3) Have Sasuke get fired and get hired under Naruto's employ - Naruto being the owner/vice president/CEO of some company!
Hope that helps! Ja ne!
DA
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August 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Gah! Nooooooo, it's just a one-shot(cries) That was really good.(looks at you with big shiny puppy eyes and trembling lips)I want more. You're gonna do like a sequal right?
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August 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
No, no this didn't suck. It was cute!!!! I really liked it! ^^
I probably cracked up a dozen times...I just find the idea of Sasuke working at a burger joint extremely funny. And I can picture Naruto being one of those people who takes FOREVER to order.
OH, btw… my demented brain is a little slow right now so I forgot to add:
“OMG you’d consider featuring me,” o.0 in that last review.
I’ve never been featured before and I’m honored by the mere implication! ^^
Well, keep on writing. I'm always happy to read your work!
~Crimson2006
I probably cracked up a dozen times...I just find the idea of Sasuke working at a burger joint extremely funny. And I can picture Naruto being one of those people who takes FOREVER to order.
OH, btw… my demented brain is a little slow right now so I forgot to add:
“OMG you’d consider featuring me,” o.0 in that last review.
I’ve never been featured before and I’m honored by the mere implication! ^^
Well, keep on writing. I'm always happy to read your work!
~Crimson2006
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August 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was great! You should continue writing it! ^^
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August 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Even though I already knew, no yaoi...I'm going to go all emo now hehe j/k. This was really good actually, drabbles are so entertaining for me! This would be cool if you were going to add more chapters to it, but we'll see what the other reviewers have to say ^_^ As for this reviewer? I have some youtube videos to work on!
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August 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This was the most adorable thing I have ever read. XD
The humor was sweet and the kiss was just too cute. Sasuke and his little temper is sex, pure sex.
I loved it.
The humor was sweet and the kiss was just too cute. Sasuke and his little temper is sex, pure sex.
I loved it.
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August 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Lol the review button says Review Customer. It's like telling you to review. Uhm it was good but it seems more like a prologue to a story or a pre-slash thing. It just feels incomplete. But it's a good start of a story. Maybe you can make a challenge out of it or something.