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PLEASE UPDATE SOON. I like the story and would like to see what happen.

I really like this story but could you please make the chapters longer? Please? I want more!

I like it, but it's going a bit slow..
hurry please!

the chapters are too short, but i like it. keep at it!

PLEASE UPDATE SOON. I like to see what happen next.

=_=.....please don't take this as flaming, because, regardless of how it may sound, I really don't mean it that way, but the chapters are ridiculously short. A decent-length chapter should take about an hour to read and should have a complete idea central to the story's theme; it should be impossible to read 4chs in 10mins. For example, the first chapter should include Naru-chan's capture, the relationship between the captors (not necessarily Uchihacest, just how they interact with each other, do they get along? do they fight? is one coercing the other to help him rob?), mention the little bag again (whether it's Naru trying to find out what's in it or him wondering why he hasn't seen it since the robbery), how do the Uchihas treat Naru (as just a tool to be used to ensure their safety from the cops or as a sex slave or wherever you were planning on going)? Try not to end the story until the reader has a definite idea of what Naru-chan's life's gunna be like from here on out.


Again, I'm REALLY REALLY SORRY if you were insulted by my comment......(sorry!)

ooo...me likey...

PLEASE UPDATE SOON. I like to see what happen next to naruto and can you make the chapters longers.

Please update soon! I can't wait to find out what happens

Awwwh...sort chapters. But I'm hooked! I cant wait for the next chapter. I cant wait to see what happens next.