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October 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Grate chapter!!!! I'm happy that you are back and writing again. I can’t wait to read the next chapter so please keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.
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October 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Aww! This chapter was kinda short. O.o Is Sasuke going to be a prick for the rest of his life??? Poor blondies...
~Wind
~Wind
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September 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
omg i love the storie i wanna nother chappie plzzzzzzzz
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September 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OK, well I have a few things to say about your story.
1. You really NEED a Beta reader to go through your story and fix many of your spelling and grammar mistakes, much of the mistakes make it a lot harder to read your story and actually get the idea you're trying to convey.
2. You need to learn that dialogue (or just a conversation between the characters) is not a story, it's pretty much like you're writing a play and not a story. You need A LOT MORE DETAIL. Your story is slightly vague due to the fact that there is little detail.
3. Overall I like your plot idea, with a little more detail your plot idea would come through a lot more. As a writer myself, I know that spelling and grammar can be a bitch... though I usually invest in a beta reader to go through my story so that most of my mistakes get taken care of. Just know that I'm not trying to be mean, this is just something you can take into consideration and may be use to improve your stories, since for everyone there's always room for improvement.
1. You really NEED a Beta reader to go through your story and fix many of your spelling and grammar mistakes, much of the mistakes make it a lot harder to read your story and actually get the idea you're trying to convey.
2. You need to learn that dialogue (or just a conversation between the characters) is not a story, it's pretty much like you're writing a play and not a story. You need A LOT MORE DETAIL. Your story is slightly vague due to the fact that there is little detail.
3. Overall I like your plot idea, with a little more detail your plot idea would come through a lot more. As a writer myself, I know that spelling and grammar can be a bitch... though I usually invest in a beta reader to go through my story so that most of my mistakes get taken care of. Just know that I'm not trying to be mean, this is just something you can take into consideration and may be use to improve your stories, since for everyone there's always room for improvement.
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September 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
"If I were gay"..I just love this song!XD
I like your story,although the chapters are quite short.But Anyway I like the tone,keep writing!=)
I like your story,although the chapters are quite short.But Anyway I like the tone,keep writing!=)
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September 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
What will happen next? Please continue!!
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September 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yesh. I love this. You update quickly. I love the story. But, you need a beta. Yeah. You do.
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September 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i like how you had gaara dry snitch (player hatin' sob). i can't wait to see the next chapter.
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September 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Loved it hope Sasuke divorces Ino soon so he can be with Naruto. Loved it I can't wait to read more so update soon.
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September 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon!