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August 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I feel so sad for Sasuke. The fic was wonderful, fantastically hot and all that, but him crying alone at the end made me want to cry too. Are you planning to write anything more in this sort of story-line? Something on the relationship between Kakashi, Iruka, and Sasuke would be great, just to see if things can work out for them all. ;)
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August 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
(Hokay. I'm going to try this again... last time I hit the review button, it took me to the '15 minutes of downtime' screen, and my review was lost. ^^)
Holy hell, Shikyaku, I don't know why you were doubting this story. There's so much good stuff going on, meaningful interaction on so many levels, and it's touching, and intriguing, and fucking hot all at the same time.
Sasuke and Sai? You already showed me (yes, YOU showed me, not Kishimoto... 347 didn't phase me until I read YOUR SasukexSai ^_^) that they were sexy together, but now there's more depth there, and surprising sweetness. In these later chapters, when he's interacting with Sasuke, Sai seems so very human (which is difficult to do, I've found out.^_^)
Ohhhh... now I understand what you mean when you said 'a clothes thing'. I love Tenzou's clothing fetish... really there is something terribly sexy about half-gloves, half-shirts, masks. *shivers* XD Tenzou stole Kakashi's discarded mask... that made me happy.
Kakashi's control over the situation was wonderful. It was great how Sasuke was the only one who even questioned his fuck commands, but even though he questioned them, he still obeyed them.
And Tenzou... oh Tenzou, you old-fashioned thing you, unable to hold fast to your respected sempai's views on multi-partner fun... God, I love teasing, and I just completely melted at the way he got Sai to commit to him.
Eh... I can't remember what else I wrote before. I'm sure I'll remember and tell you later. Just know that I LOVE THIS FIC, I love Shikyaku's Fuck-verse, and I can't wait to see what you do next! ^_^
Holy hell, Shikyaku, I don't know why you were doubting this story. There's so much good stuff going on, meaningful interaction on so many levels, and it's touching, and intriguing, and fucking hot all at the same time.
Sasuke and Sai? You already showed me (yes, YOU showed me, not Kishimoto... 347 didn't phase me until I read YOUR SasukexSai ^_^) that they were sexy together, but now there's more depth there, and surprising sweetness. In these later chapters, when he's interacting with Sasuke, Sai seems so very human (which is difficult to do, I've found out.^_^)
Ohhhh... now I understand what you mean when you said 'a clothes thing'. I love Tenzou's clothing fetish... really there is something terribly sexy about half-gloves, half-shirts, masks. *shivers* XD Tenzou stole Kakashi's discarded mask... that made me happy.
Kakashi's control over the situation was wonderful. It was great how Sasuke was the only one who even questioned his fuck commands, but even though he questioned them, he still obeyed them.
And Tenzou... oh Tenzou, you old-fashioned thing you, unable to hold fast to your respected sempai's views on multi-partner fun... God, I love teasing, and I just completely melted at the way he got Sai to commit to him.
Eh... I can't remember what else I wrote before. I'm sure I'll remember and tell you later. Just know that I LOVE THIS FIC, I love Shikyaku's Fuck-verse, and I can't wait to see what you do next! ^_^
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August 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Whoa so hot! I like your "fucktastical" style. Your moresomes are yummy, and very well written! It was so sexy, the way Kakashi and Tenzo mirrored Sasuke and Sai, and then Tenzo and Sai mirrored Kakashi and Sasuke! Gawd, so hoooot.
Great job!
Great job!
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August 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
awww you meanie i totally cried
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August 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wah! I loved it! Perfect in all ways! But I'm kinda sad for Sasuke and Iruka. Now I know you plan on making Iruka happy but what about Sasuke?
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August 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That maybe the hottest thing I have ever read. The smeyness in this story could no doubt give people nosebleeds.
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August 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
yes, people! XD))) enough talking - down to the fucking))) damn, Shikyaku, you killed me with that chapter, honestly! thank you so much for giving me the link))) i'm sitting in the middle of the univerity computer class looking like a crazy hormone-driven teenager who has just seen a flash of panties XD))) drooling over that hotness...wow, tenzou licking kakashi's tongue through the febric, then kakashi rimming tenzou...oooofff...how do you expect me to study important things and eventually save the world, when my brains get totally preoccupied by your ninjaporn...*drool*...and don't you ever have those depressing thoughts about not continuing this tastiness again!...god, i already can't wait to read the next chapter)))
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August 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Shikyaku...what are you doing to me? you've almost gotten the reasonable and cynical me to cry together with sasuke right now (i did feel my chest tightening, that's for sure)...such a complicated, twisted and cruel relationship...sasuke really is an unlucky guy(((
but i'm glad tenzou found exclusivity with sai through this multi-player game...that attack of posessiveness was beautiful, though the traces of it could be seen from the very beginning...even though, they actually had spectators (which i think didn't really pay too much attention to them), their fucking (sorry, can't call that "lovemaking" XD) was still very intimate...hmm nothing compared to what kakashi and sasuke were doing...
damn! i feel so sorry for sasuke i think, i'm going to slide down into narutoxsasuke XD))) naruto seems like a right guy who would take care of sasuke despite all his weirdness, insecurities and sufferings))) ahhh *runs away to cry in some private place* XD)))
you did a beautiful job!))) the porn was breathtakingly hot and the emotions you put there were so deep...but i'm sad the story's over already...
hmmm can't wait for what comes next :D)))
but i'm glad tenzou found exclusivity with sai through this multi-player game...that attack of posessiveness was beautiful, though the traces of it could be seen from the very beginning...even though, they actually had spectators (which i think didn't really pay too much attention to them), their fucking (sorry, can't call that "lovemaking" XD) was still very intimate...hmm nothing compared to what kakashi and sasuke were doing...
damn! i feel so sorry for sasuke i think, i'm going to slide down into narutoxsasuke XD))) naruto seems like a right guy who would take care of sasuke despite all his weirdness, insecurities and sufferings))) ahhh *runs away to cry in some private place* XD)))
you did a beautiful job!))) the porn was breathtakingly hot and the emotions you put there were so deep...but i'm sad the story's over already...
hmmm can't wait for what comes next :D)))
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August 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
"The next story won't be so graphically real-time fucktastical- I promise." But I like fucktastical.........Actually I just love the way you write everything. I like Yamato and Sai together and I feel sorry for Sasuke and I'm looking foward to your next story. Thanks for writing.
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August 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
When I got to the end and Yamato had to give a final reason, I kept expecting the last line to be "Iruka". From Exclusivity, he seems relegated to the little miss left at home. With all of his attempts at keeping some morals in the bunch, I was hoping that Yamato would have remembered Iruka even if he doesn't actually say it aloud. I'm curious as to what Kakashi's reaction would have been at that moment and how things might have developed (or not as the case may be). Looking forward to seeing how all of this turns out, what other interesting things come up, and what pov you take next.