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September 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
So sad! So beautiful! I luv it. :D
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August 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey love this story and i hope your going to do more chapters :)
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August 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Now that is an interesting take on things, VERY heart warming if I do say so myself. A good read, spelling and grammer good so far as I could see, yup.
Story Grade = A+. For a good old family moment and the extra plot twist at the end.
Grammer Grade = A. I think there was a few errors but if I didn't catch them they don't matter do they?
Length = B. Might have been longer, but as you said it was a short look into that families lives.
Description = A. I enjoyed they way you described the settings bare bones and let the reader fill in the rest with their mind.
GPA 3.8 Keep up the good work.
Story Grade = A+. For a good old family moment and the extra plot twist at the end.
Grammer Grade = A. I think there was a few errors but if I didn't catch them they don't matter do they?
Length = B. Might have been longer, but as you said it was a short look into that families lives.
Description = A. I enjoyed they way you described the settings bare bones and let the reader fill in the rest with their mind.
GPA 3.8 Keep up the good work.
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August 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i really like this story, it's so nice and warm. Also naruto has a family and we all know he needs some love.