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for Detention

by Lyndsay

person Anon
schedule July 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
(I review as I read.)

Heh. Screwed over, "and he wasn’t going to reward the crummy day." Love his adamancy. ^^ . . . . Lemme guess: His teacher's Kakashi, right? . . . . Ooh, dating Sasuke already, eh? Heheheh. (*sly glance*) >_> . . . . Boy, Sasuke sure is a pain, isn't he. :heart: . . . . (*sigh*) Sorry, Naruto, but the fact that you BOTH got detention is your fault. And no, he can't take the blame for you. Now, if he were to blame for something (say, copying YOUR work) and wouldn't confess, THEN I’d have more sympathy with you. . . . Hmm. Well, I guess Sasuke could've at least helped. . . . He called you "stupid," stupid. . . . I gotta say, the lame excuses Naruto's making are rather annoying. Sorry about that. (*smiles apologetically*) . . . . No resistance, Sasuke? . . . . I wonder how they got together in this story. . . . Heh. He's such a tease. . . . They're gonna get busted, aren't they? . . . . Love the dirty talk. Love how stoic Sasuke gets so needy. . . . The humming's cute. And I like the bit about Naruto wanting to go a second round.

Not bad. I think it could've used a longer intro, and the hot scene could've been dragged out longer, but the wording and progression was nice.
person Davey Lockhart
schedule March 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awesome oneshot.
person riddlestar (not signed in)
schedule March 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
you really write good smut. and im always a fan of narusasu. keep it up. :)
person kchan
schedule October 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful piece of smut. I love SasUKE, and seeing him horny like that begging Naruto is just incredibly hot. Thank you very much, made my day.
person cynaga
schedule September 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Everyone loves detention porn and this was especially well written ~ YUM!
person Misa
schedule September 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was just hot! Pretty much straight-forward concept (therefore PWP XD) but a nice read I enjoyed.
schedule September 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Stupid Naruto wants seconds of everything: Sasuke and ramen!

Loved this little jewel of a oneshot.
schedule September 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
LOVE IT! XD Well now. I can go to bed contently. heheh. So much for studying for my test tomorrow too. Oh well. This was worth it. ^^ I just love Naruto as seme. Of course, he's a good uke too. XD