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May 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Grate chapter!!!! I'm so happy that you are back and writing again. I can’t wait to read the next chapter so please keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.
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February 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Sasuke and Naruto sure have a way of acting so damn bad.
But, I do feel sad for Sakura but she should understand that love is something that anyone can find even her.
Update, Update, Update.
Thanks
But, I do feel sad for Sakura but she should understand that love is something that anyone can find even her.
Update, Update, Update.
Thanks
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December 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter One--Jeez, some people really want him, huh.
Chapter Two--The cliffhanger line was interesting.
Chapter Three--Heheheh, I liked the bit about Sasuke thinking about what he’ll make Naruto do. . . . TO SASUKE: “Sign of weakness” my foot--it’s called “politeness,” you jerk! TO AUTHOR: I like the play-the-dumb-blonde idea. Oooh, great line to end the chapter with.
Chapter Four--TO NARUTO: Oh, he might. He just might. . . . Very perceptive. TO AUTHOR: I like Naruto’s slow train of thought for when he thinks about Sasuke’s intentions.
THANK YOU for choosing “Sasuke-sama.” It’s much more sexier than the other titles, in my opinion. ^_^ (!!)ALERT!(!!) Check the last paragraph of this scene . . . Did you mean “cook” dinner?? Cuz if you did, you may want to take a close look at the word “cook.” ^_~
Mmm, nice shower scene.
Chapter Five--TO NARUTO: Oooh, that’s a wicked idea, heheheh. But I wonder if you’ll get away with it. . . . HAH! Good one! “What else do you require from me tonight?” That was great. XD
TO AUTHOR: These cliffhangers are awesome!! They’re so erratic and at odd moments--they’re great!
Chapter Six--Whoaaaa, nice move: They’re both determined to get the other on their knees. Now I wonder who’s going to succeed. TO NARUTO: XD Where do you come up with these lines. Great afterthought about not having any clothes. XD TO SASUKE: Who’s the clueless one???
Chapter Seven--Fifth time, hee hee. XD . . . Uh-oh. TO SASUKE: Give it up, kid, you ain’t gonna win. TO AUTHOR: I like the bit about Sasuke fondling the boxers--very sensual. TO SASUKE: I’m with you--I didn’t need to hear it either. XP
Chapter Eight--Strange noises . . . we all know what that means. ^_^
Nice lawnmowing scene, by the way. That’d be pretty good to draw.
TO SASUKE: Good excuse, Sasuke, I’d buy it. TO AUTHOR: Must you give him so many at once? The poor boy’ll go numb. . . .
Chapter Nine--Verrrry good, but stop censoring it!!
Wha--Awww man! You really had me there, and it turns out to be a dream?? Arrgh.
Chapter Ten--Hee hee, pinch, pinch. ^_^
Oh my, he begs. . . . I liked that part.
Waaah, I don’t like censoring!
Very sexy. It seems a little original too.
Chapter Eleven--“Hot piece of hotness” . . . That says it all. ^_^ (Actually, I think there is such a word.) Very hot and cute (kinda OOC, though, but I don’t mind that much).
Chapter Twelve--“More of a rice person” . . . I liked that line. I wonder why same-sex marriages aren’t tolerated in Konoha . . . ? Guess it makes for nice plot. Um, I think the old guy at the ramen place is named Teuchi or something like that; the shop is called “Ichiraku” though.
I love the “Code Talk” between the two at the ramen stand. Hee hee, Teuchi’s so clueless. ^^ You misspelled “Shikamaru” by the way. XD
Uh-oh, I hope they don’t get busted or hurt. I hope their friends will be okay with it.
Chapter Thirteen--Hee hee, Shikamaru doesn’t care. ^ ^ Good, Kiba’s cool.
I guess that law makes sense, though it seems kinda farfetched.
EWWW, I didn’t need that mental image. XP . . . ACK!!! Gai and Ibiki?!? :ded:
Hmm, would Jiraiya help? Let’s hope he’s not homophobic.
O_O I luuuuuv Sasuke’s move on Naruto. XD Oh yes, thank you, THANK YOU for the SasuNaru! ^_^ I’M WITH YOU, INNER SAKURA!! XD
Um, “dai jobu?” ? What’s that mean??
Okay, now that was totally sad, what Sakura thought in her dream of being all alone from then on. PLEASE let her be okay later. T_T
Chapter Fourteen--Mmm, I think Kiba should’ve told her that she’s not unlovable first before he said anything else to her question.
I thought the Kyuubi being anti-war was a little weird, since he attacked the village in the past and all. But I guess maybe it could’ve been out of grief and rage for his offspring; maybe some Konoha ninja killed it.
Hee hee, Sasuke was being totally honest with Tsunade. XDDDDDDD
Oh boy, I can’t wait for the party! ^_^
OVERALL: Needs some proofreading. Nice cliffhangers, though. DROP THE CENSORING!!
Chapter Two--The cliffhanger line was interesting.
Chapter Three--Heheheh, I liked the bit about Sasuke thinking about what he’ll make Naruto do. . . . TO SASUKE: “Sign of weakness” my foot--it’s called “politeness,” you jerk! TO AUTHOR: I like the play-the-dumb-blonde idea. Oooh, great line to end the chapter with.
Chapter Four--TO NARUTO: Oh, he might. He just might. . . . Very perceptive. TO AUTHOR: I like Naruto’s slow train of thought for when he thinks about Sasuke’s intentions.
THANK YOU for choosing “Sasuke-sama.” It’s much more sexier than the other titles, in my opinion. ^_^ (!!)ALERT!(!!) Check the last paragraph of this scene . . . Did you mean “cook” dinner?? Cuz if you did, you may want to take a close look at the word “cook.” ^_~
Mmm, nice shower scene.
Chapter Five--TO NARUTO: Oooh, that’s a wicked idea, heheheh. But I wonder if you’ll get away with it. . . . HAH! Good one! “What else do you require from me tonight?” That was great. XD
TO AUTHOR: These cliffhangers are awesome!! They’re so erratic and at odd moments--they’re great!
Chapter Six--Whoaaaa, nice move: They’re both determined to get the other on their knees. Now I wonder who’s going to succeed. TO NARUTO: XD Where do you come up with these lines. Great afterthought about not having any clothes. XD TO SASUKE: Who’s the clueless one???
Chapter Seven--Fifth time, hee hee. XD . . . Uh-oh. TO SASUKE: Give it up, kid, you ain’t gonna win. TO AUTHOR: I like the bit about Sasuke fondling the boxers--very sensual. TO SASUKE: I’m with you--I didn’t need to hear it either. XP
Chapter Eight--Strange noises . . . we all know what that means. ^_^
Nice lawnmowing scene, by the way. That’d be pretty good to draw.
TO SASUKE: Good excuse, Sasuke, I’d buy it. TO AUTHOR: Must you give him so many at once? The poor boy’ll go numb. . . .
Chapter Nine--Verrrry good, but stop censoring it!!
Wha--Awww man! You really had me there, and it turns out to be a dream?? Arrgh.
Chapter Ten--Hee hee, pinch, pinch. ^_^
Oh my, he begs. . . . I liked that part.
Waaah, I don’t like censoring!
Very sexy. It seems a little original too.
Chapter Eleven--“Hot piece of hotness” . . . That says it all. ^_^ (Actually, I think there is such a word.) Very hot and cute (kinda OOC, though, but I don’t mind that much).
Chapter Twelve--“More of a rice person” . . . I liked that line. I wonder why same-sex marriages aren’t tolerated in Konoha . . . ? Guess it makes for nice plot. Um, I think the old guy at the ramen place is named Teuchi or something like that; the shop is called “Ichiraku” though.
I love the “Code Talk” between the two at the ramen stand. Hee hee, Teuchi’s so clueless. ^^ You misspelled “Shikamaru” by the way. XD
Uh-oh, I hope they don’t get busted or hurt. I hope their friends will be okay with it.
Chapter Thirteen--Hee hee, Shikamaru doesn’t care. ^ ^ Good, Kiba’s cool.
I guess that law makes sense, though it seems kinda farfetched.
EWWW, I didn’t need that mental image. XP . . . ACK!!! Gai and Ibiki?!? :ded:
Hmm, would Jiraiya help? Let’s hope he’s not homophobic.
O_O I luuuuuv Sasuke’s move on Naruto. XD Oh yes, thank you, THANK YOU for the SasuNaru! ^_^ I’M WITH YOU, INNER SAKURA!! XD
Um, “dai jobu?” ? What’s that mean??
Okay, now that was totally sad, what Sakura thought in her dream of being all alone from then on. PLEASE let her be okay later. T_T
Chapter Fourteen--Mmm, I think Kiba should’ve told her that she’s not unlovable first before he said anything else to her question.
I thought the Kyuubi being anti-war was a little weird, since he attacked the village in the past and all. But I guess maybe it could’ve been out of grief and rage for his offspring; maybe some Konoha ninja killed it.
Hee hee, Sasuke was being totally honest with Tsunade. XDDDDDDD
Oh boy, I can’t wait for the party! ^_^
OVERALL: Needs some proofreading. Nice cliffhangers, though. DROP THE CENSORING!!
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December 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
LOVE this story!!
I look forward to the next update whenever that may be :D
I look forward to the next update whenever that may be :D
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December 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Loved it I can't wait to read more so update soon.
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November 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter!!!!!!!!! I can’t wait to read the next chapter so keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.
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November 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Please update - I love it that you change the role of the uke and the seme! Even if only for a dream... It should happen in reality *pervy grin*
When you update, could you leave me a mail? muveszno@citromail.hu
thx! Also, if you feel like having a beta-reader, you can contact me ^.^ (your writing is good, much better than many I have read, but there are still some misspellings, and he never calls Tsunade Baa-sama, that would be respectful somewhat, only baa-chan :D)
When you update, could you leave me a mail? muveszno@citromail.hu
thx! Also, if you feel like having a beta-reader, you can contact me ^.^ (your writing is good, much better than many I have read, but there are still some misspellings, and he never calls Tsunade Baa-sama, that would be respectful somewhat, only baa-chan :D)
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November 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hurray for a terrific story! More, more...
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October 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Sweet chapter!!! can't wait till the next!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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October 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey! I think this is a great story. thanks
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