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for Kiba's Private Hell

by Rainbow

schedule April 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hi! I do hope and pray that you will not abandon this story, I've really enjoyed it so far!!
Please continue!!!
person the_boyfriend
schedule March 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
hi,

like it, Why did you stopped it there! T_T, shif snif. chap 4 and 5 are the same. Is there more coming, this is the first time KxK story I read. When Kiba is in heat, I love it (behavoiur modification: dominating, slutty, begging, aggressive, bitchy. Although, I think Kiba is a uke). Well, will see with youre story. Keep the good work.

read you later
schedule November 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awww!! I hate waiting!! When is the next chapter going up????
person cynaga
schedule November 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love this story but...


* There was no transition from Choji sitting on Kiba's chest to running after Kakashi
* Lots of misspells and words left out here and there
* Ch 4 & 5 are the same!

I love your creativity - YOU NEED A BETA BABY!


I want more!!!! Please fix and continue...
schedule November 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I looooove your story, please don't leave me waiting too long for next chappie!!!!!!!!!!
person Tiffany
schedule October 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awesome story! I enjoyed it so much! I cant wait for more! XD
schedule October 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very good. This story just gets better
schedule October 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh, this is going to be fun. I wonder why anybody but Kiba? What must never happen again? I sense a history here. Update soon and thank you.
person katsuyo
schedule October 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
LOL...

It's not half bad. It will be interesting to see how your story develops as you add more chapters, since I get the impression this is not going to be a one shot.

One small word of advice - be consistent in terms of key plot facts as you work on this. I find doing a quick pre read of the previous chapters or having the basic story breakdown list on hand, helps tremendously in terms of the story quality.

A story break down list is essentially a bare bones plot list of what you plan on doing with your story. Yes - plots change all the time but having something down to refer to - helps you keep on the right track and prevents you from losing a great idea. If you plan on making a change in your plot - put the change down on the list.

Keep an eye on grammar and don't be afraid to give the rough draft to your friends to read and offer suggestions to improve the story.

The best suggestion I can make to you as a writer is to have fun with this... and don't let reader's criticisms upset you too much. Not everyone will have good things to say... it's just the nature of the beast.

Good luck!

sincerely,

katsuyo
person Word_Slave
schedule October 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hi- just wanted to say I really enjoyed this!! Write more soon.!
Slave