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for Wide of the Mark

by Hellagoddess

schedule October 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ah...an anti-fangirl story with attitude. Jumping in after chapter 3 with my first review, I have to say that it is an enjoyable read. There are plenty of snippy one-liners from Sasuke, which are oh so fun. Not sure how he's going to handle the situation when he finds out what Hiashi whispered to the servant...but! Well done, nicely written, with very few errors. Great job.
person unknownthreat???@
schedule October 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hi me again, just read the 3th chapter and i through it was wonderful, cant wait to read the next and i cant wait to find out how Nejis going to find out sasukes going to be his new wife. REALLY CANT WAIT, PLEASE UPDATE SOOOOOON!
person Anon
schedule October 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Update! This is getting good.
person Dragon7
schedule October 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I Love it chapter 3 was great and I know chapter 4 will be even better so update soon.
person nwalmaer
schedule October 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*snickers* It figures that Sasuke would turn out to be the 'perfect choice' by NOT trying to impress [for once. heh] I love the fact that he's so selfpossessed even when being assessed by Hiashi in a WTF-situation [YAY. IC-NESS!] and waitaminute; is that Naruto I spy as the blonde chick or what o.O?

Anyhow, I can't see Neji happy about having a strange *cough* girl foisted off on him [caged bird issues anyone?] and TEH HAWT SEXXORS anticipation aside I eagerly await THAT little confrontation, not to mention how/why Sasuke's going to go through with it [clan reasons? he gets stuck in the jutsu? gets blackmailed/another curse seal slapped onto him?]

Question: why's Hiashi rounding up the cattle, I mean cows, er girls anyway, when he could just get a random clansperson...or is it something to do with preserving the bloodline? [Have I just answered my own question?_? and sorry if you already answered this - I'm halfasleep...again -.-']

So, yeah, love your Sasuke [silly boy - to get rid of the fangirls just embrace your sexuality and get yourself a possessive boyfriend, though that might mean yaoi-fangirl Sakura following you around it can't get any worse, right? ;P] and Hiashi = O_O parent material as usual. Would love to see the other kooky Hyugas at some point and - OH! Was the blonde chica Naruto visiting Hinata in disguise 'cause that would be *LOL* the win :D

Will stop rambling now...like *now*

- Sleepy
person unknownthreat???@
schedule October 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
just finished the 2nd chapter and its great,
PLEASE UPDATE SOOOOOOON!
schedule October 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
aww..the chapters are too short! update soon~
person DangoLover139
schedule October 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You have to write more this is awesome. I will be forced to cyberly maul you if you don't. I am quite serious.
person Telpei
schedule October 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ahahahahahaha!!!! That's friggin priceless. Poor Sasuke, he just can't get a break. And of course once he was on the cart he couldn't blow his cover...his disguise seems to be working and he wouldn't want those devils - er, girls, to find out about it so soon. *giggle* I can't wait to see Neji's reaction when he finds out, and how Sasuke will deal with it. I'm usually a sasunaru fan, but you've definitely caught my interest with this one! Please update soon!
person Dragon7
schedule October 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Loved it I can't wait to read more so update soon.