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January 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Reminds me of a doujin I read. Cute.
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October 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I commend you for stating that you got the idea from a doujinshi you read. However, you need to give the proper credit to both the work and the author...that's the way a disclaimer works.
The name of the doujinshi chapter your work is mirrored on is called "Song of Going Around the Moon Tonight." It's from the Yukimachiya Collection 2.1 and it's by the artist, Yukimichiya.
I hope that helps!
Sincerely,
katsuyo
The name of the doujinshi chapter your work is mirrored on is called "Song of Going Around the Moon Tonight." It's from the Yukimachiya Collection 2.1 and it's by the artist, Yukimichiya.
I hope that helps!
Sincerely,
katsuyo
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October 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Um - not so bright... the artist is Yukimachiya... not Yukimichiya. My bad. lol
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October 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
lol i read this doujinshi too! Its in sasuxnaruislove.snowfaerie.net and I loved it. You're story was great execpt for the japanese part.It's konichiwa
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October 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
At least credit the doujinshi...
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October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is straight out of a doujinshi (Yukimachiya to be exact), except for the last lemon. I wish you would put warnings up that you're using the work instead of calling someone else's your own.
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October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Okay...it wasn't half bad. Two things though... When did Naruto change out of his Sexy no Jutsu form. I don't see that part in your story.
The other thing - this plot is way too familiar to me...in fact, I own the Doujinshi this story is from.
It's from the Yakimachiya Collection 2.1 - who is known for his Sasuke/Naruto ANBU pairing stories.
There are way too many similarities between your story and the doujinshi to be a mere coincidence.
The other thing - this plot is way too familiar to me...in fact, I own the Doujinshi this story is from.
It's from the Yakimachiya Collection 2.1 - who is known for his Sasuke/Naruto ANBU pairing stories.
There are way too many similarities between your story and the doujinshi to be a mere coincidence.
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October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Mmmmmm, what a sexy mission!! I would have to say, of course make a sequel! I want to know what happens between Naruto and Sasuke, and I am sure that Naruto wants to be able to see Sasuke during the lemon next time ;)
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October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great story, one question though, did you have Naruto use te female watashi wa to make it more believable he was Aya-chan or was it supposed to be the male boku wa? Also it's konnichiwa.
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October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hell yeah!! make a sequal!