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hahaa demon sex makes backlash chakra waves!! this fic is so awesome!! update again soon!!

Couple of questions. How are Temari and Tsunade-sama talking to eachother? How did Tsunade-sama make it all the way to Suna by teleporting. Most teleporting is in short distances. Wouldn't she be exhausted by doing that long of a teleport? Otherwise thanks for a great chapter I can't wait for more.

YAY! YOU UPDATED! HUZZA! HUZZA! Oh my GOD! I absolutely LOVED the *Ahem* Action in these last two chapters! My absolute Fav! I'm so happy that it's going to be a three way! Oh and poor Jiraya and the others, it seems that they have a few "problems" of their own! And that healing blue chakara, was it all three of their energies or was it just Sasuke? I mean, was there a REASON it was Sasuke that was able to calm the demon's lust? (I mean besides hot and heavy three way action) I don't think if if was anyone else it would have ended with the same results. Is he a "healer" of some kind or am I thinking about this way to deeply for what it was? Anyway! One last question: are there any CLOTHES in that dome? 'cuz if there isn't, poor Temari is going to see WAY more of her baby brother that she wants to. ^o___o^
Happy Writing!
Black Dragon Queen

P.S. ~ Ignore the negative criticizers above! Not naming names ((starts with t, ends with green) but I think that some people complaining about the Claws and the Food issue in their reviews clearly have little narrow minds and need to expand their horizons some more. "Claws" in the Naruto realm do not damage, they only heighten the sensations! And who needs food when you're getting screwed six ways to heaven and back? If they did die from lack of food, you could bet all three died with smiles! And I know that sometimes when an idea strikes, the muse gods don't exactly iron out all the details, (my story as one example) but no story is ever perfectly plotted out. Stories have their own ideas of how to be written, and damn it if we have no choice but to listen.

Kallipso also states, that obviously this person who we are not naming (t-green) obviously did NOT read your story correctly as you DID mention that a) they were living off their chakara and b)obviously Shukaku did remain in Gaara somewhat for him to react to Kyuubi in the first place!

and you definitely do NOT need creative writing courses,
This story is as creative as it gets! KEEP IT UP!
Black Dragon Queen and Kallipso

Another hot lemon!! Thanks for the new chapter, it was great! :)

WoW... I loved Sasuke's reaction when he found Naruto and Gaara! Oh and I know they are hungry especially Naruto and Gaara!

I LOOOOve it. This is one of the best fanfics out there. Hope you update reeeaaaallllly soon.

MORE! moremoremoremoremore!

holding a fic hostage for reviews is tacky and immature. Granted, this isn't exactly the best written fic I've ever read, since you've all but admitted that you didn't even plot it out in advance. At least you seem to give a token nod to grammar and spelling. Taunt =/= taut. You seriously need to worldbuild and work on your narrative structure. And putting "hooked claws" up somebody's ass would cause serious damage - the lining on the inside of you ass is incredibly thin. A major wound up there would cause no end to bleeding, infection, and possibly other problems as well. Also, demons though they may be, what are they doing for food and water? Are you just going to pull some "nurr they're demons" deus ex machina bullshit to explain why they aren't dead? And if they've got massive troll fangs ripping through their lips, their lips should be pretty fucking mangled by now. As in, where's my plastic surgeon? Naruto might heal up, but Gaara didn't get healing, he got shielding.

Sign up for a few creative writing courses. You need to learn how to plan and structure.

You are going to update soon aren't you? Cause I may go mad waiting. You wouldn't want that now would you?

As you may have guessed I really like this fic. I think it could do with a little more detail in the non-sex related scenes, but over all very good.