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OMG!!! NEED MORE!!! Do they have run away or come back??? Does Neji get the ass kicking of a lifetime?? Will Hinta become clan head??? Please finsh the story!!!! Please!!!

Can we say DATE RAPE anyone? D.A.T.E. R.A.P.E. Ok, now that we've made the fact that this is fiction and virgins in the real world do not enjoy being raped... maybe kinky experienced people do but not a virgin... so not right. Poor Hinate escapes Neji only to be date raped by her own teammates, tragic. Don't get me wrong I LOVE kinky shit, but rape... not good. But as it is fiction we'll just pretend she'd likes it. It’s kind of hard to read this with so many typos.

Please update soon@@!!

This story is ok. You do need to check your grammar and spelling. Hinata just had a very traumatic experience. I can see her taking comfort in her team mates, but I don't see her being able to have sex with both of them within a few days. Maybe after a few months of living with them, but the way they just "dive" right in is almost like they are forcing her to accept what they are doing to her. She may be comfortable with them, but after Neji, she will have overcome her trauma. Eventually, ending up in bed with Kiba and Shino could happen, but there needs to be more than just them jumping right in. This is not meant to discourage you from writing, this is just meant to give you some constructive criticism to help you develop as a writer. It takes a lot to put your story up for others to read, that I do commend you for. Happy writing Tricia

okay. this is looking...okay. it could use a beta, to be honest. but the story itself is good. i like the plot so far, and i can't wait to get to some smut. keep writing!!~

that was so awesome! i kind of like this neji......i so can't wait to read more!!

OMG I love this story already . please hurry with the update ! Neji being sadistic and kind of sex obsessed is great but the fact that hyugaacet is my favorite just makes t his sooo... Squeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee