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February 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
awww i just love his story. XD i know this sounds REALLY weird demo... could you like i don't know... have konohamaru teach sasuke the sexy no jutsu just to you know, spice things up in the bedroom again with sasuke and naruto. XD i just love the idea of sasuke doing a sexy no jutsu.
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February 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm just lovin this story, but i still don't like the fact sakura's with naruto. And if tsunade has some kind of reinforcements for sasuke to have children then, him and naruto should have kids. But still up-date soon :)
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February 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMG, this story is so AWESOME! I wish Naruto would just break it off with Sakura though, the longer he stays with her, the harder it's going to be in the end. What did Sasuke mean when he thought that the rat masked anbu was another of Naruto's conquests? He doesn't think that Naruto slept with that guy does he?
I love that it turned out Naruto was the captain of the anbu and he beat Tsunade, people sure have been underestimating him huh?! Your writing is excellent and the plot is really addicting!
Do you email your readers to let them know when you update? Just curious because I got spoiled with FF dot net since they send you an email when a story your reading gets updated and it appears that this site does not have that feature. If you do then my email is shadowphoenix143@comcast.net, if you don't, thats ok, I will just add this to my bookmarks and try to remember to check on it occasionally.
I love that it turned out Naruto was the captain of the anbu and he beat Tsunade, people sure have been underestimating him huh?! Your writing is excellent and the plot is really addicting!
Do you email your readers to let them know when you update? Just curious because I got spoiled with FF dot net since they send you an email when a story your reading gets updated and it appears that this site does not have that feature. If you do then my email is shadowphoenix143@comcast.net, if you don't, thats ok, I will just add this to my bookmarks and try to remember to check on it occasionally.
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January 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I smell a rat, I can see Hiroshi giving problems later in the future. I am happy that Sasuke has been made ANBU captain. I am also happy that there have been more Naruto/Sasuke moments in here. Hey a question though, can Naruto get pregnant? If so that would definitely solve his and Sasukes' problems as far as kids go. If not they could always adopt. It seems like already Naruto's feeling for Sakura are starting to change, heck in the last scene he just totally ignored her when he knew that she was going to start talking about marriage. Anyways looking forward to the next chapter.
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January 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Starting chap 9. Lovin' it so far. Not crazy about the whole Naruto and Sakura dating thing though...
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January 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
(I review as I read.)
Chapter 17: Yup, he’s awake. . . . Jeez, Sasuke, calm down, for God’s sake . . . for once, I mean. Naruto’s just trying to work this out. . . . I hate to say this, but I think Sasuke’s just a little OOC here. . . . Whoa! “Meet in secret?” >:D . . . Hmm, “don’t care about the council or the clan as long as you are mine?” I believe the part about the council, but the clan I would’ve thought he’d be a little more reluctant. (Sorry for my bitching, please forgive.) . . . Nice line: “We’ll just say it’s a backup because you’re so damn picky.” ^^ . . . Oh, for heaven’s sake, Sasuke, it was a freakin’ JOKE! Geez! . . . “Naruto hated listening to the man speak to him so formally in private.” He may hate it, but I love it! It makes the story interesting! . . . “This is what you got after you decked your Hokage?!” Maybe not, Sasuke, but it could be what you get after you decked the Most Unpredictable Ninja. ^^ . . . Nice last line to the scene. X)
Kinda funny about the blood-red eyes scaring everybody. I wonder if they were this scared of their previous Hokage? XD . . . The short two-liner paragraph starting with “Naruto leaned onto the table,” I think he could have used a better choice of words or reasoning to the council. Maybe something about him “being trusted to fill the role of Hokage ought to be good enough to trust in his decisions” or something like that. Just a suggestion, you don’t have to listen. (*pleads sorry*) . . . Okay, the reasoning after that one guy sat down was better. . . . Interesting ending.
Chapter 17: Yup, he’s awake. . . . Jeez, Sasuke, calm down, for God’s sake . . . for once, I mean. Naruto’s just trying to work this out. . . . I hate to say this, but I think Sasuke’s just a little OOC here. . . . Whoa! “Meet in secret?” >:D . . . Hmm, “don’t care about the council or the clan as long as you are mine?” I believe the part about the council, but the clan I would’ve thought he’d be a little more reluctant. (Sorry for my bitching, please forgive.) . . . Nice line: “We’ll just say it’s a backup because you’re so damn picky.” ^^ . . . Oh, for heaven’s sake, Sasuke, it was a freakin’ JOKE! Geez! . . . “Naruto hated listening to the man speak to him so formally in private.” He may hate it, but I love it! It makes the story interesting! . . . “This is what you got after you decked your Hokage?!” Maybe not, Sasuke, but it could be what you get after you decked the Most Unpredictable Ninja. ^^ . . . Nice last line to the scene. X)
Kinda funny about the blood-red eyes scaring everybody. I wonder if they were this scared of their previous Hokage? XD . . . The short two-liner paragraph starting with “Naruto leaned onto the table,” I think he could have used a better choice of words or reasoning to the council. Maybe something about him “being trusted to fill the role of Hokage ought to be good enough to trust in his decisions” or something like that. Just a suggestion, you don’t have to listen. (*pleads sorry*) . . . Okay, the reasoning after that one guy sat down was better. . . . Interesting ending.
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January 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 18: Thanks for the response! (We all make spelling errors. I’m a slight spellcheck-nazi, though. Just a slight one. *sweat*) ^_^
“Rat-masked ANBU.” Kinda funny how Sasuke’s irritated and that sounds almost like an insult. ^^ . . . Heh. I forgot Naruto was the Hokage. Silly me ^.^' . . . Me neither; I haven’t seen it either, Sasuke. . . . 15 minutes? Eesh. Must be absorbing work. . . . Hahah! That’s a great twist, the ANBU eavesdropping. . . . You took the words right outta my mouth, Sasuke. . . . Whaa?! Why?! Why do they have to work together?? . . . I likes Dog Mask. . . . Whoa, of ANBU! Geez, Naruto sure has a lot of faith. . . . “You should never feed an Uchiha’s pride.” I gotta remember that line. . . . O.O XD I like Naruto’s private title for Sasuke. XD. . . . Awww, darn. -- Uh-oh, Sakura. . . . Yes, you’re intruding. . . . (*snort*) She says “Hn.” ^^ I know where she got that from. ^^ . . . Oh dear, this doesn’t look good. She’s gonna be really hurt when he dumps her/she finds out. If he dumps her/she finds out. . . . Why are they staring? The Third was good with kids too. . . . “Kage?” Shadow? . . . (*sigh*) With fame/rank comes groupies. . . . (*snicker*) Sorry, but um, “‘You’re eating her?’ Teuchi asked incredulously.” Forgot the other ‘e’. ^^ Oh, and you also mean “least” not “lest.” . . . I liked Ayame’s entrance.
Um, “shoo-in” not “shoe in,” though it has a nice ring to it. . . . Wuh-oh, Hiroshi just dissed the captain. ^^ . . . Oh dear, does Hiroshi know how close to the mark that line was? . . . I really liked the paragraph when Sasuke took the mask off and revealed his identity. It made for nice drama. . . . (*snicker*) Konohamaru’s on the list. That’s really funny; I sure didn’t see it coming. ^^ I liked his point, too. . . . Nice ending to the chapter. I liked Sasuke’s words to the ANBU.
“Rat-masked ANBU.” Kinda funny how Sasuke’s irritated and that sounds almost like an insult. ^^ . . . Heh. I forgot Naruto was the Hokage. Silly me ^.^' . . . Me neither; I haven’t seen it either, Sasuke. . . . 15 minutes? Eesh. Must be absorbing work. . . . Hahah! That’s a great twist, the ANBU eavesdropping. . . . You took the words right outta my mouth, Sasuke. . . . Whaa?! Why?! Why do they have to work together?? . . . I likes Dog Mask. . . . Whoa, of ANBU! Geez, Naruto sure has a lot of faith. . . . “You should never feed an Uchiha’s pride.” I gotta remember that line. . . . O.O XD I like Naruto’s private title for Sasuke. XD. . . . Awww, darn. -- Uh-oh, Sakura. . . . Yes, you’re intruding. . . . (*snort*) She says “Hn.” ^^ I know where she got that from. ^^ . . . Oh dear, this doesn’t look good. She’s gonna be really hurt when he dumps her/she finds out. If he dumps her/she finds out. . . . Why are they staring? The Third was good with kids too. . . . “Kage?” Shadow? . . . (*sigh*) With fame/rank comes groupies. . . . (*snicker*) Sorry, but um, “‘You’re eating her?’ Teuchi asked incredulously.” Forgot the other ‘e’. ^^ Oh, and you also mean “least” not “lest.” . . . I liked Ayame’s entrance.
Um, “shoo-in” not “shoe in,” though it has a nice ring to it. . . . Wuh-oh, Hiroshi just dissed the captain. ^^ . . . Oh dear, does Hiroshi know how close to the mark that line was? . . . I really liked the paragraph when Sasuke took the mask off and revealed his identity. It made for nice drama. . . . (*snicker*) Konohamaru’s on the list. That’s really funny; I sure didn’t see it coming. ^^ I liked his point, too. . . . Nice ending to the chapter. I liked Sasuke’s words to the ANBU.
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January 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh, you do-ist suckith! That is a horrible place to end it! I'm all getting jiddery with exhitement about the coming up fights and then you END IT! GRRRRRRR. Evil. absolute evil. you better update soon! *pouts*
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January 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm sorry I can't read this anymore. I just can't stand Sakura winning. She is a disgusting little leach. The thought of her & Naruto just makes me cringe. If Naruto was with Hinata I would have been able to handle it but not with that "lower than dirt beneath my feet" Sakura. Thanks for the Lemon before the nightmare that I call Sakura. I think I'll just end it nicely in my head.
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January 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I LOOOOOVVVVEEEE this story so much!!! 'Last Chance' is really interesting because I love how Naru/Sas relationship is but with the nice angsty but dramatic twist of them having to sneak around behind Sakura's back. And the smex! :) Yummy. I have finally read the whole story up to date and man, it's awesome seriously. Please update asap. Your story is really friggin' sweet. Total love.